Comment from mmichelle97219

Good

A couple of your rhymes seem a bit forced, like you were trying too hard, but overall you used the required words well. Good luck in the voting booth.
Michelle

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 Comment Written 22-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hi skye.
Again you hid the required words well as you wrote a wonderful tale in poetry. I like this, and i wish you well in the contest. Fondly, rebecca

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009

Thank you very much.

Comment from JoeKarbo

Exceptional

A wonderful poem of high adventure in fantasy land. I like it a lot. Easy to understand and has metaphoric meaning. Well done, a sure winner.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2009

Thank you so much for your sweet support, shining stars, and kind comments.

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

I love a well written traditional poem like this one. It has a great rhyme and balanced meter which makes it fun to read.

Fred

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review.

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Firstly, there's no such word as irregardless, but that's what you had to work with. This is a difficult assignment and you handled it admirably.

Duane

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thank you very much for the kind and thoughtful review. I knew that about the word, but what can you do, just follow the rules. LOL

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi skye...the rhyme in this piece drew me in...it has a musical quality that makes this poem a pleasure to read. You did an outstanding job of using the required words. Well done...good luck in the contest...blessings....chey

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and give such a kind review.

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Kathy.
I won't continue ta deduct stars for meter.
Very difficult bunch of words. Inspired of you ta name the ship 'Zimbabwe' - WOW!
'thinks wretched weather is sublime.' - very forced rhyme
'has kangaroo patches on each ear.' - again inspired!
'food' and 'good' rhyme is poor and forced IMHO.

I found the flow very jumpy, but the theme very imaginative. Despite the critique, this is a valiant effort ta use them 'rotten' words. Well done, Ray xx

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and give such a kind review. It is harder to write things for the prompts... especially when one decides close to deadline. LOL

reply by Domino on 20-Jan-2009

Hey, what's goin on?
'Teri' has responded again.
I knew I was slightly insane, but you're kickin me when I'm down.
Oh, well, I spose I deserve it. LOL
I'm a nice bloke really. xx

reply by Domino on 20-Jan-2009

Hey, Kathy (I guess I'm addressin you), seriously your replies are comin up under the name of 'Teri', maybe contact Tom. xx

Comment from Jewell McChesney

Excellent

Wow, what a glorious poem.
I live in NM who's nickname is "The Land Of Enchantment" and there is a natural landmark the Native Navajoes call
Shiprock. This poem could be easily altered to cover the story of Shiprock as well. Google Shiprock and see what you can do. ;)

Thanks for sharing your gift.

jj

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and give such a kind review.

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

skye, I am so impressed, after seeing the word list, you did not take what some might have felt the obvious route to a sultry, exotic, mature, x-rated poem. You have shown these words can be beautifully put together without being excessively sexual. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thanks for the encouraging and positive review. If my grandchildren can't read it, I don't write it. LOL

Comment from Curt Mongold

Excellent

Well done poem using the required words for this contest. The flow is very good, the rhyming is tight and the word usage adds to the message.
Best wishes,
Curt

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009

Thanks for the encouraging and positive review.