CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 127 "Not One Word"A collection of poetry
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Comment from odoapr13
thats very beughtiful. I really like that and I think it has a good feeling to it when you read it. Im giving you a 5 for your wonderful wording.
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thats very beughtiful. I really like that and I think it has a good feeling to it when you read it. Im giving you a 5 for your wonderful wording.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hi Sue,
Special moments shared silently with a certain person. A very soothing poem. I read it a couple of times and noticed there are a couple of places where rhymes pop up, but I'm guessing this is merely coincidental. For example-rush and us, and later time possibly with define (but that would require "it" to be dropped. Anyway, just observations.
I liked your poem.
Ray
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hi Sue,
Special moments shared silently with a certain person. A very soothing poem. I read it a couple of times and noticed there are a couple of places where rhymes pop up, but I'm guessing this is merely coincidental. For example-rush and us, and later time possibly with define (but that would require "it" to be dropped. Anyway, just observations.
I liked your poem.
Ray
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Sometimes rhymes are coincidental, but a lot of times, when I see some words which can be transposed to create that rhyme or close rhyme, I like to do that. I really starting to like free verse, but I also want it to be read aloud and feel and sound good to the reader. Hopefully, I can continue to do this! Fingers crossed. Thank you so much for your very kind review and lovely words. With regards, Sue
Comment from Roisin
A beautifully written poem. I love the short lines and the way you blend your words to make the poem flow beautifully. I would love to be able to write poetry like this. You've made me realise that poetry can be beautiful without rhyme. I love it.
Roisin
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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A beautifully written poem. I love the short lines and the way you blend your words to make the poem flow beautifully. I would love to be able to write poetry like this. You've made me realise that poetry can be beautiful without rhyme. I love it.
Roisin
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Roisin, I am SO smiling here! I only recently started to write poetry and kept to the formats. And didn't care for free verse. But, without reading other's free verse, I just took advantage of my own, deep inner thoughts on something one night and just wrote. And it was so liberating.
I would encourage you to try to do the same. I have done 2 so far. (not pushing for a review at all.... for you to possible be encouraged, read my other one called, "Is It Possible". I am like you: I like the short lines. Reads well and when you write that way, you get very selective with your word usage.
Of course, I still love the strict format and rhyming poems. It's just that free verse is another beautiful way to express.
Thanks so much for your most generous review and lovely comments.
Sue
Comment from Joan E.
You started your love poem with strong alliteration, which continues with "s's" and "r's" throughout, and great word choices: "sojourn" and "replete".
My favorite stanza was number eight with "Not to be named in this stolen time..."--very evocative.
Thanks for sharing this lovely work with the wonderfully fitting picture.
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You started your love poem with strong alliteration, which continues with "s's" and "r's" throughout, and great word choices: "sojourn" and "replete".
My favorite stanza was number eight with "Not to be named in this stolen time..."--very evocative.
Thanks for sharing this lovely work with the wonderfully fitting picture.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
Comment from ArayaBlue
Wonderful- vivid imagery, beautiful love poem, flows, I read it twice, it made me think about the one I love - nicely written!
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Wonderful- vivid imagery, beautiful love poem, flows, I read it twice, it made me think about the one I love - nicely written!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
I knew you had the talent for free verse and I can see you decided to prove it to the world... good for you! This is just beautiful and so graceful. You really need to continue on this path and explore where it takes you dear because there is more in you, you have a gift for free verse, I can see it in you. A solid five stars without hesitation! I have no doubt that you have a six star free verse in you though... I await to see it soon! Hugs, Suzi
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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I knew you had the talent for free verse and I can see you decided to prove it to the world... good for you! This is just beautiful and so graceful. You really need to continue on this path and explore where it takes you dear because there is more in you, you have a gift for free verse, I can see it in you. A solid five stars without hesitation! I have no doubt that you have a six star free verse in you though... I await to see it soon! Hugs, Suzi
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Susan, I've got to find "that place" to write these. They are exhausting!!! Aren't they??? Thank you so much for your continued encouragement, as I do love writing like this. It's a total high when I'm doing it. I thank you for your most kind review and lovely compliments. With warmest regards, Sue
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Sue... that six is going to come straight from your heart... so whereever that place is that you decide to write it, make sure it is a place your heart is not afraid to speak. Don't misunderstand me, I am not saying it will be one about love, it doesn't need to be about love, it can be about anything your heart deems is important. But that six will be about something that really matters to you and the reader will see the depth in your words and will instantly know the poem was written from your heart and soul... that my friend is what will bring in the sixes!
Comment from Hitcher
You posted! Good on you Sue, this one definitely deserved to be shared with masses, I'm a bit jealous, you are becoming quite talented with rhyme and free verse, how did that happen friend? You been holding out on me? I'm watching you ^^
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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You posted! Good on you Sue, this one definitely deserved to be shared with masses, I'm a bit jealous, you are becoming quite talented with rhyme and free verse, how did that happen friend? You been holding out on me? I'm watching you ^^
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Let's just say that I can only explain on PM - HA!!! The velvet glove came out of the closet! You are a BAD influence. If only you knew what was written in between those lines! Ha!! I am now finding out that one does need a "muse". Very glad you liked it! ;-)) Suc
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this is so beautiful, weaved with words of eloquence. The imagery and metaphors were just awesome.
I love the poetic fromat used for this poem (the short lines allow for the perfect pace/flow).
Well done, indeed, Sue.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Wow, this is so beautiful, weaved with words of eloquence. The imagery and metaphors were just awesome.
I love the poetic fromat used for this poem (the short lines allow for the perfect pace/flow).
Well done, indeed, Sue.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Dear Poetic Friend, your review has gone straight to my heart!! I was so insecure about writing free verse, but (hee hee) I'm lovin' it! Wow, what a feeling. I swear, when I wrote these two free verses, I don't know where my mind went. What a high! I thank you for all your most wonderful compliments on this work. Hand to heart... Sue
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
What a great poem, Sue. Very strong writing, with such fantastic descriptives. Excellent narration leads the reader smoothly through the stanzas and to the beautiful ending. Well done, my friend.
Reggie
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Sue,
What a great poem, Sue. Very strong writing, with such fantastic descriptives. Excellent narration leads the reader smoothly through the stanzas and to the beautiful ending. Well done, my friend.
Reggie
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Reggie! You didn't come her like a thief in the night for my pennies! HA! Your feeble mind really liked this! I'm overjoyed. Thanks so much for this awesome review with all your very specific comments. Loved your comments on the narration. Very helpful for me to keep that in mind in future free-verse! With great respect, Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
Very nice work Nic.
The solemmn silence of two hearts beating as one in an unexpected moment should be treasured like a fine jewel. You have captured that moment and described it wonderfuly in this work.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Very nice work Nic.
The solemmn silence of two hearts beating as one in an unexpected moment should be treasured like a fine jewel. You have captured that moment and described it wonderfuly in this work.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Means a lot coming from my cuz who loathes free verse! HA! But, you did seem to have an appreciation for the "captured moment"!! And that's all that matters to this writer. Thanks for your very kind review and lovely comments. :-)) Sue
