Lullaby
An offer of comfort for any who feel in need107 total reviews
Comment from peggysis64
Brooke, wish I had had a six left as you truly deserve it with this hearttouching piece that reaches out to comfort the troubled and wearied soul. Excellent imagery, beautiful rhyme and rhythm pattern. Enjoyed the read immensely.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Brooke, wish I had had a six left as you truly deserve it with this hearttouching piece that reaches out to comfort the troubled and wearied soul. Excellent imagery, beautiful rhyme and rhythm pattern. Enjoyed the read immensely.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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That is so lovely that you not only read but took the time to review a poem no longer promoted - I really am proud of this one, so I am so glad you like it - thank you!! Brooke
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Brooke, I have my selected writers that I am notified of new postings.
The thing is with being unemployed and trying to find work in these trying times, I don't get to FS as often as I would like. But I chose my selected writers because they always speak to me. I will always go back and read those older postings (actually my goal is to hit your whole portfolio one day as you have so much to offer and to teach.)
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that is so kind of you to say, and I do hope things get better soon!
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Your work is outstanding of course, but my six comes from the heart because you cared enough to direct me here and read me. You know, we'll be ok. Bob is a spectacular man who is going through a difficult time. He'll be o.k. with me as his wife. That's why God gave us each other.
Much love to you Brooke and many thanks,
Penny
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Your work is outstanding of course, but my six comes from the heart because you cared enough to direct me here and read me. You know, we'll be ok. Bob is a spectacular man who is going through a difficult time. He'll be o.k. with me as his wife. That's why God gave us each other.
Much love to you Brooke and many thanks,
Penny
Comment Written 02-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Penny, you are lovely as usual. Know you will be in my thoughts and prayers. Others had told me this poem gave them some peace as they were working through problems, and frankly, I wrote it because I needed someone to offer such solace to me. I may not have had you in mind when writing it, but all I've ever wanted my writing to do is reach out to people, especially people I care about. God bless, Brooke
Comment from Lynnor
I love this piece by this very, very feeling and insightful poet. She has the ability to place gentleness where gentleness needs to be, there is love and tenderness that flows through out this piece and words of truth and for those who are weary and tired, who have walked that long walk, whose faith my me hanging on by a thread; this poet has given strength and assurance along with a sweet lullaby streaming down from the heavens. Wonderful, and beauty in this poetic piece.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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I love this piece by this very, very feeling and insightful poet. She has the ability to place gentleness where gentleness needs to be, there is love and tenderness that flows through out this piece and words of truth and for those who are weary and tired, who have walked that long walk, whose faith my me hanging on by a thread; this poet has given strength and assurance along with a sweet lullaby streaming down from the heavens. Wonderful, and beauty in this poetic piece.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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What lovely and gracious comments -thank you so much, brooke
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You're welcome Brook. It is just wonderful-Lynnor
Comment from jenelleish
I so love this poem. It could be great lyrics to a song actually...the words themselves are very soothing and comforting. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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I so love this poem. It could be great lyrics to a song actually...the words themselves are very soothing and comforting. Keep it up!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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You are most kind, thank you! Brooke
Comment from dportwood
adewpearl,
Excellent rhyme and meter and a soothing message in this quatrain. I like them all, but the third stanza is my favorite.
Very well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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adewpearl,
Excellent rhyme and meter and a soothing message in this quatrain. I like them all, but the third stanza is my favorite.
Very well done.
Duane
Comment Written 02-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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thank you, Duane. You're most gracious, Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
I loved this all the way through, and then then final line just didn't quite flow right for me. I think "Gift me your wrongs, I'll give you back rights", or "Give me what's wrong, I'll turn it to right."..
Although neither of those is so encompassing as your line...
"Give me all that is wrong, I'll make it alright."
... Okay, I'll stop trying to change your poetry now. I heartily apologise, Brooke. This is a lovely poem, swelling and contracting as one reads it. I just tripped a little on the last line; the syllables and stresses all seem to be right, so it's probably just the voice I was reading it in!
Never mind me.
Mike
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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I loved this all the way through, and then then final line just didn't quite flow right for me. I think "Gift me your wrongs, I'll give you back rights", or "Give me what's wrong, I'll turn it to right."..
Although neither of those is so encompassing as your line...
"Give me all that is wrong, I'll make it alright."
... Okay, I'll stop trying to change your poetry now. I heartily apologise, Brooke. This is a lovely poem, swelling and contracting as one reads it. I just tripped a little on the last line; the syllables and stresses all seem to be right, so it's probably just the voice I was reading it in!
Never mind me.
Mike
Comment Written 02-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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You're cute when you're flustered. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from jmyron
Nice little piece of rhyme. a true lullaby to soothe the troubled heart. Imagry and meter work well to bring a better feeling than when one started.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Nice little piece of rhyme. a true lullaby to soothe the troubled heart. Imagry and meter work well to bring a better feeling than when one started.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
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Thanks ever so much, Brooke
Comment from Josipher32
I thought this was a terrically written piece. You never seem to run out of ideas. It must be difficult to post so much each day, but all of your poems are of top quality.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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I thought this was a terrically written piece. You never seem to run out of ideas. It must be difficult to post so much each day, but all of your poems are of top quality.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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I didn't post at all today, spent it thinking of the other advent acrostics to do in the series - the result of all that? well, I now have the titles. LOL Thanks so much for your thoughtful review, Brooke
Comment from giftid3
Thanks for sharing.
There is much comfort indeed in what you have expressed here. There is a relaxing hope and soothing calm flowing through this filled with a real and true desire to help those who cannot either help themselves, don't know how to help themselves or who have never had anyone to help them.
For me, it's like Jesus speaking to the broken hearted, lost, imprisoned and depressed, that He will take all their pain and heartache, give them rest, heal their wounds and comfort their souls that they may be refreshed, renewed and restored.
There was one thing though that I found, first verse, last line:
"I'll share cruel burden you too long have borne."
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I'll share the cruel burden, you, too long have borne.
Overall though, this is well worded and expressed with a good flow and rhythmn from beginning to end. Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Thanks for sharing.
There is much comfort indeed in what you have expressed here. There is a relaxing hope and soothing calm flowing through this filled with a real and true desire to help those who cannot either help themselves, don't know how to help themselves or who have never had anyone to help them.
For me, it's like Jesus speaking to the broken hearted, lost, imprisoned and depressed, that He will take all their pain and heartache, give them rest, heal their wounds and comfort their souls that they may be refreshed, renewed and restored.
There was one thing though that I found, first verse, last line:
"I'll share cruel burden you too long have borne."
suggest
I'll share the cruel burden, you, too long have borne.
Overall though, this is well worded and expressed with a good flow and rhythmn from beginning to end. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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thanks so very much for your input and your great review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Firefly54
Well I suppose we all have a favourite line for a different reason, here is mine, "I'll be the evening prayer said by your bed". I think its the simplicity of both the statement and the gift that appeal to me here.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Well I suppose we all have a favourite line for a different reason, here is mine, "I'll be the evening prayer said by your bed". I think its the simplicity of both the statement and the gift that appeal to me here.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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thank you - I truly appreciate your thoughtfulness, Brooke
