Navigating the New Year.
Trying to make the most out of life.10 total reviews
Comment from Bryana
Hi Mike, I enjoyed your poem as well as your author's notes. I think we all have a motive to write poetry. I write to bare my soul, to share my happiness and pain and I believe you do the same. You always have something profound to tell in your poems.
The first stanza left me thinking. Did your ex-wife really wanted you to be with her? I would love to spend the New Year with him but he's been gone for eleven years. I still miss him.
Mike, keep on writing, you do it beautifully.
Happy New Year my friend. Ana
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Hi Mike, I enjoyed your poem as well as your author's notes. I think we all have a motive to write poetry. I write to bare my soul, to share my happiness and pain and I believe you do the same. You always have something profound to tell in your poems.
The first stanza left me thinking. Did your ex-wife really wanted you to be with her? I would love to spend the New Year with him but he's been gone for eleven years. I still miss him.
Mike, keep on writing, you do it beautifully.
Happy New Year my friend. Ana
Comment Written 04-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2009
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Parden me for looking, just caught a glimps. I won't tell. lol Sharing happiness and pain? To me that's a part of writing, but I try to share what benefitted or learned.
To answer the question about the Ex, no she just wanted what I had. She just about got it all, but I had planned to come out of things OK, but my employer took advantage of my situation and I lost the rest. It is sheer hell just trying to catch up to keep the house. Bastards! All!
I know how you feel about a loved person who's company is lost. It's been twenty five years since my high-school sweetheart was kill by a drunk drive and I still miss her as well. It's harder this year as a lot of stupid behavior in woman has got me down. Ironically simple friendship seems to be a big problem for many. I overextended myself financially this year, as well as emotionally. As both of us have come to known. Life is all to short and I hate seeing it squandered.
I thank you very much for the compliments and this touching review. With love, Mike
Comment from amada
This is a very sincere piece. I like the way you reflect in those very adverse circumstances. The Author's Notes enhanced the feelings going behind the writing.
I wish you strenght. The best is about the happen now.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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This is a very sincere piece. I like the way you reflect in those very adverse circumstances. The Author's Notes enhanced the feelings going behind the writing.
I wish you strenght. The best is about the happen now.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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I love your closing sentence, with what I face at this time the best seems so far ahead. But that never stops one from preparing for that and enjoying it when it comes.
Thank you very much for your compliments and this review and I hope for you, the year will be the best too.
Comment from steevie
I enjoyed your poem and as I read further down, I enjoyed it even more so. There is much torment in these verse and you described them well
2nd stanza, it would read smoother if you were to put a comma, after the word, (am), as I found mysel reading that line three times to get the sense of it.
eighth stanza, I'm almost positive that Kinght and Prince do not have to be capitalizied.
keep your chin up, Mike
steve
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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I enjoyed your poem and as I read further down, I enjoyed it even more so. There is much torment in these verse and you described them well
2nd stanza, it would read smoother if you were to put a comma, after the word, (am), as I found mysel reading that line three times to get the sense of it.
eighth stanza, I'm almost positive that Kinght and Prince do not have to be capitalizied.
keep your chin up, Mike
steve
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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I did add that comma, you have to keep in mind that to quote it exactly, I would have to add an ! after every word. LOL unless ME. I capalized Prince and Knight as a proper noun. I don't have a glass chin, I always do my best! Thank you for this review.
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thank you for explaining that, Mike
steve
Comment from Twomoon
Mike, hello and happy new year! This was a nice reflection piece for the past and the new year! hoping all will be well and beautiful for you in the coming year. I hope to have more time next week...for more reviewing and writing..miss it! Well, wishing you the best and sharing some tea...while I listen to your reflections upon the water! much love twomoon
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Mike, hello and happy new year! This was a nice reflection piece for the past and the new year! hoping all will be well and beautiful for you in the coming year. I hope to have more time next week...for more reviewing and writing..miss it! Well, wishing you the best and sharing some tea...while I listen to your reflections upon the water! much love twomoon
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Thanks. All I can say for this year is I will do my best and want not! I used that expensive incense and it was a treate, Check out Incense Warehouse, Japanese Incense, Premium, Translucent Path. I'm under reviews. Personally despite my respect, the three hugs I got were worth millions. I need to crash, I can't see the screen... lol Much hard work and committment ahead. Jude tells me more then you.
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what does that mean, Jude tells you more than me?? not sure what that is about....smile..have a nice day, hugs twomoon
Comment from justmade
I love how you expressed your emotions here especially the part of doing your best I believe that is really what necessary. Your poem is heartfelt and I like how the emotion was under control. I hope 2009 brings us all better things.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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I love how you expressed your emotions here especially the part of doing your best I believe that is really what necessary. Your poem is heartfelt and I like how the emotion was under control. I hope 2009 brings us all better things.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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It's good you only view the words. Many very hard choices lie ahead. Personally, I think I am on Emotional Soldier's bus. When I ring the bell, he only laughs. Take care.
Comment from raimie
Non the less I loved it and the people I met very much - None
Thank you for sharing this incredibly personal piece. Yes it seems you have had quite a year as well.
I lost my father in January, had a life changing surgery in may, and left my steady job in October.
Penny has suffered marital problems and issues with her son. Loyd father-n-law died this year after a long struggle. I believe, we all here have faced many things this last year.
How lucky we are to have found comfort in the kind words and wonderfully entertaining works of one another. And that we could use this as an avenue to communicate such losses is truly a blessing.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Non the less I loved it and the people I met very much - None
Thank you for sharing this incredibly personal piece. Yes it seems you have had quite a year as well.
I lost my father in January, had a life changing surgery in may, and left my steady job in October.
Penny has suffered marital problems and issues with her son. Loyd father-n-law died this year after a long struggle. I believe, we all here have faced many things this last year.
How lucky we are to have found comfort in the kind words and wonderfully entertaining works of one another. And that we could use this as an avenue to communicate such losses is truly a blessing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Indeed! A touch one, but I love it that way as it makes for a great motivator and I never truly want to be comfortable. I care for all members here and can always be PMed, I've not much to help with, but at least prayers. I do try to avoid the FS fray though. lol Thank you for the compliments and this review.
Comment from mmichelle97219
I loved the poem, and the notes, and am starting to think you should list your ntoes as it's own post. just a thought
Happy writing.
Michelle
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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I loved the poem, and the notes, and am starting to think you should list your ntoes as it's own post. just a thought
Happy writing.
Michelle
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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No! Two reasons, first I love explaining the poem's inspiration and two I wouldn't post either, just can't afford it. Tom jumps in and I will respect that, but alter my postings period. I thank you for the review. Personally, I am not the only one that does this and enjoy the ability to decided to read or not to. Mike
Comment from AlvinTEthington
You show well the maturing process of a poet, a photographer, or an artist. It is painful, for as you point out, our souls, both the good elements and the bad elements, come out in our writing. You do show the importance of caring for other people in one's life, but recognizing the importance of privacy. I very much like the ending--sometimes we have to take people who are not good for us out of our lives. The poem flows well as it shows the maturing process.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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You show well the maturing process of a poet, a photographer, or an artist. It is painful, for as you point out, our souls, both the good elements and the bad elements, come out in our writing. You do show the importance of caring for other people in one's life, but recognizing the importance of privacy. I very much like the ending--sometimes we have to take people who are not good for us out of our lives. The poem flows well as it shows the maturing process.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Well, mature poet reminds me of a world renound one that needed to be rescued by his wife. Not going to the event that I love so well is like nawing my arm off. I am not a private person, I think that occured when I decided to become honest to God, I figured everyone else is due the same. Privacy to do what? Why? I s that what she would want me to do, just move out of the way so that she can have her fun? What about this site? Privacy shouldn't be used as a vantage point to shoot arrows from.
Not good for me, I regret to disagree. But it is the esential that has the charm. If deciding not to go for someone's benefit to put on a show. I ask God to let me go!
Let me explain something about what happened in my life. My dad sacrificed his for the need to protect society. A couple days before he died, he asked me to pick up that mantle. I declined stating that for the time being, I had to establish my family. He issued the curse that the manltle comes to me. It did and I almost had to defend myself to the death. Luckily God has a way of appealing to fools in their hour of need. But this virtue destroyed my family as soon as my wife didn't need, she looked for other seed. This year, just before Christmas I was a witness to an armed robbery. The other worker died the day after. My next post will be, "Ryan's Psalm." He was one hell of a good guy. After that, "My poets Table." Hopefully my privacy will be observed and members that have like that woman, multiple identies will leave me alone. So other people, who are sincere can benefit from my poetry. Other wise, I might as well not exist.
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I can only give you my interpretation of your written work and, at least to me, the last three stanzas seemed to hint at the importance of privacy. I thought it was a good work, but perhaps I misinterpreted it.
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Whether the poem was still good or not. Sorry. There is an unusual stress. What inspired this poem is my generousity and zeal for writing. Something came up that unnerved me, I can take a lot, but sometimes motives are assigned to my writing such as going after money or ego. The reality is a bit different. I think this year it is better to be active (to the best of my ability), then reactive.
When someone says a person is no good for you, it has been my observation that that was actually a determination the other way around. As always, I will try to do my best and not become so encumbered with other's perceptions.
Have a great day and year ahead.
Sincerely, Michael Kohlman
Comment from adewpearl
second verse - the next year I got the from work I got - something went wrong there!!
You can roam quitely I think you mean quietly
Mike, your author's notes are most interesting as is the poem - I do hope we will keep talking and that I will see new work from you. Life sure can throw obstacles in our way.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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second verse - the next year I got the from work I got - something went wrong there!!
You can roam quitely I think you mean quietly
Mike, your author's notes are most interesting as is the poem - I do hope we will keep talking and that I will see new work from you. Life sure can throw obstacles in our way.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Thank you, I fixed it. Oh I will always talk and the list of proposed mental poems are already arranged. I appreciate the reivew. I have mountaineered, obsticals are the fun part, but require a certain straightforwardness in thought to get over or around. People aren't like that.
Comment from Artasylum
Hi Mike I cn see how much is on your mind...you have people who care about you here and I am one of them...and my door is always open to here your thoughts...so I look forward to many more honest and heartfelt poems you can write...yours, diana
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Hi Mike I cn see how much is on your mind...you have people who care about you here and I am one of them...and my door is always open to here your thoughts...so I look forward to many more honest and heartfelt poems you can write...yours, diana
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Wow! What's on my mind is that I do try my best and I really care about things. I sort of gave up on considering the rewards, its the effort that bides me. Thank you for the compliments and review, I appreciate the open door too...
Boo!
New years greatings from Mike K2!
I have gobs of poems which to write, hopefully to the cynics eyes it will be a sore sight.
