The Minute Poem
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Comment from XR15
Hi again
As a father myself I really empathise with this. I'm sure mothers do even more. Yet again same comment - incredibly beautiful presentation.
Cheers
Chris
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Hi again
As a father myself I really empathise with this. I'm sure mothers do even more. Yet again same comment - incredibly beautiful presentation.
Cheers
Chris
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Chris, thank you - yes, I think fathers get lots and lots of joy from newborns also :-D Brooke
Comment from katiekit
This is a lovely poem that sums up the first precious moments of your relationship with your child. I liked the simplicity of the wording used to convey what i see as quite complex emotion.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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This is a lovely poem that sums up the first precious moments of your relationship with your child. I liked the simplicity of the wording used to convey what i see as quite complex emotion.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Your insightful interpretation is most welcome - thank you! Brooke :-)
Comment from Jo52800
Aww...this is so sweet and makes my heart swell. You did a great job of capturing the feelings. Good luck in the contest. I found no issues with your rhyme, syllables or meter. Very nicely crafted.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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Aww...this is so sweet and makes my heart swell. You did a great job of capturing the feelings. Good luck in the contest. I found no issues with your rhyme, syllables or meter. Very nicely crafted.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2009
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What a lovely response - thank you!! Brooke
Comment from Firefly54
I loved the easy flow and rhythm to this minute poem, and it certainly portrays emotions. I can always find a favourite line in yours, and here it was,
"He'd strike a pose, then scrunch his nose," It's the strike and the scrunch that do it. Lovely word, scrunch
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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I loved the easy flow and rhythm to this minute poem, and it certainly portrays emotions. I can always find a favourite line in yours, and here it was,
"He'd strike a pose, then scrunch his nose," It's the strike and the scrunch that do it. Lovely word, scrunch
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Baby nose scrunching sure is one of life's coolest things! Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from Adam Smith
Wonderful poem full of the emotions and all of the impractical practicalities of this love relationship between mother and child. To think that wiggling a toe could fill a heart so! I loved the use of the word drear. You continually find ways to exercise your creativity and it's a pleasure to witness.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Wonderful poem full of the emotions and all of the impractical practicalities of this love relationship between mother and child. To think that wiggling a toe could fill a heart so! I loved the use of the word drear. You continually find ways to exercise your creativity and it's a pleasure to witness.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Adam, I appreciate your attention to the craft of the poem as well as to its subject matter - thank you!! Brooke
Comment from grassroots08
Sure soften us up with the motherly talk that warms every heart that cares about the babe. My heart goes out to the mothers who give their young the tender care that they are crying out for. This was well penned and each line could almost stand alone. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Sure soften us up with the motherly talk that warms every heart that cares about the babe. My heart goes out to the mothers who give their young the tender care that they are crying out for. This was well penned and each line could almost stand alone. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Don, thank you - we mothers appreciate your support :-D Brooke
Comment from laurelp
Beautiful sentiment. Wonderful choice of a picture. Your poetry is beautiful. I can see why you hold the number one spot. You more than deserve the five stars.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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Beautiful sentiment. Wonderful choice of a picture. Your poetry is beautiful. I can see why you hold the number one spot. You more than deserve the five stars.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2009
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That is a lovely thing for you to say - thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from Little Miss Thing
This is so adorable. You really touched my heart with this poem. It was a little hard for me to keep the beat but I think that's just my lack of rhythm. So grade A very good.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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This is so adorable. You really touched my heart with this poem. It was a little hard for me to keep the beat but I think that's just my lack of rhythm. So grade A very good.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your most kind review, Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
Beautifully done. The joy that a mother has for her baby shines through every line. Perfect form, natural rhymes, nice flow. I think you have a winner here. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Beautifully done. The joy that a mother has for her baby shines through every line. Perfect form, natural rhymes, nice flow. I think you have a winner here. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Thanks so much for your encouraging comments even if I'm not winning! LOL Brooke
Comment from Nicnac
Perfect meter. Nicely done, Brooke.
I'll have to try a minute poem. I've not written one yet.
I really like this style.
This poem is adorable. I love the nurturing and loving feeling it conveys. There is nothing as dear and miraculous as the birth of a child.
Simply beautiful!
No suggestions. I like everything about this - Great flow, wonderful message and a pleasant presentation.
~Nic
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Perfect meter. Nicely done, Brooke.
I'll have to try a minute poem. I've not written one yet.
I really like this style.
This poem is adorable. I love the nurturing and loving feeling it conveys. There is nothing as dear and miraculous as the birth of a child.
Simply beautiful!
No suggestions. I like everything about this - Great flow, wonderful message and a pleasant presentation.
~Nic
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Nic - yep, a newborn trumps just about anything else!! Thanks, Brooke :-)
