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There Will Be A Day

Seven different stories within a song.

63 total reviews 
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
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oh gosh,,my neighbor just shot herself and this is the 2nd such work i've come across in that theme; well written of course; nothing to correct.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, and I'm very sorry to hear about your neighbor.
    Jan
Comment from Showboat
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Maranatha, Jan, for sure.

Excellent story and the sorrows are everywhere, especially at this time of year.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful story,

Hugs,
Gayle

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
    Thank you, Gayle.
    Hugs,
    Jan
Comment from hyway94
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Here I am again. Same question. This was one of your best, I don't care about the spacing. It's what is said in the story. Also don't forget the song, who's web site I have copied. Very, very good.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much! I am so glad you enjoyed this.
    Hugs,
    Jan
Comment from mslyla216
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This is a very clever, innovative approach to telling a story, with your seven different situations of seemingly no hope and despair, but somehow hope at the end. Yes, there will be a day.... Lovely job. mslyla

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much for the wonderful review.
    Hugs,
    Jan
Comment from ayame
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hi!! i like the story!!!!! its so beautiful!!!!i hope i can write something like that someday!!!!!! i like the first part ,,i find it boring at the middle!!!but its good

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you! :-) Sorry the middle bored you. :-( I appreciate the terrific review, though.
    Jan

    PS I'm sure you could write something like this.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you! :-) Sorry the middle bored you. :-( I appreciate the terrific review, though.
    Jan

    PS Welcome to FanStory! :-)

    PS I'm sure you could write something like this.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you! :-) Sorry the middle bored you. :-( I appreciate the terrific review, though.
    Jan

    PS Welcome to FanStory! :-)

    PPS I'm sure you could write something like this.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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Your writing never ceases to amaze me, Jan.
So much sadness and desperation? and hope that
exists when reaching out to our God in a time
of need. All so beautifully and eloquently captured
here, it moved me to tears. It deserves a six, but
I don?t have one.

Sometimes, we can?t find the right words to say, but just
being there to listen and hold a hand is a comfort. Reading
this serves to bring to mind just how lucky we all are.

One of my sons is a psychotherapist who is on call
for those who are so brought down with sorrow
and depression. He has a wonderful way with
people, so soothing and comforting. A gift in
itself.

God bless you,
Margaret.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, Margaret. Your son sounds like a wonderful person. I'm sure he has changed many lives for the better. I truly appreciate all your kind words about my writing. Knowing you found it worthy of six stars is good enough for me. :-)
    Jan
Comment from allborn66
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This is a very interesting piece. I like how you put it together with the little snippets of people's lives. It is very entertaining.
Barbara

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, Barbara.
    Jan
Comment from davidray
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Hi Jan,
Always ajoy to read something of yours from the heart.YOur faith in the Lord is wel-documented in these parts, and I'm sure in your life as well.
Bravo.
I enjoyed your notes almost as much.
Thanks for sharing, as always.
Take care and keep smiling,
David :)

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, David. I am sure glad you enjoyed it.

    Jan
Comment from MercyWrites
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As always I enjoy your work, you make it seem so real and effortless. I love the writing style, the different scene with different people going through their trials and trusting God. This was beautifully wrote. Janilou have you thought about sending your work to a Christian magazine like Harruh? I think I spell it write.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much. I am so glad you liked it. I have not heard of that magazine but I will look it up. Thanks for the suggestion. :-)
    Jan
Comment from ledford
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Very inspiring and hope-filled:-)

Just afew suggestions:

floor sobbing, tossing the gun to one side. ... "to one side" sounded a little awkward. I recommend omitting it

toward a village three days walk away ... this is a bit awkward

Great job:-)

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, Ledford. I will take a look at those lines.
    Jan