cinquains
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Comment from Mischief's Momma
And very great words of wisdom that Pastor spoke too - it stands the test of time with every generation of mankind I believe.
Great job on the cinquain, short, sweet and to the point.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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And very great words of wisdom that Pastor spoke too - it stands the test of time with every generation of mankind I believe.
Great job on the cinquain, short, sweet and to the point.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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I'm so thankful for your gracious review, Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
Truth is an objection from a fallacy
A long walk through the thoughts of reality
So much that is never revealed
As the thoughts lay unrevealed
Truth is a very thin line, pealed...
Those were the thoughts I garnered from your well written verse.It was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Truth is an objection from a fallacy
A long walk through the thoughts of reality
So much that is never revealed
As the thoughts lay unrevealed
Truth is a very thin line, pealed...
Those were the thoughts I garnered from your well written verse.It was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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John, as usual, your poetic response is most appreciated, Brooke
Comment from Gramma Kathy
I appreciate your authors notes; they add so much. This poem makes me think.
How many times should I have said something that may have made a difference? Silence is not necessarily golden, is it.
Thank you for challenging me.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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I appreciate your authors notes; they add so much. This poem makes me think.
How many times should I have said something that may have made a difference? Silence is not necessarily golden, is it.
Thank you for challenging me.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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No, often it is not golden at all. thank you, Brooke
Comment from womanwriter
Your poetry speaks volumes!
Your words, well chosen, are meaningful, insightful, and filled with hope despite their oft meaning of despair.
Keep up the good work!
Regards,
womanwriter
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Your poetry speaks volumes!
Your words, well chosen, are meaningful, insightful, and filled with hope despite their oft meaning of despair.
Keep up the good work!
Regards,
womanwriter
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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thank you so much for such positive comments, Brooke
Comment from minopavlic
Brilliantly weaved, from the beginning to the last line, which left a smile on my face. You are so right, every opportunity we have in speaking out for one another, is definitely in itself a learning experience
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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Brilliantly weaved, from the beginning to the last line, which left a smile on my face. You are so right, every opportunity we have in speaking out for one another, is definitely in itself a learning experience
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2009
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From what you have said about speaking in schools and about to be going to prisons, I know you are a man who understands totally the need to speak up and not stay silent. Many have yet to learn that lesson. Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from ulster3
Hi Brooke.
This is a brilliant cinquain. You got so much thought into it. I wish I had thought of your author note. Terrific!
WOW! I'm really impressed with this one.
Rebecca
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Hi Brooke.
This is a brilliant cinquain. You got so much thought into it. I wish I had thought of your author note. Terrific!
WOW! I'm really impressed with this one.
Rebecca
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Rebeca, thank you for such an enthusiastic response!! Brooke
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My pleasure.
Comment from JoAnna Lee
WOW! You have really said a mouthful here. I also appreciated your notes on this. They aided in understanding your fine cinquain.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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WOW! You have really said a mouthful here. I also appreciated your notes on this. They aided in understanding your fine cinquain.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Donna, I thank you for your thoughtful and gracious reviews, Brooke
Comment from VICTIMEYES
this one is more of a impact at the ending as i was waiting for something and then the word of TRUTH kinda rings the bell with me, and i like what you say in your pprofile ... POETRY should be more about passion than RULES, because someone with a strong passion will shatter the foundation of rules ... and the world will see and take notice, that rules, were never enough to contain a the strength of passion or emotion.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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this one is more of a impact at the ending as i was waiting for something and then the word of TRUTH kinda rings the bell with me, and i like what you say in your pprofile ... POETRY should be more about passion than RULES, because someone with a strong passion will shatter the foundation of rules ... and the world will see and take notice, that rules, were never enough to contain a the strength of passion or emotion.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Thank you for what you say about my poem and about what I say in my profile - there are some on site who think about poetry only in terms of counting syllables and monitoring exact rhymes and accents on the right beats, and sometimes this keeps them from hearing what a person has to say - and that is sad. Your screen name alone tells me you are not that sort of person - as did your poem about the nature of poetry. Brooke
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how well said in great truth, they don't care about what you have to say, because like you say,
they are counting this and that in their poetry, which is why most of it will always lack IMPACT!
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I've had people dock a star because in an entire sonnet, one word was one beat off - even Shakespeare broke the meter occasionally in Shakespearean sonnets LOL
Comment from Johnny Carwash
You're right. This could pertain to many things. It all depends on the reader's interpretation. Excellent, thought-provoking poem.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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You're right. This could pertain to many things. It all depends on the reader's interpretation. Excellent, thought-provoking poem.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your positive comments, Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
In a nut shell, that is why I am... The way that I am. This has not only happened a lot in my life, but it seems that poetry has given me that voice. Still it is up to others to stand firm as well. I found this well written and enjoyed it point.
And to think, the communists weren't the first. Long before Germany became the Nazi Power it was, even in 39 there were reports of not the Jews, but the Christian priests that were being arrested and sent to labor camps. But the world also choose not to read... In a sense, I think of the difference between Iraq and WWII. The world played a high price for that silence.
There was been an outcry over that church for appearing not to call to action, but I feel that it was perhaps necessary for them to lay low as they might have been destroyed. I had a feeling the intelligence played a major role in us winning it.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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In a nut shell, that is why I am... The way that I am. This has not only happened a lot in my life, but it seems that poetry has given me that voice. Still it is up to others to stand firm as well. I found this well written and enjoyed it point.
And to think, the communists weren't the first. Long before Germany became the Nazi Power it was, even in 39 there were reports of not the Jews, but the Christian priests that were being arrested and sent to labor camps. But the world also choose not to read... In a sense, I think of the difference between Iraq and WWII. The world played a high price for that silence.
There was been an outcry over that church for appearing not to call to action, but I feel that it was perhaps necessary for them to lay low as they might have been destroyed. I had a feeling the intelligence played a major role in us winning it.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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That is why everyone lay low, to save themselves or their institution, and when everyone made that choice, the whole deck of cards collapsed. Thank you, Brooke
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I think there are two reasons that people lay low and this is my observation about my community. People are comfortable with what they have and don't want to lose it. The other is personaly fear and that sense of danger. With my armed robbery guy, people encouraged me not to be a witness. Honestly it is uncomfortable, being in a room full of people giving you looks like they wanted to kill you. I found it humorous, as each one of them had their case called up.
I also got the crazy label put on me as I actually made the decision and planted my foot to go after him. I felt that I had the ability and understanding to do that and either keep him running or figure out where he went, either a house or car. I did that because I didn't want my lack of action to result in him killing someone else down the line. It is also related to a cause my father had, and professionally paid a high career and personal price. I didn't want to find later that my inaction resulted in someone else getting hurt. Also I am a right and wrong guy and felt that I had to do this.
Hey! Have a great weekend! Mike
