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Sweet Dreams, Alien Child

Where do they hide the pod?

76 total reviews 
Comment from JBCaine
Exceptional
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Janilou,
I found no errors. I might pick nits at a few unneeded commas, but commas are sort of personal choice, most of the time.
You have truly captured it in this tale.
I knew there was somehting weird going on, but now I see the alien light.
Most Excellent!
JBCaine

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much for the exceptional rating! I am honored. You are welcome to tell me about the commas. I am still learning where to put them. Love your comment > now I see the alien light.
    Too funny! Thank you very much. You made my day.
    Jani
Comment from Lynn27
Exceptional
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Hi Jan,

This was outstanding piece! I loved the way that captured your emotions.

Maybe all teenagers, should read this piece. They can realize how their parents loved them.

Outstanding work!

Lynn

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    Wow, Lynn! Thank you so much for this exceptional rating and your very kind words. Bless your heart. You made my day.
    Many, many thanks. :-)
    Jan
Comment from nitad
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lol
teenagers are a bit like aliens, aren't they?
I haven't raised any myself but my godson just turned
sixteen two days ago, and well, his mother has had her
hands full!
Loved the song you sing to Amber. How comforting it must be for her to know that she is loved.
Thanks for sharing, Jan.
Take care,
nita

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    Yes, they are! :-) Thank you so much for the wonderful review.
    Hugs,
    Jan
Comment from Josipher32
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I sincerely hope you find the time to make personal replies soon, as I hate carbon copied replies..heehee

Oh well, this was a terrifically written piece. I thoroughly enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, Josipher. I caught up on all those reviews. :-) I'm really glad to hear you enjoyed this.
    Jani
Comment from laperle16
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I loved your story. When I read the first line I almost turned back because I thought it would be about aliens, but I kept going anyway. And I'm glad I did. I'm sure what you say about "aliens" is true and you put it in a funny way. And I hope to find out for sure one day if thats what kids are really like. Great story.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much! :-) Glad you enjoyed it. Very glad you kept reading!
    Jani
Comment from Aussie
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I loved the artwork you chose. I got a giggle from your humor and wonder how you coped with all your charges from above. Excellent read, lots of love interwoven with your brand of humor. Great, loved it.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it. :-)
    Jani
Comment from billybilljoebob
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Beautifully written and well rounded story. All parents of teenagers wholeheartedly know exactly what you are saying.

I found no spelling errors.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much. :-) Yes, I think most parents of teens have been here! LOL
    Jani
Comment from Joan E.
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I loved all your metaphors, including the "rose colored glasses" in your notes.

I especially liked phrases: "a teenalien"; the "snail" simile; "each day of drama..." and its hyperbole; the 'prickly cactus needles" metaphor. I believe the third line from the end should be "try to figure out".

Thanks for sharing what I thought at first was a piece of science fiction--it was so much more!

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much, Joan E. I will take a look at the line you mention and see if I can fix it. I really appreciate your comments. So glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for telling me exactly which phrases you liked. That is very helpful.
    Janilou
Comment from mermaids
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A different way of viewing one's children, beautiful aliens.I also like the comparison to books since I love books. This is a very creative piece of writing and obviously expresses your love for all your children.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so very much for the terrific review! I am so glad you enjoyed this.
    Jani
Comment from jamesa2
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HI Jan:

I just had to read this when you made reference to "Invasion of the Body Snatchers'. Even though that was the extent of the reference, I still enjoyed the story. Having two grandchildren, I'm sure this will happen to me, too. So, enjoy the sweet tenderness while you can. Loved the part about the snail in molasses.

jamesa2

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008

reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
    Thank you so much! I am thrilled to read how much you enjoyed it.
    Jan