CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "Pit Stop"A collection of poetry
38 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
Woo Hoo!
Bravo!
Great job, Sue. This was easy to read, has great imagery and is packed with excitement. Fabulous! You did a great job at following this challenging format. I enjoyed every line.
In the ess, with finesse,
Passed him; Yes! Back in lead with such speed! <--My fav!
The ending is hilarious. This poem is fantastic - and it makes me, a non-racing fan, disappointed you didn't win the race. haha I was rooting for ya!
I loved the descriptions in your notes. Very helpful.
Fabulous writing.
~Nic
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Woo Hoo!
Bravo!
Great job, Sue. This was easy to read, has great imagery and is packed with excitement. Fabulous! You did a great job at following this challenging format. I enjoyed every line.
In the ess, with finesse,
Passed him; Yes! Back in lead with such speed! <--My fav!
The ending is hilarious. This poem is fantastic - and it makes me, a non-racing fan, disappointed you didn't win the race. haha I was rooting for ya!
I loved the descriptions in your notes. Very helpful.
Fabulous writing.
~Nic
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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I was getting a bit too cocky, wasn't I? Ha! Thanks so much for your great review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue
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congrats on the win!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Sixteezkid
Great cadence and definitely great rhyme and you followed the rules with great speed right to the pit stop
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Sixteezkid
Great cadence and definitely great rhyme and you followed the rules with great speed right to the pit stop
Gert
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Gert, thanks very much for your very kind review. Regards, Sue
Comment from Summer Falls
OMG how did you do it? This is fantastic! The cadence of your words really felt like a race. I laughed out loud at your final words. Excellent rhyming throughout. Good luck in the contest!
Summer
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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OMG how did you do it? This is fantastic! The cadence of your words really felt like a race. I laughed out loud at your final words. Excellent rhyming throughout. Good luck in the contest!
Summer
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Summer, the vers beaucoup clips along very fast, so I picked a fast subject! HA! Thanks so much for all your great compliments and review. Sue
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Hi Sue, You did a great job with it. :) You're welcome.
Sum
Comment from Fleedleflump
Congratulations on writing a poem that's just about something great, rather than being a romance or a horror etc. This stands out on that alone, but you've also injected it with plenty of visceral intensity, something that goes with both the format and the subject matter.
Mike
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Congratulations on writing a poem that's just about something great, rather than being a romance or a horror etc. This stands out on that alone, but you've also injected it with plenty of visceral intensity, something that goes with both the format and the subject matter.
Mike
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Mike, thanks for your great compliments. I do love a good car race and the vers beaucoup format sure lends itself well for speed. And thank you for your very kind review. So glad you liked it. With regards, Sue
Comment from findingmyroom
This description makes it feel like we're right in the car. The phrases "feel my heart, Off the chart" and "Gonna smack that hard wall" really make the action come alive. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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This description makes it feel like we're right in the car. The phrases "feel my heart, Off the chart" and "Gonna smack that hard wall" really make the action come alive. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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thanks for your great review. And for saying which lines you liked. :-)) Sue
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Sometimes the restriction of 2 six-star reviews per week is a hindrance.
Comment from ulster3
Wow sixreez.
Four stanzas and all. Good work. This looks a difficult form. best to you in the contest.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Wow sixreez.
Four stanzas and all. Good work. This looks a difficult form. best to you in the contest.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Rebecca, I like the vers beaucoup. It's fast pace really lends itself well for this fast race! Thanks very much for your generous review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Jewell McChesney
On the straight I don't abate. Must be fate;
I'm doing great! On my tail, but he'll fail
Beside the rail. In the ess, with finesse,
Passed him; Yes! Back in lead with such speed
You captured the nuance of the race well with your words racing down the page the way they are! Your poetry is well constructed and this was a fun read.
Wow, I'm all stressed out now. lol
jj
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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On the straight I don't abate. Must be fate;
I'm doing great! On my tail, but he'll fail
Beside the rail. In the ess, with finesse,
Passed him; Yes! Back in lead with such speed
You captured the nuance of the race well with your words racing down the page the way they are! Your poetry is well constructed and this was a fun read.
Wow, I'm all stressed out now. lol
jj
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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I'm stressed cuz I wanted to win! Ha!! Thanks so much for your great compliments and review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from sara-beth
Hey, this is very creative and I really enjoyed it! I love vers beaucoup, I think it's brilliant, but it's hard to keep it going for so many stanzas, that's actually amazing! I am so proud of you!
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Hey, this is very creative and I really enjoyed it! I love vers beaucoup, I think it's brilliant, but it's hard to keep it going for so many stanzas, that's actually amazing! I am so proud of you!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from mmichelle97219
The closest I get to car racing is on a video game. :-) I thought you wrote about it well. Now my daughter is intersted. Nice job.
Michelle
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The closest I get to car racing is on a video game. :-) I thought you wrote about it well. Now my daughter is intersted. Nice job.
Michelle
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Guess you know your races! LOL
Nicely done for the contest. Good Luck!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
PS -- PLEASE READ "A Special Lady"
It's my latest release, written for Gert.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Guess you know your races! LOL
Nicely done for the contest. Good Luck!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
PS -- PLEASE READ "A Special Lady"
It's my latest release, written for Gert.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. I will definitely read your poem for Gert on Thursday! With regards, Sue
