Joe Giraffe's Dilemma part one
a humorous story poem61 total reviews
Comment from Mischief's Momma
LOL, this is too cute Brooke. Poor Joe!
I am continuing the cleaning out of my inbox and came across this one, it is quite delightful - and I can well imagine it being read aloud for a lower elementary class.
Great job.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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LOL, this is too cute Brooke. Poor Joe!
I am continuing the cleaning out of my inbox and came across this one, it is quite delightful - and I can well imagine it being read aloud for a lower elementary class.
Great job.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Now I still need to finish it!! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from jack silver
this one was indeed very humorous. i really enjoyed it. it was well written and i am shore that other people liked it as well. i look forward to reading more of your work.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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this one was indeed very humorous. i really enjoyed it. it was well written and i am shore that other people liked it as well. i look forward to reading more of your work.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Jack, thank you for your encouraging thoughts, Brooke
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no problem i am always here to lok over some of your work.
Comment from Roisin
How wonderful and funny. I love this little humourous poem. You've told a very funny story in a wonderful rhymed poem. A giraffe afraid of heights - hilarious. I just love it and I can't wait for part two.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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How wonderful and funny. I love this little humourous poem. You've told a very funny story in a wonderful rhymed poem. A giraffe afraid of heights - hilarious. I just love it and I can't wait for part two.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Roisin, thank you - I had to look up at the title - I just replied to like 12 reviews in a row about all the dead babies and then you said humorous and I was thinking you must be crazy! LOLOL Brooke
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Well, we certainly are misinterpreting this morning! When I read your reply to my review, I went searching through your reviews (and there were a lot!) on the poem about the dead babies, to find out what sparked the row!! I read it wrong and thought you said you had responded to a row, as in arguement! Phew!!
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment from artsygal
Poor Joe. Open your eyes, dude! You're a giraffe and that isn't gonna change! Maybe the high flying birds and the monkeys living high in the trees can teach him to be braver and accept his gift? Maybe the secret consists of looking ahead rather than down.
(That worked for me at the Grand Canyon LOL.)
I really enjoyed how you generated suspense and then let us know in a later stanza what Joe's real dilemma was. It cracked me up because of the timing.
Thanks for a pleasant, morning read. There is a good message in it from which many can learn.
Hugs and have a good day, Brooke!
Sara
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Poor Joe. Open your eyes, dude! You're a giraffe and that isn't gonna change! Maybe the high flying birds and the monkeys living high in the trees can teach him to be braver and accept his gift? Maybe the secret consists of looking ahead rather than down.
(That worked for me at the Grand Canyon LOL.)
I really enjoyed how you generated suspense and then let us know in a later stanza what Joe's real dilemma was. It cracked me up because of the timing.
Thanks for a pleasant, morning read. There is a good message in it from which many can learn.
Hugs and have a good day, Brooke!
Sara
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Sara, thank you - glad I offered a chuckle or two, Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
hehe! That was really cute! I loved the cadence of this, the rhymes were great and it flowed very well. Poor Joe, I can't wait to read the solution for him.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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hehe! That was really cute! I loved the cadence of this, the rhymes were great and it flowed very well. Poor Joe, I can't wait to read the solution for him.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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I can't wait to come up with the solution! LOL Thanks, brooke
Comment from c_lucas
This would make a very good children's book. It has a very good rhyming scheme that makes for an easy read. There is excelletn imagery and descriptive scheme. The talking animals are a plus to this work.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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This would make a very good children's book. It has a very good rhyming scheme that makes for an easy read. There is excelletn imagery and descriptive scheme. The talking animals are a plus to this work.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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thank you, Charlie - I would love to make it a children's book :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. I think you are on the right track. Charlie
Comment from NadineM
Poor Joe! Perhaps he never has to divulge his secret but lets the other animals borrow him to climb higher and see the sights for themselves!
Nicely written! Enjoyed this write! Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Poor Joe! Perhaps he never has to divulge his secret but lets the other animals borrow him to climb higher and see the sights for themselves!
Nicely written! Enjoyed this write! Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Nadine, now there is one solution :-) thanks, Brooke
Comment from tteach
Excellent! I had to chuckle...poor Joe! So envied by all his friends, yet he cannot enjoy the view that only he can/could see!
How true this is. We look at others and wish to emulate them, without knowing what it is like to walk in their shoes.
well done.
a well written morality poem!
terry
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Excellent! I had to chuckle...poor Joe! So envied by all his friends, yet he cannot enjoy the view that only he can/could see!
How true this is. We look at others and wish to emulate them, without knowing what it is like to walk in their shoes.
well done.
a well written morality poem!
terry
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Terry, so glad you enjoyed this-- thank you! Brooke
Comment from Karen B.
This is cute and my 4-year-old granddaughter will love it. You've tucked in some good lessons here about how we tend to think others have it so much better, when we don't have any idea of what they may be going through. I hope poor Joe finds a way out of this dilemma soon. :) Karen
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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This is cute and my 4-year-old granddaughter will love it. You've tucked in some good lessons here about how we tend to think others have it so much better, when we don't have any idea of what they may be going through. I hope poor Joe finds a way out of this dilemma soon. :) Karen
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Karen, you and I both hope so! LOL thanks, Brooke
Comment from lovemyta
I love this cute poem. It could be adventuresome for the giraffe if only he would open his eyes! The others are so jealous and they can not see but they have all these other talents. It is too bad we do not use the talents that we are blessed with.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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I love this cute poem. It could be adventuresome for the giraffe if only he would open his eyes! The others are so jealous and they can not see but they have all these other talents. It is too bad we do not use the talents that we are blessed with.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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You sure do get the point - now our animal friends need to get the point in the second half! :-)
