A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Colleen, Denise, and Mary"Autobiography of abuse
10 total reviews
Comment from medicnate
Sick bastard. Sorry for the language. I had to vent a little. This is so sad and I know you probably don't want the reader to feel sorry for you, but I do.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Sick bastard. Sorry for the language. I had to vent a little. This is so sad and I know you probably don't want the reader to feel sorry for you, but I do.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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It's okay to feel sorry for me, I was still a little girl. But just keep in mind, I survived. Not to give away any secrets, but I am doing pretty well and the book has a good ending.
Comment from Lois Delaney
What a sick man. Someone should of cut his penis right off. It reminds me so much of my husband. When I think of it, I worry he did such things to others, while I didn't know. It seems like you're describing my husband.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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What a sick man. Someone should of cut his penis right off. It reminds me so much of my husband. When I think of it, I worry he did such things to others, while I didn't know. It seems like you're describing my husband.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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I'm describing a lot of men. Thank you for your determination to catch up with my book.
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I have to go to work now. Will continue to read until I catch up. Even though it's heartbreaking, I want to see what came of all of this. I'm sure I will have nightmares. For some reason, this past six months or so, my bed moves. I think I have returned to my husband to wake up at my mother's. One night he laid on me, and I screamed, no, no. He got so angry with me, but hasn't come back. I cried Mom, Mom. This was just a dream. I was married to the man for 42 years.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
My gods. The shock of finding that vile man touching your little sister must have been the most awful thing you could have encountered. As you have said, worse even than what he had done to you. I am so furious about what that man did to you all. I don't have any 6 star ratings to give you, but if I had, I would! Beautifully written. You're so brave. Blessings. Kat
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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My gods. The shock of finding that vile man touching your little sister must have been the most awful thing you could have encountered. As you have said, worse even than what he had done to you. I am so furious about what that man did to you all. I don't have any 6 star ratings to give you, but if I had, I would! Beautifully written. You're so brave. Blessings. Kat
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. Difficult chapter to write, but important.
Comment from jodeecee
Awesome! This chapter is full of information, a lot said to cover the span of years.
Mommy taught us how to change her diapers,/and/ give her a bath. /Teresa I/and we/ fought constantly over who got to feed her.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Awesome! This chapter is full of information, a lot said to cover the span of years.
Mommy taught us how to change her diapers,/and/ give her a bath. /Teresa I/and we/ fought constantly over who got to feed her.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. Not only am I a poor speller, I not the best typist either.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
This is an incredible story. It is terribly difficult to read, but at the same time, the story is so well composed it won't let the reader go. I can feel the child's pain and confusion. It's just awful-unbearable. This man should have been jailed for life! Seraph ~
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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This is an incredible story. It is terribly difficult to read, but at the same time, the story is so well composed it won't let the reader go. I can feel the child's pain and confusion. It's just awful-unbearable. This man should have been jailed for life! Seraph ~
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Yes, it is difficult to read. But I appreciate that you feel it is good enough to do so despite the difficulty.
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Thank you. I value your opinion and appreciate the time you take to read my story.
Comment from Mindtoi
Excellent narrative about a difficult subject. Very well written. You are able to show Valarie's feelings and frame them in the mindset of a nine-year-old. Good job.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Excellent narrative about a difficult subject. Very well written. You are able to show Valarie's feelings and frame them in the mindset of a nine-year-old. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. That was my intent. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from laurelp
I keep reading inspite of the sadness and anger I feel. I never realized that my "normal" life was such a blessing. I am so saddened by what you and your sisters had to go through. Living a life with a monster.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I keep reading inspite of the sadness and anger I feel. I never realized that my "normal" life was such a blessing. I am so saddened by what you and your sisters had to go through. Living a life with a monster.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your comments but don't worry, I obviously survived!
Comment from WRITER1
I just can't understand what makes a man turn into such an animal! He should be taken out and shot. You have done an excellent job on this piece.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I just can't understand what makes a man turn into such an animal! He should be taken out and shot. You have done an excellent job on this piece.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I understand your feelings and at times felt the same way. Your comments are appreciated.
Comment from badaner
As always Smurphgirl, a perfectly delivered piece of prose that continues to draw the reader. A truly heart-wrenching story.
A few hiccups:
"Colleen I would like you to meet your big sister Valerie.
(speech marks missing at the end of the sentence.)
Teresa and I loved having a baby sister. When we weren't in school, we spent all our time playing with Colleen. Mommy taught us how to change her diapers, give her a bath. (and Teresa and I) fought constantly over who got to feed her.
(instead of 'Teresa and I' again - you could use 'we'
Take good care of yourself.
badaner x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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As always Smurphgirl, a perfectly delivered piece of prose that continues to draw the reader. A truly heart-wrenching story.
A few hiccups:
"Colleen I would like you to meet your big sister Valerie.
(speech marks missing at the end of the sentence.)
Teresa and I loved having a baby sister. When we weren't in school, we spent all our time playing with Colleen. Mommy taught us how to change her diapers, give her a bath. (and Teresa and I) fought constantly over who got to feed her.
(instead of 'Teresa and I' again - you could use 'we'
Take good care of yourself.
badaner x
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I truly appreciate the time you have taken to edit my work. I can use all the help I can get. Again, thank you.
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
Now, the first thing I noticed about this storyline was that you provide your readers with the utmost amount of imagery. The characters read realistic and bring a lot to the table. There hadn't appeared to be any room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Now, the first thing I noticed about this storyline was that you provide your readers with the utmost amount of imagery. The characters read realistic and bring a lot to the table. There hadn't appeared to be any room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I truly appreciate your kind words.
