The Listener
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Bread and butter"Telepathy makes business trust easy. Or should.
3 total reviews
Comment from utopian_dream_x
This is a well written chapter with no spag. You are developing your characters well and I like your dialogue, I found it very realistic!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This is a well written chapter with no spag. You are developing your characters well and I like your dialogue, I found it very realistic!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Adri7enne
An interesting premise, and not altogether off base. There's a new TV show out called "The Mentalist" and it has much the same idea. Listening, and paying attention to body language seems to be a specilized science now, probably because it's so rare.
"She gave fleeting smile" Did you purposely leave out the "a"
"After a pasta and tea in a local cafe, Laura hailed a cab and made her way towards the part of town Ted had rented an office for the afternoon." That's a run on sentence where you didn't finish one thought before you started another. I'd look that sentence over.
Good read.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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An interesting premise, and not altogether off base. There's a new TV show out called "The Mentalist" and it has much the same idea. Listening, and paying attention to body language seems to be a specilized science now, probably because it's so rare.
"She gave fleeting smile" Did you purposely leave out the "a"
"After a pasta and tea in a local cafe, Laura hailed a cab and made her way towards the part of town Ted had rented an office for the afternoon." That's a run on sentence where you didn't finish one thought before you started another. I'd look that sentence over.
Good read.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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I've not seen that show. In this story, Listeners tend to be bad at body language, as they don't need it.
Thanks for the spag and the review. Glad you liked it
Comment from ulster3
Hi snodlander
This is a good flowing and intriguing write. I never heard the term listeners, did you make that up? This kind of thing has always fascinated me, but now someone is out to kill them. One would think they would be hard to target. Thanks for this interesting read. Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Hi snodlander
This is a good flowing and intriguing write. I never heard the term listeners, did you make that up? This kind of thing has always fascinated me, but now someone is out to kill them. One would think they would be hard to target. Thanks for this interesting read. Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Yes, I invented the term. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the review
