Wealth With Soul
My feelings and observations. A senryu...8 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
only against poor souls - that is killer, and such an important distinction! At college and grad school I met many extremely wealthy people, as in extremely wealthy, and many were pricks.
But more than I imagined were great kids, active in the anti-apartheid movement and other causes, eager to learn in class, genuine people. You make the distinction that it is not wealth that destroys a person but what he does with it, how he acts because of it - and you do that all in the few words allowed you in this form!!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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only against poor souls - that is killer, and such an important distinction! At college and grad school I met many extremely wealthy people, as in extremely wealthy, and many were pricks.
But more than I imagined were great kids, active in the anti-apartheid movement and other causes, eager to learn in class, genuine people. You make the distinction that it is not wealth that destroys a person but what he does with it, how he acts because of it - and you do that all in the few words allowed you in this form!!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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This one has been festering in my mind for about three months as a longer poem, but this one popped out. I enjoy the dymanics myself very much. Thank you for the compliments, sharing the stories and this review. Mike
Comment from justmade
This is very deep Mike. I have always believed the real battle is in the mind and once that is won and is in stable condition. That is what I believe with regards to wealth and we live our lives.
I didn't see anything offensive here my friend.
Nice.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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This is very deep Mike. I have always believed the real battle is in the mind and once that is won and is in stable condition. That is what I believe with regards to wealth and we live our lives.
I didn't see anything offensive here my friend.
Nice.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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Ask Two, oh I got plans if I have the opportunity, but would like to remain the same guy throughout my life. Right now, I am at the lower end with the fishies, but still look up and try to plan with what I have.
I agree with you, once the battle in the mind is one, let us hope that there are squirmishes to keep us vigilant. I think that is where many people go wrong. I couldn't live life like that.
Thank you very much for your compliments and this review and have a great day too. Mike
Comment from rama devi
An excellent 3-5-3 senryu!
Very potent message, witty and clever.
I did not take offence as my interpretation is that God is against people being poor in soul-wealth, not against the poor souls themselves. This is the beauty of a poem, so many interpretations are possible.
Bravo. Great brevity and word economy.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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An excellent 3-5-3 senryu!
Very potent message, witty and clever.
I did not take offence as my interpretation is that God is against people being poor in soul-wealth, not against the poor souls themselves. This is the beauty of a poem, so many interpretations are possible.
Bravo. Great brevity and word economy.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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You can't ghet any more zen with wealth and you can't get anymore zen in regards to the soul. Very often in regards to rich people, the media shows the SOBs. The go getters without insight. But I look up to quite a few wealthy people, not for the money but how they use it. There are also plenty of poor people who not matter how hard they try, just can't get a leg up, yet they are the nicest people. I am in no position to help them out as I once was.
What I find people enjoy the most is just a little time and a smile or courtesy. That is my first judge of the person. Airs or performances? Is the little that I have appreciated or glanced away from and ignored.
I probably looking at a sin, but these days, I tend to look at God as an actual person, but with a much vaster realm and understanding. I honestly think His first judgement is with our struggles; personal and spiritual. He wants us do basically max ourselves out and preplex over lifes contridictions to understand what is valuable in this life. As for means, I honestly think that he lets that to our own devices, but is ever curious with what we do with them. The worst is that we gain in expectations of what others should provide, if we allow ourselves to get spiritually lazy, or enjoy this life to the extent that we thank HIm, not suddenly ignore Him.
I know exactly what I need to have the life that I want to live on this earth, at least $200,000,000. I incorperates all of the arts. Needless to say, I won't need much after that and would form a foundation. That is simple, support what I belive in and doing things that helped me, such as getting a person's bills squared away to the point that they can then help themselves. But my biggest contribution would be in providing other people a chance to be the best that they can and make their mark upon my world. Being strictly fantasy, my best guess is, "fat Chance!" What impresses me about myself is that regardless of my means, I get so much enjoyment out of doing my level best. My reward is knowing that and it does greatly, to easy my pains and discomfort and in letting me know that I should continue.
I really appreciate this insighted review and yes, I love the meditative aspect about it myself. I thank you very much for it. Mike
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Thank you for sharing so much of your inner thoughts and dreams about life. I do believe the gretest welath w have is in how much weare ableto help and lvoe others, whether matierally, emotionally or spiritually (or all three).
please cHECK OUT MY GURU'S WEBSITE, where you can see a saint who does all three, every seond of her life, every breath, is dedicated to helping others.
www.amritapuri.org
Thanks again for your interesting reply and also for your kind gift of vote and cent pumps.
I ahope you achieve your dreams!
Blessings,
rama devi
Comment from johnleethehooker
Well said my friend. You may consider yourself a wealthy a man of great insight. Your words a simple yet profound. You should release it on a bumper sticker and become a contributor to the dreaded POP ART. Regards Jamie
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Well said my friend. You may consider yourself a wealthy a man of great insight. Your words a simple yet profound. You should release it on a bumper sticker and become a contributor to the dreaded POP ART. Regards Jamie
Comment Written 11-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2008
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Thank you very much for the compliments and this review.
Comment from fayesh
The senryu expresses human qualities, but the syllable count is off. the senryu like the haiku should be consistent, either 5-7-5 , 3-5-3. Your syllable count is 3/6/3. You can correct this by changing "wealthy" to "rich".
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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The senryu expresses human qualities, but the syllable count is off. the senryu like the haiku should be consistent, either 5-7-5 , 3-5-3. Your syllable count is 3/6/3. You can correct this by changing "wealthy" to "rich".
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Dare I say Oops. That left me with two options, turn this into a MikeKu as I like the word wealthy better, but I decided to change it to rich because that has a better emphasis. Funny I had just given a lot of advice to a person writing his first poem as a Haiku.
I thank you for your compliments and t his review.
Comment from AthenaCat
Interesting insight! Isn't it strange how the most unsuspecting characters can further insight into your life? I'm curious to see the rest of your musings!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Interesting insight! Isn't it strange how the most unsuspecting characters can further insight into your life? I'm curious to see the rest of your musings!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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You should always feel welcome to visit my portfolio or place yourself on my fan list for notifications. Thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
Love that sentiment!!!
What a great poem. I really liked your word choice and it read well.
No spag or other corrections to suggest.
Good Job.
Brian S. Pratt
fantasy author
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Love that sentiment!!!
What a great poem. I really liked your word choice and it read well.
No spag or other corrections to suggest.
Good Job.
Brian S. Pratt
fantasy author
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I thank you for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Judian James
Typo alert!!! "poeple" should be "people" When you write something this short Mike, spelling mistakes really stand out!! Also, the word "against" isn't quite the right thing to say perhaps ... God isn't "against" anyone, although I do appreciate your play on the "poor souls" interpretation usually understood and the one you have implied. I still think I'd rethink "against"
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Typo alert!!! "poeple" should be "people" When you write something this short Mike, spelling mistakes really stand out!! Also, the word "against" isn't quite the right thing to say perhaps ... God isn't "against" anyone, although I do appreciate your play on the "poor souls" interpretation usually understood and the one you have implied. I still think I'd rethink "against"
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Great! I just took care of a fatal flaw, "Well didn't Jesus say that it will be easier to get a camel through the eye of a needle then for a wealty man to enter into heaven?" I honestly believe that God would base his decision not on that wealth, but attitude. I know a few very wealthy people and they are extremely great people in my mind. To me wealth is always secondary anyway. Then there are people who tout about thier executive status and 1.2 million dollar fortune, only to take credit for a wedding that "I!" (sorry,lol) paid for. Or destroy a restuarant dinner for eight, ironically over sin or more expressly, the contriticion. Regretable, I have many more example as a, "wealthy entrapenuer," took credit for making a fundraiser for a candate because many were people he got to come. Yea, my father and I had to eat the cost of 20 people who wanted tickets and never paid. He just gave those tickets out. Hell, we could have done that.
Have a good day and thank you for the review.
