The First Snowfall
How a Fairy with Faith caused the First Snowfall89 total reviews
Comment from tteach
I love the explanation of how snowflakes were formed! This wonderful fairy, who refused to accept a barren winter, pleaded for help. With her magic, she gave us snow, each unique.
Again, a well written poem. The rhyme works well.
terry
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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I love the explanation of how snowflakes were formed! This wonderful fairy, who refused to accept a barren winter, pleaded for help. With her magic, she gave us snow, each unique.
Again, a well written poem. The rhyme works well.
terry
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Terry, you are most kind - thanks for this wonderful review, Brooke :-)
Comment from earthlybeing
I always love your fairy poems and all that magical dream land you create. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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I always love your fairy poems and all that magical dream land you create. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Jeanette, thanks so very much for your kind response, Brooke
:-) Brooke
Comment from ulster3
Hello dewpearl.
How beautiful and excellent. I ESPECIALLY liked the stanza right before the last, but it is hard to choose from so many fine stanzas. These lines are a joy!
Her sparkling fairy dust chilled by the cold
formed into flakes of six-fold symmetry.
very fondly, rebecca
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Hello dewpearl.
How beautiful and excellent. I ESPECIALLY liked the stanza right before the last, but it is hard to choose from so many fine stanzas. These lines are a joy!
Her sparkling fairy dust chilled by the cold
formed into flakes of six-fold symmetry.
very fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Rebecca, thanks so very much for your most gracious review! Brooke
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
You sure do know how to create some great stories in poetic form my friend, this one is no exception to the rule. What a wonderfully enchanting winter story poem it is... I just adore this one! Great write dear.
Have a wonderful day
Suzi
P.S. - good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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You sure do know how to create some great stories in poetic form my friend, this one is no exception to the rule. What a wonderfully enchanting winter story poem it is... I just adore this one! Great write dear.
Have a wonderful day
Suzi
P.S. - good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Suzi - thanks so much for your enthusiastically positive review! Brooke
Comment from WRITER1
This was an excellent poem of fantasy and it held my attention all the way through. I formed a picture in my mind of this little nape pleading with queen and the snow falling, wind whipping.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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This was an excellent poem of fantasy and it held my attention all the way through. I formed a picture in my mind of this little nape pleading with queen and the snow falling, wind whipping.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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thanks so much for your lovely review, Brooke :-)
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
A nice little modern tale/fable of the first snowfall and one that I could see beeing expanded quite easily into a child's book with decent succuss. Characters are frimyl exstablished and the story line a fascniating one that would hold any child's imagination. A well done poem with no SPAGS... Would love to see the child's book version of it :)
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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A nice little modern tale/fable of the first snowfall and one that I could see beeing expanded quite easily into a child's book with decent succuss. Characters are frimyl exstablished and the story line a fascniating one that would hold any child's imagination. A well done poem with no SPAGS... Would love to see the child's book version of it :)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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I would love to see a child's book version of it, too! Thank you so much, Brooke :-)
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You are most welcome.
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
Another fantastic poem you've presented us with at Christmas time. Very strong writing, Brooke and probably you have yet another winner to add to your collection.
I want to take this last opportunity before Christmas to say thank you, Brooke. Thank you for all the great help you've provided me with since I joined the site in Sept. Your great critiques and your often mean words, lol, have been such an inspiration to me. Your writing has almost always been so uplifting to my spirit and I thank you for that as well, my friend.
Reggie
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Brooke,
Another fantastic poem you've presented us with at Christmas time. Very strong writing, Brooke and probably you have yet another winner to add to your collection.
I want to take this last opportunity before Christmas to say thank you, Brooke. Thank you for all the great help you've provided me with since I joined the site in Sept. Your great critiques and your often mean words, lol, have been such an inspiration to me. Your writing has almost always been so uplifting to my spirit and I thank you for that as well, my friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Reggie, you are a wonderful friend in this community, and I so appreciate your kind review and even warmer words to me.
I with you the most blessed Christmas possible, Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
The fairies still dance in your head, they now glide beside a frozen pond, in the snow they twirl and spin, their feet glide over the snow, composed of crystals that become glittering diamonds, highlighted by the winter sun. Good poem.
Happy Wintertime,
Winslow
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Dear Brooke,
The fairies still dance in your head, they now glide beside a frozen pond, in the snow they twirl and spin, their feet glide over the snow, composed of crystals that become glittering diamonds, highlighted by the winter sun. Good poem.
Happy Wintertime,
Winslow
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Winslow - thanks so much for this most gracious review! Brooke
Comment from Algernon
"In the bleak midwinter.." Not this, no-way. How I love this. Felicity means happiness and this penn radiates all that we should see feel and love about this season. All seasons have a unique beauty. Great poary.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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"In the bleak midwinter.." Not this, no-way. How I love this. Felicity means happiness and this penn radiates all that we should see feel and love about this season. All seasons have a unique beauty. Great poary.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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I am so glad you like this poem! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from GregoryC
What a delightful tale! The story is enhanced by the many literary devices you've deftly included. The sibilance is really done with a subtlety that only a real pro can achieve - the (sh) sounds - trees, stark, stir, sleep, sighed- like birds shshing and hissing with their winter breath! Then, as the story picks up we are treated to alliterations throughout (bare, barren, beauty, behold - as examples) with pleasant assonance and consonnace combinations.
Felicity seems to use a method of aperiodic meter in her magic spell- like throwing noise at an obstacle. She did succeed! Even the name choice Felicity fits (Latin roots - felicis - happy, merry).
You introduce unique and memorable characters such the "Old Man Wind" - reminds me of a poem I once read by Robert Frost ("An Old Man's Winter Night" - "All out of doors looked darkly in at him / Through the thin frost, almost in separate stars,") And, of course the Royal Lady herself.
The abab quatrains work very well without forced rhymes or redundant lines. Very classical style.
Your story is imaginative and epic and can be told by candlelight with other folk & fairy tales like those of the Grimm brothers or the Danish storyteller Hans Christian Andersen (I was thinking of "The Snow Queen").
The images you've created are really beautiful, like falling snow ("fern-like flakes") and frozen fairy-dust. You've taken us to a marvelous realm filled with wonder and dream-like fantasy. Nice journey. Quality work.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to all.
Gregory
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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What a delightful tale! The story is enhanced by the many literary devices you've deftly included. The sibilance is really done with a subtlety that only a real pro can achieve - the (sh) sounds - trees, stark, stir, sleep, sighed- like birds shshing and hissing with their winter breath! Then, as the story picks up we are treated to alliterations throughout (bare, barren, beauty, behold - as examples) with pleasant assonance and consonnace combinations.
Felicity seems to use a method of aperiodic meter in her magic spell- like throwing noise at an obstacle. She did succeed! Even the name choice Felicity fits (Latin roots - felicis - happy, merry).
You introduce unique and memorable characters such the "Old Man Wind" - reminds me of a poem I once read by Robert Frost ("An Old Man's Winter Night" - "All out of doors looked darkly in at him / Through the thin frost, almost in separate stars,") And, of course the Royal Lady herself.
The abab quatrains work very well without forced rhymes or redundant lines. Very classical style.
Your story is imaginative and epic and can be told by candlelight with other folk & fairy tales like those of the Grimm brothers or the Danish storyteller Hans Christian Andersen (I was thinking of "The Snow Queen").
The images you've created are really beautiful, like falling snow ("fern-like flakes") and frozen fairy-dust. You've taken us to a marvelous realm filled with wonder and dream-like fantasy. Nice journey. Quality work.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to all.
Gregory
Comment Written 24-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2008
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Gregory, what a lovely review this is. I thank you so much for your kind attention to my poem and for really thinking about its story and structure, Brooke
