Poetry, Dreams In Motion.
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "The Truth of Purpose"A collection of poetry.
5 total reviews
Comment from Sacred Heart
I love the way you think! The sentiments you have written are beautifully written and very inspirational. Makes one think deep and that is a good thing! Keep writing and I'll keep reading your amazing poetry. Take care, Love Light Patty
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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I love the way you think! The sentiments you have written are beautifully written and very inspirational. Makes one think deep and that is a good thing! Keep writing and I'll keep reading your amazing poetry. Take care, Love Light Patty
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Thanks so much for dropping in to read through my poetry! I very much enjoyed yours :-) I hope that you find the rest of my work to be just as good! I read through your profile and I see that you have been very active here on Fanstory (I am returning after a year away!) and I would be delighted to know what you think of my newest contest entry, Remember.
Thank you again for stopping by and reading my work.I look forward to seeing you arounf FS!
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
I don't know that I agree with your premise in its entirety, but I can't fault you for the poem, either. Made me think and want to sit down and argue it with you.
Good stuff.
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I don't know that I agree with your premise in its entirety, but I can't fault you for the poem, either. Made me think and want to sit down and argue it with you.
Good stuff.
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from carl8447
This has a very different rhyme sceme, almost none. BUt your words were inspiring and thought provoking. Did you write this while you were at Stanford?
I like the rhyming couplet at the end that kind of shook things up.
Good read
Carl
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This has a very different rhyme sceme, almost none. BUt your words were inspiring and thought provoking. Did you write this while you were at Stanford?
I like the rhyming couplet at the end that kind of shook things up.
Good read
Carl
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from jadapenn
A valid point. What's to gain by wasting time to dream about why and wherefore. Best enjoy the here and now and look to the future. I loved your choice of words. I'm no poet - is this free verse? It tells your story well.
jada
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A valid point. What's to gain by wasting time to dream about why and wherefore. Best enjoy the here and now and look to the future. I loved your choice of words. I'm no poet - is this free verse? It tells your story well.
jada
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from K-Patrick
Rhyme ? Good
Rhythm/Flow ? Large poems tend to drag. This one not so much. It flowed well. I think the deliberate pauses ... helped.
Appeal ? It is not a simple poem to follow. What does it all mean? Is it about life and aging. About decision making? About life after love? Hard to say.
My Aesthetic Judgment ? I liked it for a larger poem it was well done and a very good read - if you read it two or three times. The first time leaves the reader wondering if something was missed. I'm going with 5 stars only because I could not pinpoint why I think it is a 4 star poem.
?Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them.? -- David Hume (1757)
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Rhyme ? Good
Rhythm/Flow ? Large poems tend to drag. This one not so much. It flowed well. I think the deliberate pauses ... helped.
Appeal ? It is not a simple poem to follow. What does it all mean? Is it about life and aging. About decision making? About life after love? Hard to say.
My Aesthetic Judgment ? I liked it for a larger poem it was well done and a very good read - if you read it two or three times. The first time leaves the reader wondering if something was missed. I'm going with 5 stars only because I could not pinpoint why I think it is a 4 star poem.
?Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them.? -- David Hume (1757)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
