The World of Art
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Such a sad picture your
words have painted, Brooke.
Cleverly thoughtout and
presented.
It is clear you enjoy the
arts - when I'm in London
visiting my son who lives
there - we haunt all the
art galleries - and there
are many...
Regards,
Margaret.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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Such a sad picture your
words have painted, Brooke.
Cleverly thoughtout and
presented.
It is clear you enjoy the
arts - when I'm in London
visiting my son who lives
there - we haunt all the
art galleries - and there
are many...
Regards,
Margaret.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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You are SO lucky to have London nearby - my one two week stay there was not nearly enough - and even with that, one longs to revisit all that beauty. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think you tell this tale marvellously in so few words; the determination implied by the fixed focus, the word "propped" implying a certain fragility whilst making it clear that the arms are still up to the job once coupled with the aforemention determination. The flow of the final two lines as a single sentence gives it a feeling of a final, big effort expended...
I had a picture in my head before your description of the painting, and it was pretty darned close :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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I think you tell this tale marvellously in so few words; the determination implied by the fixed focus, the word "propped" implying a certain fragility whilst making it clear that the arms are still up to the job once coupled with the aforemention determination. The flow of the final two lines as a single sentence gives it a feeling of a final, big effort expended...
I had a picture in my head before your description of the painting, and it was pretty darned close :-)
Mike
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Mike, thank you so much for this perceptive review, Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Those who can paint, do. Those who can't find fault. I have never seen the picture you described until I saw it in my mind's eye from your description.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Those who can paint, do. Those who can't find fault. I have never seen the picture you described until I saw it in my mind's eye from your description.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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thank you so much for your most insightful comments, Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from davidray
Nothing new to report here, Brooke. YOu picked a piece of art with a figure that speaks volumes. Well done. Alwasys a treat to read.
I'm gonns start calling you the natural. :)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Nothing new to report here, Brooke. YOu picked a piece of art with a figure that speaks volumes. Well done. Alwasys a treat to read.
I'm gonns start calling you the natural. :)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
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David, thank you so much for that lovely allusion, Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
I read the poem and your notes. Very interesting. I must google him and see what his work looks like. I appreciate it a lot when an author tells of artists from long ago.
The theme is well chosen and well researched. You are lucky to be so close to a museum of that nature. Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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adewpearl,
I read the poem and your notes. Very interesting. I must google him and see what his work looks like. I appreciate it a lot when an author tells of artists from long ago.
The theme is well chosen and well researched. You are lucky to be so close to a museum of that nature. Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Oatmeal, it is a wonderful museum - I am also within a half hour or so of the Philadelphia Art Museum, one of the world's best - a great area for art! Thanks, Brooke
Comment from daysofdeath1
i just realized something, do you have like a monthly regulation? for poetry? it seems you use the same style of poetry consistently until you move on to the next, last month it was a-z and now it is the five line style whos name escapes me at the moment, start with "quin" but i cant remember the rest... lol... oh well, it was still an amazing poem, as always, great job.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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i just realized something, do you have like a monthly regulation? for poetry? it seems you use the same style of poetry consistently until you move on to the next, last month it was a-z and now it is the five line style whos name escapes me at the moment, start with "quin" but i cant remember the rest... lol... oh well, it was still an amazing poem, as always, great job.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I get caught up in the moment and then move on to something new until I settle down and return to old favorites - you're quite observant :-) thanks, Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
What an interesting piece. I've never heard of this one. You did a good job, but I think the two most important elements, which you mention in your author's note, are lacking. I think somehow you should convey the fact that her goal is her home. Also, her dignity should be conveyed at some point. I really think this could be better.
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What an interesting piece. I've never heard of this one. You did a good job, but I think the two most important elements, which you mention in your author's note, are lacking. I think somehow you should convey the fact that her goal is her home. Also, her dignity should be conveyed at some point. I really think this could be better.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
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thank you for your comments, Brooke
Comment from mslyla216
I, too, appreciate Wyeth's work. He is an American painter of whom we can be proud. Your short cinquain poem depicts his painting exactly, when focusing on its subject, the young girl. You captured the heart of his painting. You could have used any number of two last words to describe where her journey was leading: (her future), (into life), but you stayed true to the painting. I like it. mslyla
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I, too, appreciate Wyeth's work. He is an American painter of whom we can be proud. Your short cinquain poem depicts his painting exactly, when focusing on its subject, the young girl. You captured the heart of his painting. You could have used any number of two last words to describe where her journey was leading: (her future), (into life), but you stayed true to the painting. I like it. mslyla
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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thank you so much for your perceptive analysis and kind comments, Brooke
Comment from steevie
what a wondeful poem, Brooke. You write the nicest words that compliment people in our history that have made lasting impressions on us all
well done
steve
At some point, I will go back and Google all the poems that you have generated from paintings.
Take care 'steve
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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what a wondeful poem, Brooke. You write the nicest words that compliment people in our history that have made lasting impressions on us all
well done
steve
At some point, I will go back and Google all the poems that you have generated from paintings.
Take care 'steve
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Steve, thank you so much - your kind comments are most encouraging and warm on a cold night, Brooke
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you are very well come, brooke
take care and make yourself a cup of hot chocolate!! :)
steve
Comment from Kym Jade
Gee, I have great empathy for the subject of the poem as I have a debilitating disease some think is related to a mutated version of polio.
Powerful and creates the right imagery.
Blessings
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Gee, I have great empathy for the subject of the poem as I have a debilitating disease some think is related to a mutated version of polio.
Powerful and creates the right imagery.
Blessings
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Thank you for sharing that with me and for your positive review, Brooke
