Jesus, Santa, You and Me.
What I really want (to see.)4 total reviews
Comment from justmade
This is deep Mike. You wrote about quite a number of things here. I liked how you put them all together even though it will take patience and pondering to get it but that's what poems are about. Sometimes you have to just dig deep to find its meaning, it is not always laid out for everyone to see.
This was emotional too.
How is Christmas going?
Much love,
Justmade
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2008
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This is deep Mike. You wrote about quite a number of things here. I liked how you put them all together even though it will take patience and pondering to get it but that's what poems are about. Sometimes you have to just dig deep to find its meaning, it is not always laid out for everyone to see.
This was emotional too.
How is Christmas going?
Much love,
Justmade
Comment Written 25-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2008
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Christmas went fine, I didn't expect to write, but because an important topic came up, I just had to find the time. lol It was peaceful. Maybe the various experiences were hard to put together, but the them is that people can do better with the way that they deal with things, namely me. For instance, I wished all of the owners of the company that I work for a Merry Christmas, but one. I just couldn't do it as ironically a poem has caused so much meaness. I figure, "Why should I wish him one when the rest of the year will be a problem." He was a bit put off, but no put out like I have been for two years.
I am hoping that this year will be much better and at least that is the hint. This poem also spurned a poem that you already reviewed as this spurned a cingular thought that formed, "Let Christmas Bells Ring!"
I thank you very much for your compliments and this review, hoping that your Christmas went well too. Mike
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Do it anyway Mike it won't take much from you... :).
Comment from Judian James
Wow Mike, this is almost overwhelming in its scope. You've tried to cover a lot of territory in this piece. You've succeeded in making the reader stop, absorb, think ... well done. A new year is right around the corner
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2008
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Wow Mike, this is almost overwhelming in its scope. You've tried to cover a lot of territory in this piece. You've succeeded in making the reader stop, absorb, think ... well done. A new year is right around the corner
Comment Written 21-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2008
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Wow! On this review. Yea, I had a lot of difficulties and frustrations, it's no sense going through them as you know most of them. People wise, for me to feel better, it would take so little. Mostly straight forwardness and the qualities that most people would like to receive.
My favorite is the parallel stairs as we have a front and the back set at work. I wnet up the back set and the boss ran up the front. I finished talking and went toward the front set and caught him hiding and listening. After the step-daughter poem, he always looks for trouble. I feel sorry for that family. A lot has come to light and it's hard keeping other people out for it. I like the guy, but not his actions and with the amount of work and responsibility they get for the pay. They ought to appreciative. I had the best intentions and feelings.
In a sense, this is sort of an idea. I asked myself how I could make this poem better and it only took me five minutes to jot my next post down. I'll think about it the rest of the day, it's short, sweet and solid. Emotional wise, I think people will appreciate the sentiments.
I thank you very much for the compliments and th is review. Mike
Comment from Usiku
I like this poem because it has ideas that cause you to try to figure out what's happening. I don't like that I need specialized knowledge to figure out what's meant in some places. There are several good thoughts. Perhaps separate the poems and continue to polish in order to make it flow.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2008
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I like this poem because it has ideas that cause you to try to figure out what's happening. I don't like that I need specialized knowledge to figure out what's meant in some places. There are several good thoughts. Perhaps separate the poems and continue to polish in order to make it flow.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2008
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Well, that is why there are notes. They are there to add a little help. To be honest, when I was new, I refused to review my favorite because of the depth of her poems and her command of the language. It took me months. When that door was unlocked, I gained so much by it.
I thank you for taking the time to review this.
Comment from ArayaBlue
Your poem has some interesting moments like:
It's no use writing a letter to the North Pole;
for my desired gifts, Santa can't build or extol.
No sense praying to baby Jesus in a manger, on the sod;
we have to learn this, God only gives a comforting nod.
You did what you set out to do, put your thoughts on paper, but it needs to be more organized. I like it though, and thanks for the explanations!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2008
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Your poem has some interesting moments like:
It's no use writing a letter to the North Pole;
for my desired gifts, Santa can't build or extol.
No sense praying to baby Jesus in a manger, on the sod;
we have to learn this, God only gives a comforting nod.
You did what you set out to do, put your thoughts on paper, but it needs to be more organized. I like it though, and thanks for the explanations!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2008
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It is organized. It has my intitial beliefs, in a poetic form stated events that lead to those belief,1) the courage required vs the response of asking women for their consideration and time, 2) About people who revel in bullying you, 3) consideration when it comes to ideas. Then it wraps up that it would be a better world with a little more consideration.
I thank you for taking the time to review this. Mike
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I apologze, maybe I did not understand it that way it should be understood. I will read it again and ponder more on it. Thank you!
