CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Making Love"A collection of poetry
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Comment from mushroom
i like the scene set in this, the words used throughout tell it all and the last line quite inspired, great choice of artwork too
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i like the scene set in this, the words used throughout tell it all and the last line quite inspired, great choice of artwork too
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from Falafa
Oh! Great job! And isn't THAT the truth! Well done. Well thought out and expressed. Love the picture match. Good luck in the contest.
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Oh! Great job! And isn't THAT the truth! Well done. Well thought out and expressed. Love the picture match. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from bard owl
Excellent. I remember the feelings of first love or lust or just extreme admination. I didn't know the difference at fourteen, but I was absolutely besotted by what I thought to be love. Your poem is a very sweet look at young love and an excellent contest entry. Best of luck with this gentle write. Blessings, Linda
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Excellent. I remember the feelings of first love or lust or just extreme admination. I didn't know the difference at fourteen, but I was absolutely besotted by what I thought to be love. Your poem is a very sweet look at young love and an excellent contest entry. Best of luck with this gentle write. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from adewpearl
Great tectractys form - for the moment our desire discerns not the difference - it is amazing how the morality police continue to perpetuate the myth that lovemaking can't be truly pleasurable without some lifelong, dramatic commitment - you are ever so right about this! I love the repeated D sounds in the final line that helps emphasize the message.
Brooke
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Great tectractys form - for the moment our desire discerns not the difference - it is amazing how the morality police continue to perpetuate the myth that lovemaking can't be truly pleasurable without some lifelong, dramatic commitment - you are ever so right about this! I love the repeated D sounds in the final line that helps emphasize the message.
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from bkrighter
Nice job, both with the form and in capturing a truth, or what I suspect is a truth, anyway. I find the last line a little awkward, but I think that is mostly a function of the form. It is very hard to leap from 1-2-3-4 to 10.
Happy Valentine's Day to you and yours.
Steve
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Nice job, both with the form and in capturing a truth, or what I suspect is a truth, anyway. I find the last line a little awkward, but I think that is mostly a function of the form. It is very hard to leap from 1-2-3-4 to 10.
Happy Valentine's Day to you and yours.
Steve
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from glacierbabe
Absolutely beautiful. This is one of the best I have read that expresses passion and romance. So few words to speak such a large truth. Excellent.
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Absolutely beautiful. This is one of the best I have read that expresses passion and romance. So few words to speak such a large truth. Excellent.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Wow...exoctically stated..now after I take a cold shower I will be right back to allow five stars. Keep on keepin' on, I enjoy your mind.
Dave
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Wow...exoctically stated..now after I take a cold shower I will be right back to allow five stars. Keep on keepin' on, I enjoy your mind.
Dave
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
Comment from Firefly54
Oh, hello again! Loved this little piece.. and how very true it is at such times. Hope you do well in this contest too... its quite beautiful
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Oh, hello again! Loved this little piece.. and how very true it is at such times. Hope you do well in this contest too... its quite beautiful
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Hi Firefly! Thanks so much for your great compliments and review! Very much appreciated, Sue
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue...I know the contest is over and sadly neither one of us won. What's up with that anyway? I just came across your poem and I wanted you to know I think it is lovely. In the beginning it is always about lust! Blessings....chey
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Hi Sue...I know the contest is over and sadly neither one of us won. What's up with that anyway? I just came across your poem and I wanted you to know I think it is lovely. In the beginning it is always about lust! Blessings....chey
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Yes, our chemicals do the talking first. Ha!! Yeah, what's up with us both not in a tie for the win? :-) Thanks so much for your great review. I do love a tetractys! I don't even remember if I reviewed yours. Will have to check. I don't know what I'm going to do with my bulging "inbox"!! Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Arkine
Ah, but so many fall prey to this trap. Hormones overriding rational thought. Does it start with lust and go to love? When we see people, is it the beauty or beast that we look at before digging inside? I would say, as far as society goes, that's generally the case, for what man/woman would approach an ugly person with romatic thoughts? Great job on this poem!
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Ah, but so many fall prey to this trap. Hormones overriding rational thought. Does it start with lust and go to love? When we see people, is it the beauty or beast that we look at before digging inside? I would say, as far as society goes, that's generally the case, for what man/woman would approach an ugly person with romatic thoughts? Great job on this poem!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
