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Comment from Fleedleflump
I do think the whole concept of rules to war slightly silly, and impossible to enforce. Who decides who has the right to decide them? I remember an old Star Trek episode where two nations have been at war for centuries, and they calculate losses each day, then march that number of their own citizens into incinerators.
War sanitised to the point of science fiction.
I'm not saying war should be horrible and widespread; quite the opposite, it should not be in the first place.
I often wonder how our leaders would have reacted if (purely for the sake of argument) China had declared that out war on Iraq was illegal, and invaded us...
It's like a whole planet of children each declaring that they are right, and the others have to do as they say, but none actually in enough of a position of power...
Argh, I'm off on a thought journey again. Once again though, thanks to your words Brooke. I don't have any answers, but then neither it seems does anyone else. I guess we'll all just keep trying :-/
Mike
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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I do think the whole concept of rules to war slightly silly, and impossible to enforce. Who decides who has the right to decide them? I remember an old Star Trek episode where two nations have been at war for centuries, and they calculate losses each day, then march that number of their own citizens into incinerators.
War sanitised to the point of science fiction.
I'm not saying war should be horrible and widespread; quite the opposite, it should not be in the first place.
I often wonder how our leaders would have reacted if (purely for the sake of argument) China had declared that out war on Iraq was illegal, and invaded us...
It's like a whole planet of children each declaring that they are right, and the others have to do as they say, but none actually in enough of a position of power...
Argh, I'm off on a thought journey again. Once again though, thanks to your words Brooke. I don't have any answers, but then neither it seems does anyone else. I guess we'll all just keep trying :-/
Mike
Comment Written 05-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009
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Your thoughts are all quite profound - and yes, who decides? It seems we should have some basic things to agree on, however, like not using children under a certain age as impressed soldiers, not raping anyone. Certainly a few niceties can be the basis for some agreement, and yet none of these niceties is observed. Thank you for a most provocative review, Brooke
Comment from mstad55
Well stated on every count. A war between nations does not mean the civilization should become uncivilized. The war and devastation are enough, but whose to stop it. The actions are not justified because it's war. If we go to war to punish a nation that treats it's country men less than animals, and we are trying to stop it, well I don't think we need to act like our attackers. A very thought provoking piece as well as are the notes. mstad55
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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Well stated on every count. A war between nations does not mean the civilization should become uncivilized. The war and devastation are enough, but whose to stop it. The actions are not justified because it's war. If we go to war to punish a nation that treats it's country men less than animals, and we are trying to stop it, well I don't think we need to act like our attackers. A very thought provoking piece as well as are the notes. mstad55
Comment Written 03-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2009
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you make an excellent point - and we agree completely. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Bananafish308
You have said it all in thirteen words. Concise and powerful. The fact that warfare is so often used a an excuse to commit unspeakable attrocities, is all one needs to know about this species of ours. Great job. Bill
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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You have said it all in thirteen words. Concise and powerful. The fact that warfare is so often used a an excuse to commit unspeakable attrocities, is all one needs to know about this species of ours. Great job. Bill
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Bill, thank you for understanding perfectly what I was saying. Brooke
Comment from dtimes3
Valid point and as this review is only worth two cents I better stop here (LOL) because I could invest my whole bank account in this one. Thanks.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Valid point and as this review is only worth two cents I better stop here (LOL) because I could invest my whole bank account in this one. Thanks.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Thank you so very much - that is so kind to review past promotion!! Brooke
Comment from steevie
this is about a powerful apoem that you'll ever write with such few words
The message here must be stinging to those who have anything to do with war or the promotion there of
well executed line and words
I saw nothing in need of repair
excellent write
steve
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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this is about a powerful apoem that you'll ever write with such few words
The message here must be stinging to those who have anything to do with war or the promotion there of
well executed line and words
I saw nothing in need of repair
excellent write
steve
Comment Written 02-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2009
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Steve, thank you again - you're a great dad, a wonderful husband, and you like my poetry - hey, if you need my nomination for an award, I'll write it! :-D Brooke
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Wow! Thank you so much, Brooke. That is certainly a fine endorsement.
As far as a wonderful husband goes, I'm far from that and should probably take lessons on improvement.
I do like to think of myself as a good dad though. I won't fight you on that one. Thanks so much for your kind review and continuing support. I really need that right now at this point in my life
take care
steve
Comment from Summer Falls
The sketch you picked to accompany was striking. I am amazed how you could take so few words and convey such a feeling of pain. Excellent job. Your author notes are so very true.
summergirl
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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The sketch you picked to accompany was striking. I am amazed how you could take so few words and convey such a feeling of pain. Excellent job. Your author notes are so very true.
summergirl
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your most kind words, and yes, I love this illustration! Brooke
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you are welcome!
Comment from mamre07
Only God can comfort enough to ease the pain. I am awed by the image as it depicts the agony of war. Thanks for sharing this 'conscience hitter' with us.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Only God can comfort enough to ease the pain. I am awed by the image as it depicts the agony of war. Thanks for sharing this 'conscience hitter' with us.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Thanks so much for your gracious and perceptive response, Brooke
Comment from pbrprasad
If any one think against war ,it is praise worthy. Your note also praise worthy .It explained the cruality of the war.You may able to see my poem "You should not start war "
silently mentioned same message.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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If any one think against war ,it is praise worthy. Your note also praise worthy .It explained the cruality of the war.You may able to see my poem "You should not start war "
silently mentioned same message.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Thank you so very much for your insightful comments - you certainly "get" what I was saying!! Brooke
Comment from justmade
I love the question at the end it is the same thing I want to know. Sometimes I feel people's lives are held with so much disregard. Nice poem.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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I love the question at the end it is the same thing I want to know. Sometimes I feel people's lives are held with so much disregard. Nice poem.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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I think the use of questions in poetry is a great way to engage readers, so I'm glad you appreciated this one. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpearl,
Atmosphere is full of vivid descriptions. The arrangement is formatted very well. Short and sweet. The flow was good. The theme was excellent!
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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adewpearl,
Atmosphere is full of vivid descriptions. The arrangement is formatted very well. Short and sweet. The flow was good. The theme was excellent!
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 01-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2009
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Oatmeal, thank you so very very much, Brooke
