Comment from Seraphim Delphinium

Excellent

ok ok ok ok ok~! I am roaring! What a wonderful composition! This should most certainly win the contest-- hands down! Yeah, I think I was once married to this guy. Great work and a super read. Smiles, Seraph ~

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

when there is no trust, there is nothing in a relationship. thanks, Seraph. love, jan

Comment from earthlybeing

Excellent

Oh it sounds like you have covered all the bases with this one. Well written and very easy to read and understand. Very enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Thanks, Jeanette

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

thanks, Jeanette. love, jan

Comment from Beans

Excellent

I loved this entry. At first I thought it was a real comment like in the papers, when I realized it wasn't I laughed out loud. It is witty and smart and I love that you call it connector of dots. I don't see any revisions needed. The only thing I think you should do is write more!

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

thanks, elphaba, for the great review and encouragement. love, jan

Comment from laurelp

Excellent

Your letter was very funny. Also, that bed is very crowded. I don't know "how you found out" about dear old Mom sharing the bed. But your response to him was very good. Not sure the papers would hire you but it did make for a great laugh.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

no, but Jerry Springer called. LOL! love, jan

Comment from Gypsymooncat

Excellent

Excellent!! Too funny! Written beautifully, I enjoyed connecting every dot. Very unique take on this prompt too I thought - one bedroom apartments! Who woulda thunk it?? Best of luck to you! xoxoxoxoxxo

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

had to have some excuse to put them all in the same bed with the Poodle, right? thanks for the review. love, jan

Comment from skye

Excellent

Interesting response to the letter... strongly worded, with caustic humor and great ideas.
I like the sharp, succinct retort... the common sense attitude.
Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

thanks, skye. love, jan

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hello Rdfrdmom.
I love the play on the words spectacle and spectacles. You sure connected the dots in a very humorous way. Luck in the contest. Fondly, rebecca

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

thanks, rebecca, that was my intent. love, jan

Comment from Brian S. Pratt

Excellent

Better than some of the Dear Abby's I've read the past day. good job. thought it was interesting with a touch of humor.

Well done.

Brian S. Pratt
Fantasy Author

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

thanks, Brian. love, jan

Comment from chaswriter

Excellent

Jan - That was a fun, imaginative write. And a thorough one at that. "The steamroller in bed" visual was particularly funny. I enjoyed it. Charlie

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

glad you enjoyed it, Charlie. thanks. love, jan

Comment from benjan

Excellent

Very cute, Rdfrdmom2. You have indeed connected the dots. The fact that the columnist took the time to scope out the address added to the voice of the piece. The reference to Easy Spirits made me laugh, as well as the spectacle comment. nice job. Good luck in the contest. benjan ;o)

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009

benjan, I wear Easy Spirits so couldn't resist. thanks. love, jan