The World of Art
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Woman Walking in an Exotic Forest"cinquain series
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Is there no end to your
talents? Your words
paint a clear picture
of the woman in her
colourful attire.
A pleasure to review,
Margaret.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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Is there no end to your
talents? Your words
paint a clear picture
of the woman in her
colourful attire.
A pleasure to review,
Margaret.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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You are such a sweetheart, Margaret. thank you, Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Brooke,
Wouldn't it be fun to be able to put his painting- an image of it- into your poetry? I do wish we could see it.
Very nicely written. I do feel as if I can see the image.
: ) LEK
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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Hi Brooke,
Wouldn't it be fun to be able to put his painting- an image of it- into your poetry? I do wish we could see it.
Very nicely written. I do feel as if I can see the image.
: ) LEK
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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LEK, I've had some people want the image and others specifically say they like having to imagine it first and then see it - I'm still sitting on the fence. Thanks for a great review, Brooke
Comment from jaeladarling
I always struggle to find enough words to describe how much I enjoy your poetry. I have no suggestions for you, except to say that I look forward to reading at least one of your poems each day. This particular one invoked a vivid portrait for me without having to look at the actual work. Beautifully done.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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I always struggle to find enough words to describe how much I enjoy your poetry. I have no suggestions for you, except to say that I look forward to reading at least one of your poems each day. This particular one invoked a vivid portrait for me without having to look at the actual work. Beautifully done.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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That is such a wonderful thing of you to say - with the high cost today of promoting, even once a day is getting hard - but I appreciate your comments and hope to continue to satisfy you!! Brooke
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
I am so loving these writes. I adore being able to read poetry that is not distorted with preconcieved images in my mind placed there by photos that come before the words. I sure hope you have tons more of these for us!
I really liked this one and could just visualize the lady and all the colors. Awsome write!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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I am so loving these writes. I adore being able to read poetry that is not distorted with preconcieved images in my mind placed there by photos that come before the words. I sure hope you have tons more of these for us!
I really liked this one and could just visualize the lady and all the colors. Awsome write!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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Well, at the moment I have none just sitting around, but I do hope to have tons waiting in my imagination! LOL Thanks so much for these encouraging words!!! Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
This reads to me as a beautifully flowing three-line poem. Don't take that as a criticism, all I mean is that the structure dissipates in importance because you've achieved a wonderful rhythm.
For me, this she, she is the sun.
Mike
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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This reads to me as a beautifully flowing three-line poem. Don't take that as a criticism, all I mean is that the structure dissipates in importance because you've achieved a wonderful rhythm.
For me, this she, she is the sun.
Mike
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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Thank you - I will not take it as a criticism!! I love your reviews, Brooke :-)
Comment from Paradox Tremors
A lovely piece. Might I suggest a darker blue for the background. It is hard to read light on light colors -- other than that, beautiful.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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A lovely piece. Might I suggest a darker blue for the background. It is hard to read light on light colors -- other than that, beautiful.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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thank you for your thoughtful comments, and I'll check out the font. Brooke
Comment from Vallachi
She glows
in yellow dress.
Blue daisies dwarf her frame.
Her ribbons match the orange of
tall trees.
what is the rules for a cinqauin poem again
that is what I would base the rating on but I decided I like it
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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She glows
in yellow dress.
Blue daisies dwarf her frame.
Her ribbons match the orange of
tall trees.
what is the rules for a cinqauin poem again
that is what I would base the rating on but I decided I like it
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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It follows a 2 4 6 8 2 syllable scheme - other than that, different poets create their imagery on a rather personal basis thanks, Brooke
Comment from allborn66
This is a very nice poem. His art reminds me a the child's book "Where the Wild Things Are." The poem has a very nice flow to it.
Barbara
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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This is a very nice poem. His art reminds me a the child's book "Where the Wild Things Are." The poem has a very nice flow to it.
Barbara
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Oh, yes, I love that book and I do see the resemblance! thanks, Brooke
Comment from jamar2
The poem is well written, but again lacks that picture to make it complete, very little effort done on presentation,and takes the reader away from what you are saying, by having to divert.overall to much information in the notes, the notes are there as I understand it as a guide to the piece presented.
jamar.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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The poem is well written, but again lacks that picture to make it complete, very little effort done on presentation,and takes the reader away from what you are saying, by having to divert.overall to much information in the notes, the notes are there as I understand it as a guide to the piece presented.
jamar.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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As I said before, more than half the people who have mentioned having the picture or not have said they prefer not seeing it until after they have imagined the artwork based on the words - I wish there were a way to please both sides, and as it is, I don't know how to import yet with the lack of programs I have - I have a friend on site trying to help me figure that out - I don't have windows, for instance with the graphic program she told me she could teach me to use
Comment from Oatmeal
Adewpearl,
Nice poem. All things are moving effectively, nice and full of flashy impressions, well expressed. The imagery was good. The descriptive words were well chosen. The flow was nice.
There were no homophones, no spelling or grammatical errors.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Adewpearl,
Nice poem. All things are moving effectively, nice and full of flashy impressions, well expressed. The imagery was good. The descriptive words were well chosen. The flow was nice.
There were no homophones, no spelling or grammatical errors.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Oatmeal, thank you so much for your kind reviews today, Brooke
