Comment from steevie

Excellent

Congrats again on a healthy born Lexi

Your pride and pleasure for the birth of your granddaughter ie easily felt in your words

It will no doubt be a pure joy to have sweet Lexi in your family circle

take care, one and all

again, congrats

steve

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

thanks, Steve. She is a pure bundle of joy, for sure. love, jan

reply by steevie on 01-Feb-2009

you're welcome, Jan
steve

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Jan,

wonderful yet painful memories fill most books we write. This is no exception, huh? Seeing the birth of a grandchild is a wonderful experience, but the pain is a shared experience as well. Great story.

Reggie

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009

they must if we are going to write about real life. thanks, Reggie. love, jan

Comment from babylonia

Excellent

jan,
i'm not totally familiar with carolisa's work but its not unlike something i might do.
your tributes are beautiful. twenty-six hours? oy vey! i think after twelve i would have been begging for a c.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009

I didn't know you did artwork, too. you are so very talented. thanks for your support. love, jan

reply by babylonia on 29-Jan-2009

jan,
i do. it comes in handy when my daughter is begging me to draw pictures. i hope to some day write and illustrate a few children's books.
love,
barbara

Comment from Marathonwriter

Excellent

I enjoyed this. What a wonderful idea to write a book of poems for your grandaughter. It will be a priceless treasure to her. I especially liked the contrast between

twenty-six hour hell

and

daughter from heaven.

Thanks for sharing.
Love, Chris

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, Chris
love, jan

Comment from mslyla216

Good

I love haikus and think it is wonderful you are including them in your book. I particularly like this first one.It seems to have a balance, a kind of symmetry, that is somehow lacking in the second. The syllables are the same, so it is a perfect haiku, but it doesn't resonate quite as well. Maybe the 'exhausting delivery' is redundant of 'twenty-six hour hell. Something like 'fearful mom and grandmother', instead? mslyla

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 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, mslyla216, I'll reflect on that. love, jan

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

I was following this but didn't get notified. Will check to make sure your on my list. I think this is a wonderful idea and will enjoy reading it. joan marie

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, joan marie. love, jan

Comment from davidray

Excellent

Hi Jan!
So here it is ... your first pice post-grandchild delivery. What a blessing fro you all. A terrific job with its one. Enjoyed it immensely and wil look forward to the additions to your book.
Love the perrogative bit. ;)
All the ebst.
Luv,
David

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, davidray. love, jan

Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

Rdfrdmom2, these haikus are wondeful and they do connect if one understands the background. Are not these called Senyru? well done..It is wonderful to chronicle your musings for your granddaughter..and yes the artwork is incredibel.jlsavell

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

you know, they probably are senyrus but I can never keep the two straight. love, jan

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

Sounds like all of the girls in your family are daughters from heaven at some point or another. Mainly, from what I've come to learn, they are heaven sent at delivery when it always seems to be a close call

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

all children are heaven sent. love, jan

Comment from Dogz

Excellent

Congratulations Jan. And to your daughter. 26 hours, wow!. I like both of the poems. And yes they do go together nicely. It ties the pleasure and pain of child birth together that you women go through. Dogz

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, Dogz. love, jan