Sweet Mystery
Can words ever adequately express love?59 total reviews
Comment from JeJo
ah, yes... I mean, no! Love cannot be expressed in such few of words, really it can't be expressed in any. Only actions can relay such a deep and passionate emotion.
I particularly liked the final line:
"it remains sweet mystery" - how beautiful!
Good rhymes, and nice take on love in fifteen words :) All the best, Jen
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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ah, yes... I mean, no! Love cannot be expressed in such few of words, really it can't be expressed in any. Only actions can relay such a deep and passionate emotion.
I particularly liked the final line:
"it remains sweet mystery" - how beautiful!
Good rhymes, and nice take on love in fifteen words :) All the best, Jen
Comment Written 22-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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here is a poem from the past I barely remembered writing - I had to click on it to see what it was. LOL Thanks, Jen :-) Brooke
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is just lovely, Brooke.
So few words that speak
volumes.
Good luck with the contest,
or has it passed?
Margaret.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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This is just lovely, Brooke.
So few words that speak
volumes.
Good luck with the contest,
or has it passed?
Margaret.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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No, it's a site contest, so I know I won't do well as I never do, but thank you! Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
Adewpearl,
There is a lot of truth in this one! Been there/Done that! Too many times. Very differently arranged and reflected emotions.
Well done!
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Adewpearl,
There is a lot of truth in this one! Been there/Done that! Too many times. Very differently arranged and reflected emotions.
Well done!
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Oatmeal, Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Mike K2
Damn, no sixer. Words are not meant to express a love. Actions are- and take that any way you feel that they would apply. To my dishearted heart, love is such a multi-dimensional beast that it truly, (no cliche') can not be tamed. There in lies the beauty!
A timeless work of art that can never be completed in one's own lifetime. A man knows he is screwed when a ninety year old lady can't help him. Unfortunately at the age of ten... Needless to say, I enjoyed this too much and love the way it was written. To be honest, I would love to be bather in its essensense as opposed to the vapors of its mystery... That part is both scarey and thrilling. Unfortunately, a little off putting.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Damn, no sixer. Words are not meant to express a love. Actions are- and take that any way you feel that they would apply. To my dishearted heart, love is such a multi-dimensional beast that it truly, (no cliche') can not be tamed. There in lies the beauty!
A timeless work of art that can never be completed in one's own lifetime. A man knows he is screwed when a ninety year old lady can't help him. Unfortunately at the age of ten... Needless to say, I enjoyed this too much and love the way it was written. To be honest, I would love to be bather in its essensense as opposed to the vapors of its mystery... That part is both scarey and thrilling. Unfortunately, a little off putting.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Mike, thank you so much for always responding in a way that shows you really think and feel about what I have had to say.
With some reviews, a poet wonders if the person spent any more time than necessary to pick up the review dollars, but your comments always let me know you thought and felt. Brooke
Comment from daysofdeath1
the passion in this poem was rivetting, and the idea of true love i have began to experiment with in my latest writing, because it is among the top three strongest emotion people feel, and i believe they can connect to my writing with a sense of realism. anyways back to your writing, great job, keep it up! oh yeah and my latest post talks about love, you should check it out.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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the passion in this poem was rivetting, and the idea of true love i have began to experiment with in my latest writing, because it is among the top three strongest emotion people feel, and i believe they can connect to my writing with a sense of realism. anyways back to your writing, great job, keep it up! oh yeah and my latest post talks about love, you should check it out.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I just finished reviewing it :-) Thanks, Brandon. Brooke
Comment from redrider6612
An emotion so deep that it is beyond description is indeed a wonderful mystery. Great job with this one. I liked the form and word choices. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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An emotion so deep that it is beyond description is indeed a wonderful mystery. Great job with this one. I liked the form and word choices. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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thank you for this warm response, Brooke
Comment from davidray
Aaah, how sweet.
A fine bit of writing here, Brooke. Makes me want to say them to the better half right now. The picture os perfect and compliments your work very well too.
Best wishes in the contest!!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Aaah, how sweet.
A fine bit of writing here, Brooke. Makes me want to say them to the better half right now. The picture os perfect and compliments your work very well too.
Best wishes in the contest!!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Thank you - and how romantic of you!! Brooke
Comment from Kym Jade
Beautiful!You summed such an incredible love so very well.I really loved this as it shows what can give one relationship the edge over another,mystery!
Best wishes and dreams
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Beautiful!You summed such an incredible love so very well.I really loved this as it shows what can give one relationship the edge over another,mystery!
Best wishes and dreams
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I'm so glad you enjoyed, thanks, Brooke
Comment from Curt Mongold
Capturing the essence of love in so few words is nearly impossible, but you did the best thing by alluding to that fact in rhyme. Short and succinct, I really like it and the message it conveys.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Capturing the essence of love in so few words is nearly impossible, but you did the best thing by alluding to that fact in rhyme. Short and succinct, I really like it and the message it conveys.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Curt, it may have been the easy way out, but I liked the way it sounded anyway, thanks, Brooke
Comment from AliSmith
I can see why this is recognized. It is a lovely expression. The third line is a bit awkward to me. I want to add the word exists but 'be' fits with the poem. It would make a great line of a song.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I can see why this is recognized. It is a lovely expression. The third line is a bit awkward to me. I want to add the word exists but 'be' fits with the poem. It would make a great line of a song.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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What a sweet thing to say - the be is the way old English used to be conjugated, which goes with my use of the word thee - Alvin picked up on this, but I think he's the only one.
Thank you so much, Brooke
