Holly, the Christmas Fairy
A Fairy alerts Shepherds to the Christmas miracle112 total reviews
Comment from Ian Ayris
Absolutely beautiful, Brooke. Stumbled a bit over the first few verses then became completely entranced. The twist into Christmas was so clever. Don't know which part it was, but a tear formed in my eye somewhere as I read.
So lovely, my friend.
Hope some of the little suggestions are of some help.
Speak to you soon, Brooke.
Warmest regards,
Ian
PS - Mollie will love this one.
In the days of Herod a fairy lived,
whom God commanded to help tend the sheep,
for even[,THE SHEPHERDS] His humblest of servants,
the shepherds[MOVE TO LINE ABOVE], deserved a few hours of sleep.
For years she kept watch in Bethlehem's hills
in the wee-est hours of black winters' nights,
when one fateful eve in the crystal sky[LOVE 'CRYSTAL']
this pixie beheld a most beauteous sight.
The star shone with brightness beyond compare -
[AND]she knew right away it must be a sign,
and[DELETE 'AND'] so she awakened her shepherd friends
that they might be witness to [A] night divine.
The shepherds, so used to a lowly life,
were chosen by God to share in His joy,
so sent them this fairy long years before
that one day they'd welcome His newborn boy.
She'd faithfully served this commonplace task
though one could argue it seemed too mundane.
While most fairies lived in magical lands,
not once had she balked or thought to complain.
"Sweet girl," God whispered, "your job is complete -
you've toiled for years with no hope of glory.
You had no idea the part you would play
in this, My Son's birth, My greatest story."
From this day forth you'll wear holly berries,
rich red as the blood My Son soon will shed,
and a gown of pure white, as pure as He,
with a crown of ivy upon your head.
As Christmas fairy, a place of honor
will always be yours in Heaven above,
for you, dear child, in humble obedience,
have shown to My world the meaning of love.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Absolutely beautiful, Brooke. Stumbled a bit over the first few verses then became completely entranced. The twist into Christmas was so clever. Don't know which part it was, but a tear formed in my eye somewhere as I read.
So lovely, my friend.
Hope some of the little suggestions are of some help.
Speak to you soon, Brooke.
Warmest regards,
Ian
PS - Mollie will love this one.
In the days of Herod a fairy lived,
whom God commanded to help tend the sheep,
for even[,THE SHEPHERDS] His humblest of servants,
the shepherds[MOVE TO LINE ABOVE], deserved a few hours of sleep.
For years she kept watch in Bethlehem's hills
in the wee-est hours of black winters' nights,
when one fateful eve in the crystal sky[LOVE 'CRYSTAL']
this pixie beheld a most beauteous sight.
The star shone with brightness beyond compare -
[AND]she knew right away it must be a sign,
and[DELETE 'AND'] so she awakened her shepherd friends
that they might be witness to [A] night divine.
The shepherds, so used to a lowly life,
were chosen by God to share in His joy,
so sent them this fairy long years before
that one day they'd welcome His newborn boy.
She'd faithfully served this commonplace task
though one could argue it seemed too mundane.
While most fairies lived in magical lands,
not once had she balked or thought to complain.
"Sweet girl," God whispered, "your job is complete -
you've toiled for years with no hope of glory.
You had no idea the part you would play
in this, My Son's birth, My greatest story."
From this day forth you'll wear holly berries,
rich red as the blood My Son soon will shed,
and a gown of pure white, as pure as He,
with a crown of ivy upon your head.
As Christmas fairy, a place of honor
will always be yours in Heaven above,
for you, dear child, in humble obedience,
have shown to My world the meaning of love.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Ian, I've made some changes, not all exactly as you did it, but mostly the way you did it! :-) I'm so glad Mollie will be pleased. Your tear counts as much as twenty lines of critique! Thank you, as always. I see you have another chapter up that I will get to as soon as I can read it in peace, Brooke
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Always glad to be of sevice, my friend. Lovely poem.
Warmest regards,
Ian
Comment from Domino
Hi, Brooke. To prove I never read, your notes enlighten me of the relevance of holly at Christmas; I just thought it a seasonal plant, Doh!
I assume you infer 'the fairy' is the symbol we use atop the Christmas tree as gratitude for her deeds?
I sure don't mean this an insult, as I enjoyed it thoroughly, and some (few) consider me an adult, but this would be a wonderful childrens Christmas tale. I can just imagine their little faces engrossed as you told this poetic story. Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hi, Brooke. To prove I never read, your notes enlighten me of the relevance of holly at Christmas; I just thought it a seasonal plant, Doh!
I assume you infer 'the fairy' is the symbol we use atop the Christmas tree as gratitude for her deeds?
I sure don't mean this an insult, as I enjoyed it thoroughly, and some (few) consider me an adult, but this would be a wonderful childrens Christmas tale. I can just imagine their little faces engrossed as you told this poetic story. Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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I don't take it as an insult at all - my fairy poems have quite a few children fans already among children and grandchildren of my readers - the fairy and unicorn one from several days ago was written for Ian's daughter! Thank you for such a lovely comment, Brooke
Comment from Aussie
This is fairy good! So good in fact, I would like to see it printed inside a Christmas greeting card; did you ever think of Hallmark cards? It is so important to keep the Spirit of Christmas alive, and you do it so well. Thank you for sharing His Love.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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This is fairy good! So good in fact, I would like to see it printed inside a Christmas greeting card; did you ever think of Hallmark cards? It is so important to keep the Spirit of Christmas alive, and you do it so well. Thank you for sharing His Love.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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thanks, and yes, I do need to look into the greeting card market :-) You are most kind, Brooke
Comment from Donovan
A wonderful poem. The words give deep meaning. You write so very well and enhance everyone's enjoyment of the holy days because of it. I did not know of the "the holly and ivy"
Thanks for all you share, your admirer.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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A wonderful poem. The words give deep meaning. You write so very well and enhance everyone's enjoyment of the holy days because of it. I did not know of the "the holly and ivy"
Thanks for all you share, your admirer.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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The Holly and the Ivy, an English carol, is one of the most beautiful ever. Google it! Thank you, Donovan - you are truly a wonderful man! Brooke
Comment from Curt Mongold
I can't imagine this fairy is related to the one who stole the dust from the unicorn!
A very lovely poem Brooke, with geat word usage, a timeless message and a fantastic rhyme scheme. You always come through with your wonderful style.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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I can't imagine this fairy is related to the one who stole the dust from the unicorn!
A very lovely poem Brooke, with geat word usage, a timeless message and a fantastic rhyme scheme. You always come through with your wonderful style.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hey, Curt, all people aren't the same, now are they? Why would fairies be? :-D Thanks so very much - I was up till almost 2 last night writing this and now it's 5:30 and I'm up to serve at the shelter. Remind me to get my good ideas earlier in the day from now on! Brooke
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Brooke,
Get your good ideas earlier in the day!
Curt
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God, I love a man who takes direction so well!!!
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
As Christmas fairy, a place of honor
will always be yours in Heaven above,
for you, dear child, in humble obedience,
have shown to My world the meaning of love.
--I really liked this one. Christmas fairy--should fairy be capped, it seems like a title.
Only offer of critique. good job. excellent poem.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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As Christmas fairy, a place of honor
will always be yours in Heaven above,
for you, dear child, in humble obedience,
have shown to My world the meaning of love.
--I really liked this one. Christmas fairy--should fairy be capped, it seems like a title.
Only offer of critique. good job. excellent poem.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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capped - sure, why not? LOL Works for me. Thanks so much for your lovely comments. Thank you, Brooke :-)
Comment from jmyron
A very well done Christmas story. Imagry is compelling and the rhyme and meter work well together to bring us back to that glorious day. Thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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A very well done Christmas story. Imagry is compelling and the rhyme and meter work well together to bring us back to that glorious day. Thank you.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Thanks for this gracious review - you're always so thoughtful. Brooke
Comment from raimie
Awesome Brooke! I can see her swwet fairy face receiving her crown for her uears of faithful servitude. What a beautiful piece of umagery, I can picure her so vividly in my mind.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Awesome Brooke! I can see her swwet fairy face receiving her crown for her uears of faithful servitude. What a beautiful piece of umagery, I can picure her so vividly in my mind.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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What a lovely review - thank you!! Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
This is a beautiful story poem. The flow and rhythm is great and it was a wonderful read. I loved it. The notes are great also. Hope you are better. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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This is a beautiful story poem. The flow and rhythm is great and it was a wonderful read. I loved it. The notes are great also. Hope you are better. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Jeanette - thanks so much for your most thoughtful review, Brooke :-)
Comment from minopavlic
Brings alot of thought to my mind, as the signifigance behind these words is tremendous...I've been asked to play a Sheperd in our xmas play at church, you just brought great meaning to my role
thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Brings alot of thought to my mind, as the signifigance behind these words is tremendous...I've been asked to play a Sheperd in our xmas play at church, you just brought great meaning to my role
thanks for sharing
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much for sharing that with me! Biblical scholars do say that shepherds were included in the story on purpose because in those days, this was among the lowest of the low jobs, and the point of the Christmas story is that the baby Jesus was born in a lowly manner to bring God's love and salvation to everyone, even the most humble.
Brooke :-)
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Thank you again, our play is on the 21st and we are somehow via satellite, the website is www.epcbc.com
