Comment from Mike K2

Excellent

Hopefully not out of the rocker! I enjoyed this poem as with the rest, I find it a well written addition to the book that you are working on.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

Mike K2, I've been told enough I'm off my rocker but I'm more likely to roll off the sofa. LOL. love, jan

reply by Mike K2 on 01-Feb-2009

Have a great week ahead! Mike

Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

Aww - I love the rock and roll hearts. This is an adorable senryu.

In your notes you mentioned that you have trouble distinguishing the difference between haiku and senryu.

The way I understand it, the senryu excludes any references to nature (other than human nature).
A haiku can have humans + nature, or nature excluding humans and often include a season or reference to a season.

Hopefully my understanding helped and didn't confuse you. LOL

Great poem and a wonderful collection your granddaughter will sure treasure.
~Nic

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

thanks, Nic. that's why I often don't say what they are and let the reader figure it out. LOL. love, jan

Comment from mtngalofnc

Excellent

Hi Jan,
Your book for your granddaughter has brought back many sweet memories for me and this poem does so as well. I can remember dancing with my grandson in my arms when he was a baby. He is now 12 years old and almost big enough to pick me up and dance with me. And yes, those hearts do dance. Love your poem and the feelings it evokes. Thank you for sharing. God bless and best wishes!

mtngalofnc

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

thanks, mtngalofnc. some of my favorite memories are dancing with my parents in our old farm house when I was little. love, jan

Comment from Dreamdancer

Excellent

Hello my friend,
So very sweet! I hope that you are going to put all of these into a book for her... Awesome write my friend and thank you for sharing... Dreamdancer

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

yes, a book for her is the plan, Dreamdancer, except her book will have her pictures in it. love, jan

Comment from earthlybeing

Excellent

Another great poem. Love the word play. Haiku is about nature. Senryu is about people. That's the easiest way to distinguish them. I had that problem until I started looking at it in that context. Thanks and keep them coming. Jeanette

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

thanks, Jeanette. I appreciate the explanation. love, jan

Comment from steevie

Excellent

this is so cute!
I chuckled when I read this (be carefull when you 'roll' grandma ... you don't want to snap a hip ...LOL)

hug that baby for me
take care

steve

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

amen, Steve. thanks for the great advice. love, jan

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

this is precious, my friend. the words say just about all that needs saying, don't they. I've rocked and rolled many a mile in my own shoes. lol Great work

Reggie

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

me, too, and I can't wait to do more with little Lexi. thanks, Reggie. love, jan

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Good morning poet friend. So simple and yet filled with motherly love, tenderness and warmth. I know you are enjoying this project and it shows. Loved it, Loyd

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

thanks, Loyd. love, jan

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I love the playful word play of this one - baby rocks, grandmother rolls - it is great that some are sentimental, some fanciful - many moods - dancing hearts - what a way to put the other two lines together - these are great :-)

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

thanks, adewpearl. this one got into my head until I could work it into something. love, jan

Comment from judiblaze

Excellent

My granddaughter is named Lexi also. What a great tribute to your little one. amazing how few words it takes to make a story. Good job

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

thanks, judiblaze. this one got into my head until I could work it into something. love, jan