The First Snowfall
How a Fairy with Faith caused the First Snowfall89 total reviews
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Wow! Very nice poetic story. The rhyme, rhythm and imagery were a pleasure to read. Very imaginative.
I wish you well in the contest, Brooke. I'm sure this will be a very high contender.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Wow! Very nice poetic story. The rhyme, rhythm and imagery were a pleasure to read. Very imaginative.
I wish you well in the contest, Brooke. I'm sure this will be a very high contender.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Donna, thanks so much - your comments are both supportive and gracious. Brooke
Comment from debskatz
Hi Brooke,
What a delightful poem! Have you checked into publishing it yet through Publish America? I've also heard that lulu.com was good. Hurry it up so I can get a copy!
smiles,
deb xx
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Hi Brooke,
What a delightful poem! Have you checked into publishing it yet through Publish America? I've also heard that lulu.com was good. Hurry it up so I can get a copy!
smiles,
deb xx
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Deb, I will look into them - thanks for the recommendations! Brooke
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Your certainly brought the artwork to life! Such a nice experience,and I didn't even get cold. Haven't seen snow fall for mnay years...thank you!
Dave
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Your certainly brought the artwork to life! Such a nice experience,and I didn't even get cold. Haven't seen snow fall for mnay years...thank you!
Dave
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Dave, so far this season all we've gotten is lots of cold rain. Thank you so very much for your highest praise and rating. Brooke
Comment from ersorenson
Great poem with a pleasant cadence. I liked you rhymes and thought they sounded very natural, none forced. As read the I thought about winter and how much I liked the cold weather when young, and how much I hate now that I older. Memories always bring me the best thoughts, but he last ten days reminded me that when:
Icicles glisten when the wind has blown
and hang from branches when they bear no leaf.
spring is too far away to hope for and the present is something in which we must seek beauty.
Thanks for your poem,
ers
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Great poem with a pleasant cadence. I liked you rhymes and thought they sounded very natural, none forced. As read the I thought about winter and how much I liked the cold weather when young, and how much I hate now that I older. Memories always bring me the best thoughts, but he last ten days reminded me that when:
Icicles glisten when the wind has blown
and hang from branches when they bear no leaf.
spring is too far away to hope for and the present is something in which we must seek beauty.
Thanks for your poem,
ers
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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ers, thank you so very much - I too have outgrown snow and would love to live far away from having to put up with it again, but in a poem it sure is lovely! LOL Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hello Brooke! Another beautiful fairy story that plays delight with my imagination. Beauty created...both in your words and the visions you paint in my mind.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Hello Brooke! Another beautiful fairy story that plays delight with my imagination. Beauty created...both in your words and the visions you paint in my mind.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Indy, I'm so glad you liked this legend I created, Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from Poetic Friend
...And you are a great storyteller, too? Brooke, your talent never ceases to amaze me.
I really enjoyed this story of winter and fairies. The imagery is awesome, especially in the below stanza:
Each fern-like flake was peerlessly unique,
with radiating patterns nonpareil,
until they landed on the ground so deep
they formed a dazzling mantle where they fell.
Good work, as usual, Brooke. I hope your Christmas was pleasant.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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...And you are a great storyteller, too? Brooke, your talent never ceases to amaze me.
I really enjoyed this story of winter and fairies. The imagery is awesome, especially in the below stanza:
Each fern-like flake was peerlessly unique,
with radiating patterns nonpareil,
until they landed on the ground so deep
they formed a dazzling mantle where they fell.
Good work, as usual, Brooke. I hope your Christmas was pleasant.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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I am so glad you like the legend I created - thank you for your positive and warm response, Brooke
Comment from storymama
Your poem is so cold. It is beautiful and I love the story that you tell, but your descriptive words are so well detailed that I was sitting here shivering as I read. Great job and wonderful story! Bless you, Laura
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Your poem is so cold. It is beautiful and I love the story that you tell, but your descriptive words are so well detailed that I was sitting here shivering as I read. Great job and wonderful story! Bless you, Laura
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Hey, that is good to hear!! Sorry for the cold, but glad to hear the writing was that effective - thanks!! Brooke
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You are very welcome. You are right, Brooke. Our writing is to bring an emotional response in the reader. So, I'll sit here, wrapped in my blanket, in front of the heater, and keep on reading. lol Have a great weekend. Laura
Comment from Julia.
Hi, adewpearl. This is a really cute poem and it tells the story well. My only nit is that in this phrase -- "overpow'ring sense of gall" -- gall is misused for the sake of rhyme (what is called forced rhyme). Ohterwise this was nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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Hi, adewpearl. This is a really cute poem and it tells the story well. My only nit is that in this phrase -- "overpow'ring sense of gall" -- gall is misused for the sake of rhyme (what is called forced rhyme). Ohterwise this was nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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thank you, Julia, for your input and thoughtful review! Brooke
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Adewpearl ....
This is a most enjoyable poem with an interesting and unusual rhyme-scheme.
Under a beautiful picture at the top, your writing is attractively presented and your well-chosen words and descriptions make for vivid imagery and easy reading.
As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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Hullo Adewpearl ....
This is a most enjoyable poem with an interesting and unusual rhyme-scheme.
Under a beautiful picture at the top, your writing is attractively presented and your well-chosen words and descriptions make for vivid imagery and easy reading.
As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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Nanette Mary, thank you so much for your most thoughtful and warm review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Kingsland
I liked these poetic thoughts on the winter season. This was written in fine form and format. The fifth stanza was my favorite in a wealth of very good stanzas. There was nothing to dislike or to suggest for change in it.This was just a delight to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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I liked these poetic thoughts on the winter season. This was written in fine form and format. The fifth stanza was my favorite in a wealth of very good stanzas. There was nothing to dislike or to suggest for change in it.This was just a delight to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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John, I am so glad you enjoyed this winter legend - thanks so much, Brooke
