Comment from mtngalofnc

Excellent

Hi Jan,
Another sweet and well written poem. That last stanza says it all. Thank you for sharing this part of your life. God bless and best wishes!

mtngalofnc

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2009

thanks, mtngalofnc. I try to spend time with her daily. love, jan

Comment from Mike K2

Excellent

I enjoyed this poem and it is well written and the style adds an element of enjoyment. I also enjoyed reading the notes and it is nice to see glimpses into other members lives.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009

thanks, Mike K2. love, jan

Comment from Showboat

Exceptional

Hey Jan,

You and Renie are celebrating the same joy...she got a boy. This wonderful poem made me cry, of course. I'm a softie and little babies just make me smile.

Great poem

Hugs,
Gayle

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009

thanks, again, my wonderful friend. love, jan

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I've never read that book so I might have to check it out. Anyways, You did a wonderful job and this is going to be a wonderful book when finished

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

I just happen to have a copy if you ever want to borrow it. love, jan

Comment from Dogz

Excellent

My kids love that book. All three. I guess I do to. I don't think I've ever heard you this excited in your writing. I'm glad there is a new blessing for your family, Dogz.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, Dogz. I believe Lexi is my muse, for sure. love, jan

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

jan,
this was wonderful and quite a memory you can share one day. the descriptives are excellent and the poem is well written, gentle and beautiful.

Reggie

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, again, Reggie. love, jan

Comment from VICTIMEYES

Excellent

excellent form, structure and flow to this piece, nice job with the rhymes and story , everything works together in the poem.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, again, ES. this is one of my favorites. love, jan

Comment from Nicnac

Excellent

I love this beautiful poem (and humorous author notes)LOL

Oh, the wonderment of a new birth! Is there anything more miraculous?

This is a lovely lullaby. I can picture you reciting this as you pat her back to burp her. It is so dear.

Very enjoyable. No suggestions.
~Nic

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2009

thanks, Nic. In fact, now that I'm keeping her 5 days a week, it's time for me to start sharing that with her daily again. thanks for the reminder. love, jan

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I'm glad they inspired you (per your notes). Your poem captures all the senses and tells the story of this eventful birth into an obviously loving family. Thanks for sharing your joy.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009

thanks, Joan E. love, jan

Comment from earthlybeing

Good

Oh too cute and well written. I love that you used a Baby Bear baby bearish rhythm. Fun, easy to read and enjoy. Thanks, Jeanette

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 Comment Written 27-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009

thanks, Jeanette. love, jan