A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Big Red Rooster"Autobiography of abuse
27 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is very good and I wish some of the children I work with could read this, of course, they are only in the first grade. You write about their life. I guess I wish their parents could read this and realize this is what they are doing to their children
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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This is very good and I wish some of the children I work with could read this, of course, they are only in the first grade. You write about their life. I guess I wish their parents could read this and realize this is what they are doing to their children
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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That was my hope. To present my life as it happened from the pov of who I was at the time.
Comment from maxic59
this chapter has described a childs curiosty to a 'T'. I loved the pov from the child, I know it is a story of abuse but you have started with a very powerful picture.
I have chickens in my back yard, always have and my youngest daughter use to sit on a plastic garden chair in the chook pen, hold one like a doll and talk to it for hours, she had them mesmerized lol
well done
onya mate :)
cheers max
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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this chapter has described a childs curiosty to a 'T'. I loved the pov from the child, I know it is a story of abuse but you have started with a very powerful picture.
I have chickens in my back yard, always have and my youngest daughter use to sit on a plastic garden chair in the chook pen, hold one like a doll and talk to it for hours, she had them mesmerized lol
well done
onya mate :)
cheers max
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Good to know I wasn't the only one fascinated by the little chicks. Glad you liked this one. It is one of my fondest memories.
Comment from c_lucas
The innocence of youth is often destroyed by the cruel reality of adults. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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The innocence of youth is often destroyed by the cruel reality of adults. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your very kind review. I am pleased you liked this one. I was a very quiet, solitry child who preferred my own company to that of others.
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You're welcome. I was not sexually abused, but I felt separated from my siblinbs (8 brother and 5 sisters) by my heritary bone disease. I enjoyed being by my self and when I learned, reading books.
Comment from MariaMarsden
Wow! - I have read some of your later chapters of this book, but thought I'd start working my way through it from the beginning. I was really touched by this chapter, compelling and can relate to being more interested in animals than people.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2009
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Wow! - I have read some of your later chapters of this book, but thought I'd start working my way through it from the beginning. I was really touched by this chapter, compelling and can relate to being more interested in animals than people.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2009
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Thanks. I was a shy kid and like to keep to my self. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from MsRefusenik
That was delightful. I hadn't thought about the fact that "from a child's viewpoint" meant an entry into the magical world of fantasy and play of children. You were so sensitive though. Just a precious, fragile little angel waiting for your doom that I know is coming. But so far so good. I enjoyed that a lot. I won't review every chapter, but enough to let you know how I am coming. Wonderful child-like writing. Maryellen
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2009
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That was delightful. I hadn't thought about the fact that "from a child's viewpoint" meant an entry into the magical world of fantasy and play of children. You were so sensitive though. Just a precious, fragile little angel waiting for your doom that I know is coming. But so far so good. I enjoyed that a lot. I won't review every chapter, but enough to let you know how I am coming. Wonderful child-like writing. Maryellen
Comment Written 19-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind review. Yes, I went deep into my childhool memories to portray myself as who I was, and you are right. I was a very sensitive, sweet child literally at the mercy of the world around her. No, don't both reviewing each chapter. But I would like the ocacional comment on how you view the abuse affecting the child...how it took away so many choices that may have taken her life into a different direction.
Comment from medicnate
Another great chapter. We are starting to learn more about you as a child. The imagery is wonderful in this chapter. I felt like I was in your front yard. The emotions are strong and true. I actually became sad when you stepped on the ant, hehe.
I liked this line: lilac tree standing guard beside my bedroom window. (very nice)
Great job here.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Another great chapter. We are starting to learn more about you as a child. The imagery is wonderful in this chapter. I felt like I was in your front yard. The emotions are strong and true. I actually became sad when you stepped on the ant, hehe.
I liked this line: lilac tree standing guard beside my bedroom window. (very nice)
Great job here.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Thank you. I wanted to reader to get to know who I was as a child. I am pleased you found this interesting. Thank you for your kind review. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from Lois Delaney
This is a great story. I felt the same way when we did chickens in the fall. I was born in 1946, so I think we have a lot in common. I sure do like your writing. I will continue to read. You have been so faithful to me. I had no idea you were such a great writer.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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This is a great story. I felt the same way when we did chickens in the fall. I was born in 1946, so I think we have a lot in common. I sure do like your writing. I will continue to read. You have been so faithful to me. I had no idea you were such a great writer.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. This is a difficult story to read but I sincerely felt it needed to be written. It has its ups and downs, but remember, I survived.
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
What a sweet and innocent chapter. I do like the taste of chicken, but I don't like seeing the butchered. That's horrible. I understand completely where you were coming from. Great write and I'll be reading the rest of your novel. Thank you for sharing your life journey with us.
Rachel
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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What a sweet and innocent chapter. I do like the taste of chicken, but I don't like seeing the butchered. That's horrible. I understand completely where you were coming from. Great write and I'll be reading the rest of your novel. Thank you for sharing your life journey with us.
Rachel
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I am pleased you liked the chapter and look forward to your comments on others.
Comment from raw form
Hey there Smurphgirl I thought this was a good start to your story and it flowed well, the imagery was excellent I saw one sentence didn't read to well and thats was about it
I smiled, wondering if they warning each other of some impending danger or,
the sentence above sounded off but I enjoyed the story and will continue to read.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Hey there Smurphgirl I thought this was a good start to your story and it flowed well, the imagery was excellent I saw one sentence didn't read to well and thats was about it
I smiled, wondering if they warning each other of some impending danger or,
the sentence above sounded off but I enjoyed the story and will continue to read.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you for you comments. I'll look at the sentence and see what I can do
Comment from jodeecee
I was reading your latest post, and was compelled to read this in entirety. The part about stepping on the ant, was absolutely touching, moving, everything about it, stirred emotion inside of me. This is great work.
All the wonderful sounds of life filled the air around me. Somewhere between the birds chirping above, a dog barking next door and',' bees humming a few feet away',' I could hear chickens clucking.
The only place I had to re-read.
(Maybe moving the apostrophe from and- to behind away.)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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I was reading your latest post, and was compelled to read this in entirety. The part about stepping on the ant, was absolutely touching, moving, everything about it, stirred emotion inside of me. This is great work.
All the wonderful sounds of life filled the air around me. Somewhere between the birds chirping above, a dog barking next door and',' bees humming a few feet away',' I could hear chickens clucking.
The only place I had to re-read.
(Maybe moving the apostrophe from and- to behind away.)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2009
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I agree. That line needs work. Thanks for the input.
