CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 74 "Something is Missing..."A collection of poetry
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Comment from minopavlic
A beautiful poem, majestically expressing our inner most desire for love. A must read for all who have lost a love,and long for its return. Sometimes now within my own self imposed recluciveness,I feel like the loneliest man on the planet,and yet within this sanctuary of solitude I find a peaceful contentment.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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A beautiful poem, majestically expressing our inner most desire for love. A must read for all who have lost a love,and long for its return. Sometimes now within my own self imposed recluciveness,I feel like the loneliest man on the planet,and yet within this sanctuary of solitude I find a peaceful contentment.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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no_obstacle, I always enjoy reading your reviews. You take a lot of time to ponder what you read. I respect that very much. I feel both ways, depending on the day. Contentment with my solitude, yet the human need for love continues to beckon. Thank you for your generous and thoughtful review. Yours, Sue
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Yes I certainly understand about a welcomed solitude and the desire for a shared companionship, however, even though love on one hand is something we all crave and desire, a beautiful reality within the depths of our minds and souls, love can also be so frightening. Sometimes the fear of being hurt again in itself is an unbearable pain, within those haunting demons, that we choose a self imopsed reclusiveness.
Comment from dportwood
Nice expressive detail - curtains, rugs, furniture, and fabrics do not make a home.
I share your confusion about free verse. I've heard the terms 'prose poetry' and 'poetic prose', which I guess, are both free verse.
Anyway I enjoyed the poem.
Duane
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Nice expressive detail - curtains, rugs, furniture, and fabrics do not make a home.
I share your confusion about free verse. I've heard the terms 'prose poetry' and 'poetic prose', which I guess, are both free verse.
Anyway I enjoyed the poem.
Duane
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Duane, I'll just say that I'm "expressing". Ha! Yes, we can have all those 'things', but without someone to share it all with, it can be very lonely and meaningless. Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful review. Yours, Sue
Comment from NightWriter
"Something is Missing" is a very beautifully written poem. I know, it's missing more people to fill it, LOL. Perfectly written with perfect rhythm. Well done.
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"Something is Missing" is a very beautifully written poem. I know, it's missing more people to fill it, LOL. Perfectly written with perfect rhythm. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2009
Comment from MJMuraco
I consider this a poem and it was nicely written. It flowed well and made the point that not every house is a home. Aesthetics don't make a house a home. The people who live there do.
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I consider this a poem and it was nicely written. It flowed well and made the point that not every house is a home. Aesthetics don't make a house a home. The people who live there do.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2009
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
I have learned the difference:-) One is a story and the other is not... I am still a bit confused over that one.. I liked the feelings within this wonderful piece of prose? LOL... Awesome job dear lady... Dreamdancer
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2009
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Hello my friend,
I have learned the difference:-) One is a story and the other is not... I am still a bit confused over that one.. I liked the feelings within this wonderful piece of prose? LOL... Awesome job dear lady... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 30-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2009
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You're a sweety, Dreamdancer. It's been so honed now, I think everyone is calling it "free verse". LOL!! Always love you reading my work. And your review is appreciated, Sue
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good evening and how are you. What a very nice poem and yet so very sad. You are so correct in describing a house and not a home. Loved it, Loyd
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Good evening and how are you. What a very nice poem and yet so very sad. You are so correct in describing a house and not a home. Loved it, Loyd
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
Comment from adewpearl
alone admiring aesthetics - what a fantastic way to describe a place being a house and not a home, perfect in everything but the warmth a family brings - this is quite lovely - and I'm no free verse expert either - but this has the flow I look for that separates poetry from prose Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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alone admiring aesthetics - what a fantastic way to describe a place being a house and not a home, perfect in everything but the warmth a family brings - this is quite lovely - and I'm no free verse expert either - but this has the flow I look for that separates poetry from prose Brooke
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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I had it written quite long, then had help from jazh to hone it. I'm happy with it now. Free verse is difficult for me unless I'm in a "state" like my "Just Bitchin' poem! HA! Glad you liked it, Brooke. Now, back to the rhymes! :-)) Sue
Comment from Domino
Blimey, Sue, is that your place, when can I move in? ;-)
I'm no free verse expert, but I thought it needed include a splattering of rhyme and metaphors. Oh well, can't get two people ta agree on any form of poetry, LOL.
This is an easy and interesting read with a very strong message, so must pass the test. Better than livin is a dunp with the same devoid feeling. Ray xx
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Blimey, Sue, is that your place, when can I move in? ;-)
I'm no free verse expert, but I thought it needed include a splattering of rhyme and metaphors. Oh well, can't get two people ta agree on any form of poetry, LOL.
This is an easy and interesting read with a very strong message, so must pass the test. Better than livin is a dunp with the same devoid feeling. Ray xx
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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That's why I really love to stick with meter and rhyme. No ambiguity. I do LOVE to read free verse when it is good. But, to write it? Different story. I've done it before when I was EXTREMELY emotional about something. Had tons of conviction at those few moments on those few pieces. Had to give it another try. Oh well, back to my good ole friend: abab / 8-6-8-6 LOL!!!!! Sue
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
What's missing? I think your poem is great. It tells a story I can understand, so it really is a poem for everybody, and it is quite beautiful as well. I like it.
Reggie
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Sue,
What's missing? I think your poem is great. It tells a story I can understand, so it really is a poem for everybody, and it is quite beautiful as well. I like it.
Reggie
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Just a wee bit of a self-pity party about not having the special other to share it with. But, my pity-parties only last for a few hours! Ha! Thanks so much, Reggie. Always, Sue
Comment from joan marie
It appears to be great free verse to me. Although a prevailing sadness througout because there is no one to share it with. Great write. joan marie
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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It appears to be great free verse to me. Although a prevailing sadness througout because there is no one to share it with. Great write. joan marie
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Hi Joan, I have honed it to death since you read it. So, I'm feeling better about it. Yeah, I wanted that sadness to come through. Thanks for your very generous review and comments. :-)) Sue
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That's what I consider a successful write. jm
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Seriously? Do you think it deserves the name "free verse"? I had a ton of help from Jazh. She kicked me in the ass and told me to get back to work! LOL!!!! Love it when someone really wants your work to do well.
