Dear Lexi
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Once""Let the little children come unto me." ~ Jesus
20 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's crazy how everything stops and things get rearranged so fast for a baby. Even though we are given nine months it just seems that things change and our ways of thinking from thinking only of ourselves to thinking about someone we haven't even met...Everything changes really fast...But in a good way
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2009
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It's crazy how everything stops and things get rearranged so fast for a baby. Even though we are given nine months it just seems that things change and our ways of thinking from thinking only of ourselves to thinking about someone we haven't even met...Everything changes really fast...But in a good way
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2009
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absolutely. thanks. love, jan
Comment from LynnRadford
A great first attemt at the form, Jan.
Minute poems tend to grow on you after awhile and like many forms, you'll find yourself writing them all the time!
I have enjoyed following this series, although I have not taken the time to review them all, have found them heartwarming and full of pride!
Can't wait to see a "real" picture!
Lynn
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2009
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A great first attemt at the form, Jan.
Minute poems tend to grow on you after awhile and like many forms, you'll find yourself writing them all the time!
I have enjoyed following this series, although I have not taken the time to review them all, have found them heartwarming and full of pride!
Can't wait to see a "real" picture!
Lynn
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2009
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send me your email address and I'll send real picture. thanks for review. love, jan
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good afternoon poet friend. I love the photo and was immediately atracted to it. Is it of a family member. The poem, now was so very cute and sweet, conversational, a delight! Loyd
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Good afternoon poet friend. I love the photo and was immediately atracted to it. Is it of a family member. The poem, now was so very cute and sweet, conversational, a delight! Loyd
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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no, haven't yet figured out how to transfer my pictures onto fanstory. going to work on that next week. thanks, Loyd. love, jan
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That will be great, Loyd :)
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your notes, which provide a helpful context. You told a complete story in strong rhymes. The picture and colors you chose were perfect, also.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your notes, which provide a helpful context. You told a complete story in strong rhymes. The picture and colors you chose were perfect, also.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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thanks, Joan E. love, jan
Comment from Karen B.
What a beautiful expression of a grandma's love. I'm so glad she is doing fine now, and your daughter also. Nicely written, and fun to read of such joy. Karen
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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What a beautiful expression of a grandma's love. I'm so glad she is doing fine now, and your daughter also. Nicely written, and fun to read of such joy. Karen
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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thanks, Karen. love, jan
Comment from Wendyanne
HI Jan. This is one of the most delightful minute poems I have read. It all seems correct to me. I am glad your granddaughter and daughter are doing well
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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HI Jan. This is one of the most delightful minute poems I have read. It all seems correct to me. I am glad your granddaughter and daughter are doing well
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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thanks, Wendyanne. I struggle when I have to follow the rules. love, jan
Comment from adewpearl
A minute poem for the baby - how sweet is the tone of pure joy in this one. As for the structure of the form - you have the syllables and the rhyme scheme just right. The meter is not always iambic, but you're just writing your first one.
It should have a daDUM daDUM cadence to it.
My daughter also had the cord wrapped a couple times around her neck - hurray for modern medicine and safe births!! :-)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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A minute poem for the baby - how sweet is the tone of pure joy in this one. As for the structure of the form - you have the syllables and the rhyme scheme just right. The meter is not always iambic, but you're just writing your first one.
It should have a daDUM daDUM cadence to it.
My daughter also had the cord wrapped a couple times around her neck - hurray for modern medicine and safe births!! :-)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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absolutely. thanks for the advice about meter. I will work on it. following the rules is tough for someone who is more of a free verse writer. love, jan
Comment from Mike K2
That is a beautiful photograph and hopefully of at home, you replaced it with a real image of mother and daughter. I enjoyed this and found it both touching and well written.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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That is a beautiful photograph and hopefully of at home, you replaced it with a real image of mother and daughter. I enjoyed this and found it both touching and well written.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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yes, plan to replace all pictures in Lexi's book with her own pictures. thanks, Mike K2. love, jan
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi Jan, this is really sweet. It's a Minute form to me. Congratulations to you on your newborn grandchild and I look forward to read your snippets of wisdom. Enjoy your grandma status. :)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Hi Jan, this is really sweet. It's a Minute form to me. Congratulations to you on your newborn grandchild and I look forward to read your snippets of wisdom. Enjoy your grandma status. :)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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thanks, arjuna. I'm loving being nanny jan. love, jan
Comment from luisestable
This creation is cheerful, meaningful, musical, and to the point all at once.
I like the way you wrote each stanza, with a long line at the begining of each followed by e few short lines that finish the job well. The rhyme-scheme here is created and done in a very smart way.
What you describe in this cute poem is very true. Babies can change lives, and everything looks deferent when they come. Yes, they are like a new pearl.
I enjoyed your poem so much that I have decided to become a fan of yours and in honor of you being a grandmother I will let you know that you show signs of being a good poet and your talents are noticeable.
Keep on writing. Your one minute poem does not seem like it was written in such a short amount of time. Great work!
luis.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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This creation is cheerful, meaningful, musical, and to the point all at once.
I like the way you wrote each stanza, with a long line at the begining of each followed by e few short lines that finish the job well. The rhyme-scheme here is created and done in a very smart way.
What you describe in this cute poem is very true. Babies can change lives, and everything looks deferent when they come. Yes, they are like a new pearl.
I enjoyed your poem so much that I have decided to become a fan of yours and in honor of you being a grandmother I will let you know that you show signs of being a good poet and your talents are noticeable.
Keep on writing. Your one minute poem does not seem like it was written in such a short amount of time. Great work!
luis.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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thanks, luis. the style is dictated by the type of poem--the one minute poem. it took more than a minute to write it, for sure. I am honored and humbled you are willing to be a fan. love, jan
