Through Broken Glass
One must find their meaning through the sherds.10 total reviews
Comment from nora arjuna
Mike, I read your review of my 'Ode' and wondered about the FSESP. (What's that? Scratch head lol). And you sort of related your comments to this post.
This poem? Not, not really a sad one, just making your stand and convictions clear. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Mike, I read your review of my 'Ode' and wondered about the FSESP. (What's that? Scratch head lol). And you sort of related your comments to this post.
This poem? Not, not really a sad one, just making your stand and convictions clear. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Sometimes trophies are nice, but they can also remind you of your failures. In this case, that the feelings of friendship weren't shared. One sublimely faded away, another showed you were merely a part of her play. I starved at both as I was punished for going in the first place. It was only faith and conviction that I went.
ESP stands for extra sensory perception, such as mindreading. FS is Fanstory. I also coinded the word FS-BS when members try to mess with me. lol
Tomorrow, I am posting a poem that tells a story. Sort of a poetic multitasking. I am telling a story, sort of my Kodo game ( Like the tea ceremony, they have incense ceremonies and games on it actually figures into creating Japapese poetry,) and I am using the varieties of a particular brand within it. I am illustrating the poem with artwork that my mother painted. I have to research the Iris in Japanese symbolism. It has both the look of incense smoke and Kimonos.
Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. I appreciated it too.
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FanStory extra sensory perception - hmm.... better not mess with you. :)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Mike! No, I don't think this is a sad poem--I felt it was more a poem of hope and a belief in yourself that what you have to offer will one day be cherished by someone. I like hope...it's one of my favorite emotions. Very strong poem, Mike.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Hello Mike! No, I don't think this is a sad poem--I felt it was more a poem of hope and a belief in yourself that what you have to offer will one day be cherished by someone. I like hope...it's one of my favorite emotions. Very strong poem, Mike.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mike,
what I liked right away is when you introducted your poem when you stated-
'One must find their meaning through the sherds.'
Then your poem telling us what happens when one rids of his ugly past and looks forward to a new life --
Maybe the bearer won't find nourishment
for the work in planting his seeds.
But he means to provide a great taste
to savor for someone else that needs.
A great philosophy poem, I'm glad I dropped by.
Gert
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Hello Mike,
what I liked right away is when you introducted your poem when you stated-
'One must find their meaning through the sherds.'
Then your poem telling us what happens when one rids of his ugly past and looks forward to a new life --
Maybe the bearer won't find nourishment
for the work in planting his seeds.
But he means to provide a great taste
to savor for someone else that needs.
A great philosophy poem, I'm glad I dropped by.
Gert
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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I appreciated that you visit. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
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smiles Mike
Gert
Comment from laurelp
No need to look at trophies to
that make his emotions sway
This one line doesn't do it for me. It didn't make sense or quite fit with the rest of the poem. Everything else seemed to flow very well.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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No need to look at trophies to
that make his emotions sway
This one line doesn't do it for me. It didn't make sense or quite fit with the rest of the poem. Everything else seemed to flow very well.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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He competed so that a love of his could have the trophy, the second time he was there to greet a friend that he thouht he had, but didn't. No he has the baubles to remind him that he wasn't wanted. Mayabe that your help determine that meaning.
Thank you for the review. Mike
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Mike,
Perhaps it will remain God's will that
efforts go unnoticed and he remains alone.
Not meant for nothing but a life's meditation for him, for his soul to hone.
I loved the entire poem, but this stanza is my favorite. The rewards may be meant for later on, but they will come. And I do believe that for some life is meditation for our souls to hone. Thank you for sharing this beautiful soul searching poem. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Hi Mike,
Perhaps it will remain God's will that
efforts go unnoticed and he remains alone.
Not meant for nothing but a life's meditation for him, for his soul to hone.
I loved the entire poem, but this stanza is my favorite. The rewards may be meant for later on, but they will come. And I do believe that for some life is meditation for our souls to hone. Thank you for sharing this beautiful soul searching poem. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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I call those lines a hard reality. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, goodmorning and a lovely write to hit the spot with tea this morning!! smile, actually coffee today! I always enjoy your thoughts and poetry that twist and turn on the garden path to create a unique piece of art that sets one thinking over the morning dawn...have a good day, much love twomoon...thanks for the visit
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Mike, goodmorning and a lovely write to hit the spot with tea this morning!! smile, actually coffee today! I always enjoy your thoughts and poetry that twist and turn on the garden path to create a unique piece of art that sets one thinking over the morning dawn...have a good day, much love twomoon...thanks for the visit
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Things were too familar to me, one is an auuspmtion on poetic intentions. If you paste the sherds together, it references the convention. The first I went there for my first post, the second to catch up with a friend. I think because of the way they advertise is that they buy peoples lust for bauble over the reasons that they state. Sometimes this site seems to do the same. After the convention, not only did I end up working my but off, but thinking as well. I just want my world to understand why I post here. Not assume, not conjecture and not to get into anyone's pants or life. If it envolves love then I want it to return to me of its own volition. But hopefully something that was stated is, "Best Friends!" I haven't felt that since the convention. I feel this is the best place for me at this time and hopefully always,with possibly a bigger role. Trust bearer. LOL
I thank you for stopping by and your compliments and reivew. Having to catch up with work, I got to scram. Mike
No the garden path is tonight if I don't get home too late.
Comment from Judian James
Very nicely done Mike. I enjoyed this one very much. One of your best I think. It's familiar and poignant. Endearing and real. Sensitive and sensible. excellent
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Very nicely done Mike. I enjoyed this one very much. One of your best I think. It's familiar and poignant. Endearing and real. Sensitive and sensible. excellent
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Hopefully not too familiar. Thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
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No, familiar is good. It means people can identify with what you're saying
Comment from justmade
A selfless act never goes unrewarded my friend.
It may take time but the rewards will always come.
There is always someone who needs it.
I loved this poem it spoke for itself.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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A selfless act never goes unrewarded my friend.
It may take time but the rewards will always come.
There is always someone who needs it.
I loved this poem it spoke for itself.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Perhaps, but the reward may be different or at time far in advance. Thank you for your compliments and this review. I have been working very hard, too. Mike
Comment from MiscMayzee
I think perhaps you have one word too many in the first stanza. Having 'to' and 'that' side by side seems like an oversight more than an error. (Those darn word processors!)
Other than that, I like your style. At first I was wondering if parts of it weren't disjointed, but then I saw that there is a consistency throughout. The last two stanzas were awesome!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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I think perhaps you have one word too many in the first stanza. Having 'to' and 'that' side by side seems like an oversight more than an error. (Those darn word processors!)
Other than that, I like your style. At first I was wondering if parts of it weren't disjointed, but then I saw that there is a consistency throughout. The last two stanzas were awesome!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Not disjointed, the trophies are made of glass, much like those houses. It all has double meanings. You can't blame the computer as the first word processor is the human. I thank you for reviewing this, thank you for your review.
Comment from Minglement
This is an expressive and evocative poem, and I don't necessarily see it as sad. You have some lovely little gems tucked in here. Good job.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This is an expressive and evocative poem, and I don't necessarily see it as sad. You have some lovely little gems tucked in here. Good job.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Thank you very much, I enjoyed this review. Mike
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You're very welcome. Nice, nice. M
