Comment from Sonjalee

Excellent

Again, I really think this poem is really nice and I like it. It aso demonstrates Minute structure.
Children are so special and when they do something like that, it is really special.
It looks like it is okay to say "fromcherished child", not, the cherished child.
Thankyou, Sonjalee

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2011

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011

I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Sonjalee - it's about my firstborn, now in law school :-) Thanks so much. Brooke

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

I think that I now understand what a 'minute poem' is. I really thought this little ditty was so sweet. A gift from a child no matter what is so precious. Thank you for writing this poem. Once I gathered the pace of the poem, I understood it better. Not my choice of pace though.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

Glad you're getting the hang of minute poems, a new form for me that I quite enjoy - thanks so much, Brooke

Comment from suneagle

Excellent

Beautiful words that couple well with the picture, Brooke. Dandelions, buttercups, daffodils too, when in season give the fields a special splendour. Nice.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

Thank you for your most gracious response to this poem, Brooke

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

adewpearl,

Thoughts are expressed and described very well. The theme was a sweet one. The descriptive words you chose were very good.
The imagery was terrific. The flow was smooth.

There were no errors to be found.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

Glad you enjoyed this light poem, and thank you for stopping by to tell me :-) Brooke

Comment from MOSEZICKLE

Exceptional

Very well written and how creative. This should get you in the loop without a doubt. I would not change a thing.

Best wishes,

Mosezickle

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

I'm not sure what getting in the loop means, but it sounds positive, so thank you!! :-)Brooke

reply by MOSEZICKLE on 31-Jan-2009

It mean that you are headed in the right direction toward getting published. Keep it coming and never give up.

Best wishes,

Mosezickle

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

thank you so much for that encouragement!!! you are a kind and generous person :-) Brooke

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

thank you so much for that encouragement!!! you are a kind and generous person :-) Brooke

Comment from boberto

Excellent

Hi, Brooke. Guess I just got out of the hospital again on time to read some good poetry. Good entry in the contest. I don't even remember what I submitted. Good luck Old gal.

Rob

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

this isn't for the contest - I did one on honeysuckle for the contest and then did a few more because I like the form - the hospital?? Rob, behave yourself!! Brooke

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

this was such a lovely piece and you are so right there is nothing more precious that the scraggly flower picked for mommy that wilted on the way home but presented with love and pride...yours, diana

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

Diana, it sure beats any expensive gift I've ever been given. Thanks, Brooke

Comment from Navarre

Excellent

I enjoy the unique rhyme scheme and colors. This type of poetry generally doesn't excite me because it feels empty, "Who cares about a rose?", but you have a unique voice and are technically skilled, so it makes up for it.

Your stuff is what alot of the wannabe transcendentalists on this site yearn to be.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

Thank you so much for such high praise - wannabe transcendentalists - there is one interesting concept! LOL
Brooke

reply by Navarre on 31-Jan-2009

"My Lawn, My Kingdom: Hypothetical musings of a Garden Gnome"

by xXDeepBlackHeartXx


THIS BLADE OF GRASS
THIS TOWER OF GREEN
GOD MADE IT SO SHARP
IT CUT MY SPLEEN


Review: "I liked how you compared grass to knives. Grass can be sharp sometimes! Five Stars!"

Review: "This is the worst poem I've ever read. Five stars."

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

you must be a riot at parties :-D

reply by Navarre on 31-Jan-2009

I'm usually only semi conscious at parties.

Comment from Lisloh

Excellent

Oh,,, this is too good,,, and you must go read my "Dandelions", you simply must,,,:)

Excellent flow, subtle emotions, the tenderness of child-like love,,,

Good show my Friend, good show!
Take care & be safe out there
Lisloh

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

I will be happy to read your dandelions - you should check out my portfolio for dandelions and daisies from several months ago too - we appear to have a common love!! :-) Thank you, Brooke

reply by Lisloh on 31-Jan-2009

BTW,,,

"Dandelions" is chapter 42 within the book "Meanderings of My Mind"

Comment from darrenchelseafan86

Excellent

Very good.

Simplistic. Flows nicely.
You can feel the happiness in this as her son held up his gift.

thanks for the read.

Darren

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009

Darren, thanks for this gracious review, Brooke