Dalliance
a whimsical romance86 total reviews
Comment from smiles
Delightful. my mother is a poet, I'm goin to copy this for her, she will love it also.
Fun, light, poetic style.
I really loved how you used the word dalliance. I don't hear this word much.
smiles
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Delightful. my mother is a poet, I'm goin to copy this for her, she will love it also.
Fun, light, poetic style.
I really loved how you used the word dalliance. I don't hear this word much.
smiles
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Smiles, that is so nice that you would share this with your Mom - thanks so much, Brooke P.S. In the real world when my poem is on paper, my name is Brooke Baldwin :-)
Comment from davidray
Cute, and as you say, a whimsical romance. Sometimes its hard to think of the elderly starting out as we have, but its true. Really enjoyed this, Brooke. Very sentimental.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Cute, and as you say, a whimsical romance. Sometimes its hard to think of the elderly starting out as we have, but its true. Really enjoyed this, Brooke. Very sentimental.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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David, I've thought so often about how old people used to be lovers, even toddlers making their own grandparents laugh. Thanks so much, BRooke
Comment from Jo52800
I love this sweet poem. I love the clincher at the end. I love it. I love it. This poem made me smile. The story you tell is a great one for a poem and the word choices were just dated enough to put it all together. Good job. And I don't mean "dated" in a negative way.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I love this sweet poem. I love the clincher at the end. I love it. I love it. This poem made me smile. The story you tell is a great one for a poem and the word choices were just dated enough to put it all together. Good job. And I don't mean "dated" in a negative way.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I know what you mean by dated - I was not taking it wrong !! LoL Thanks ever so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from Adri7enne
God, you're good! That was so cute. I rushed through the first reading like I was eating ice cream. I love both of them. Just delicious, delectable, beautiful images.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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God, you're good! That was so cute. I rushed through the first reading like I was eating ice cream. I love both of them. Just delicious, delectable, beautiful images.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Like eating ice cream - that is the nicest thing anyone has said to me all day long!!! Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from redrider6612
Oh, I loved this! You managed to put in not one, but two neat twists in such a short poem. That's what I call skill. Perfect rhymes, great flow and rythmn, and a sweet denoument. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Oh, I loved this! You managed to put in not one, but two neat twists in such a short poem. That's what I call skill. Perfect rhymes, great flow and rythmn, and a sweet denoument. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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You are making my afternoon - thank you!! Brooke
Comment from tteach
Who knew that this liaison
would spark life-long romance,
that day upon the park bench
when Grandma met my Gramps?
So...this story is true? The message is that one never knows where/how true love will begin. Even on a park bench...when one catches the other's eye.
The image is perfect. The blurriness gives it a dream-like quality that matches well the sentiment in the poem.
Again, a charming poem.
terry
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Who knew that this liaison
would spark life-long romance,
that day upon the park bench
when Grandma met my Gramps?
So...this story is true? The message is that one never knows where/how true love will begin. Even on a park bench...when one catches the other's eye.
The image is perfect. The blurriness gives it a dream-like quality that matches well the sentiment in the poem.
Again, a charming poem.
terry
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Terry, thank you for such warm words, Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
I love it, that is how long lasting relationships. Perhaps both set their traps and yet wanted to be caught in the others. A well written poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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I love it, that is how long lasting relationships. Perhaps both set their traps and yet wanted to be caught in the others. A well written poem.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Precisely - they mutually set traps!! :-) Thanks, Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem that is filled with love. I like reading about the "good ole days" where life was lived at an easier pace. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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A very well written poem that is filled with love. I like reading about the "good ole days" where life was lived at an easier pace. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Charlie, yes, they wooed each other back then too, but the pace was not so frantic. Thank you, Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from fictionwriter
Yet another joy to read. I guess that I should stop reading your stuff. I never have anything to say except praise, but I enjoy them. Great Job.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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Yet another joy to read. I guess that I should stop reading your stuff. I never have anything to say except praise, but I enjoy them. Great Job.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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I have nothing against praise :-D LOL Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from raimie
I love stories like this. My parents met working at a boys club, lol. I met my husband when he backed into me at a gas station. It is always fascinating to me how people meet. Great job, building that little bit of suspense.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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I love stories like this. My parents met working at a boys club, lol. I met my husband when he backed into me at a gas station. It is always fascinating to me how people meet. Great job, building that little bit of suspense.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2009
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He backed into you at a gas station? oh, that needs to be your next poem!!! thanks, Brooke
