The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Red Rose"a poetic collage of my sonnets
175 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
This is a beautiful sonnet Yelena. I read it several times and enjoyed it each time for different reasons. The iambic pentameter is flawless in every line and the rhymes are precise and always meaningful. I especially loved the line about our discarded youth and the closing couplet is a great summary of the poem's theme. So nice!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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This is a beautiful sonnet Yelena. I read it several times and enjoyed it each time for different reasons. The iambic pentameter is flawless in every line and the rhymes are precise and always meaningful. I especially loved the line about our discarded youth and the closing couplet is a great summary of the poem's theme. So nice!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the exceptional and review and the six stars, MissMerri. I am so glad you enjoyed it. This is one of my own favorite sonnets.
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful poem, so thoughtful, so well-written. A lovely juxtaposition of the ethereal nature of the rose with our mortality. And of course the photograph perfectly complements the poem it inspired. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Beautiful poem, so thoughtful, so well-written. A lovely juxtaposition of the ethereal nature of the rose with our mortality. And of course the photograph perfectly complements the poem it inspired. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, the last stanza hit the spot: wisdom that transcends the time and passion, clover, sage, and rhyme, these are elements of a magical life. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Wow, the last stanza hit the spot: wisdom that transcends the time and passion, clover, sage, and rhyme, these are elements of a magical life. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello EM.
The sonnet is written with perfection in its style. Your language usage is beautiful.
"Your incandescent glamour took me whole" is a magnificent statement. The mere fact that you use the word incandescent in the sonnet shows clarity of thought and understanding of the impact of your words.
This is a beautiful poem.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Hello EM.
The sonnet is written with perfection in its style. Your language usage is beautiful.
"Your incandescent glamour took me whole" is a magnificent statement. The mere fact that you use the word incandescent in the sonnet shows clarity of thought and understanding of the impact of your words.
This is a beautiful poem.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for wonderful review, Robert. I am glad you enjoyed this.
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You are very welcome.
Robert
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Muse, you seem to write a sonnet with such ease, the words found, the ear to please.
Each image finds a place in the reader's heart.
The words that stole my heart are in your second stanza. "your charming eloquence beseeched my soul. . . .
your Incandescent glamour took me whole."
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Dear Muse, you seem to write a sonnet with such ease, the words found, the ear to please.
Each image finds a place in the reader's heart.
The words that stole my heart are in your second stanza. "your charming eloquence beseeched my soul. . . .
your Incandescent glamour took me whole."
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the wonderful review.
Comment from amada
I feel very special to have access to this great poem about roses, and all the great qualifications of the masters. This is my favorite line: "Your petals are still beautiful at dawn...' That is real beauty, it is.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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I feel very special to have access to this great poem about roses, and all the great qualifications of the masters. This is my favorite line: "Your petals are still beautiful at dawn...' That is real beauty, it is.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi EM,
This is a pretty deep poem. Who's kidding who? I hardly understand it at all.
But I know what I like.
Right off the bat, you use "forever" as an adjective in "forever thorns". I suppose that's because those prickles last a long time, long after the petals have faded, and they hurt! They can cause a lot of excruciating pain.
"Your petals are still beautiful at dawn,
But not for long, so frail your earthly spree." ... Like lilacs, roses don't last very long. The blooms are doomed. But I was excited by one small bush I planted years ago. One red rose popped out in late November, and it endured cold nights and brisk mornings right into the middle of December. I almost dug it up to take into the house. But it's wild. It wouldn't last tied up inside. It has to be free, like love. A lover has to be free. But getting back to the little rose, I looked for it every morning at the edge of my lawn. Easy to pick out, it was so red. And beautifully formed petals. Flawless, like your poem.
"The virgin velvet..." ... nice alliteration!
"ever graceful was your silent bow." ... I agree, like a ballerina.
"A symbol of our souls' unspoken truce" ... nice use of consonance, with "s"
"Your petals died, as our discarded youth." ... I like the way you compare the rose petals to fleeting youth. How many times have we wished we could go back? If I could, I'd go all the way back to Grade 9 and right some wrongs.
If I was going to change one part of your poem, it would be in the final couplet,
"Red rose, your wisdom will transcend the Time,
All wrapped in passion, clover, sage and rhyme."
(Red rose, your royalty transcends this rhyme,
All wrapped in passion, clover, sage and time.)
Seal of Quality! Wow! Congratulations!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Hi EM,
This is a pretty deep poem. Who's kidding who? I hardly understand it at all.
But I know what I like.
Right off the bat, you use "forever" as an adjective in "forever thorns". I suppose that's because those prickles last a long time, long after the petals have faded, and they hurt! They can cause a lot of excruciating pain.
"Your petals are still beautiful at dawn,
But not for long, so frail your earthly spree." ... Like lilacs, roses don't last very long. The blooms are doomed. But I was excited by one small bush I planted years ago. One red rose popped out in late November, and it endured cold nights and brisk mornings right into the middle of December. I almost dug it up to take into the house. But it's wild. It wouldn't last tied up inside. It has to be free, like love. A lover has to be free. But getting back to the little rose, I looked for it every morning at the edge of my lawn. Easy to pick out, it was so red. And beautifully formed petals. Flawless, like your poem.
"The virgin velvet..." ... nice alliteration!
"ever graceful was your silent bow." ... I agree, like a ballerina.
"A symbol of our souls' unspoken truce" ... nice use of consonance, with "s"
"Your petals died, as our discarded youth." ... I like the way you compare the rose petals to fleeting youth. How many times have we wished we could go back? If I could, I'd go all the way back to Grade 9 and right some wrongs.
If I was going to change one part of your poem, it would be in the final couplet,
"Red rose, your wisdom will transcend the Time,
All wrapped in passion, clover, sage and rhyme."
(Red rose, your royalty transcends this rhyme,
All wrapped in passion, clover, sage and time.)
Seal of Quality! Wow! Congratulations!
Kimbob
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the spectacular, analytical review and the six stars, Kimbob. I am so glad you enjoyed this.
I will think of your editing suggestion.
Comment from Alchera
"Red rose, your wisdom will transcend the Time,
All wrapped in passion, clover, sage and rhyme."
A perfect written Shakespearean sonnet throughout its structure, rhyme and flow. Its narrative storyline is cleverly and beautifully described beginning with its alliterative title and goes on throughout its thematic subject highlightening its metaphorical personification of the rose symbolism from different shapes of view and predicting the poetess' s eternal life through her writing...Great work
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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"Red rose, your wisdom will transcend the Time,
All wrapped in passion, clover, sage and rhyme."
A perfect written Shakespearean sonnet throughout its structure, rhyme and flow. Its narrative storyline is cleverly and beautifully described beginning with its alliterative title and goes on throughout its thematic subject highlightening its metaphorical personification of the rose symbolism from different shapes of view and predicting the poetess' s eternal life through her writing...Great work
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review and the six stars. I am honored.
Comment from robyn corum
EM,
Wow. This was a really clever and charming piece. The personification of the rose implies so much more. I think of a love that might have been projected to last, but that died prematurely. But the memories will linger. This was so sweet. Thanks!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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EM,
Wow. This was a really clever and charming piece. The personification of the rose implies so much more. I think of a love that might have been projected to last, but that died prematurely. But the memories will linger. This was so sweet. Thanks!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Robyn. This was a part of my Seal of quality collection for the site. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Jay Squires
Ah! An English Sonnet--you don't find too many people writing English Sonnets these days. I especially enjoyed the rhymed couplet where you rhymed Time with Rhyme, with the natural choice might have been thyme to complete the clover and sage that preceded it. But instead you wrapped it in Rhyme (or poetry), and left the reader the evocative conclusion that rhyme has the eternal within it, unlike the rose whose "petals died, as our discarded youth."
A beautiful example of an English Sonnet. I wish I had a six for this.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Ah! An English Sonnet--you don't find too many people writing English Sonnets these days. I especially enjoyed the rhymed couplet where you rhymed Time with Rhyme, with the natural choice might have been thyme to complete the clover and sage that preceded it. But instead you wrapped it in Rhyme (or poetry), and left the reader the evocative conclusion that rhyme has the eternal within it, unlike the rose whose "petals died, as our discarded youth."
A beautiful example of an English Sonnet. I wish I had a six for this.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review, Jay. I am glad you like sonnets and that you enjoyed this one. You are right, people don't write sonnets every day these days. This was a part of my Seal of quality collection for the site, which I got a few years back.
Thank you again for stopping by. Haven's heard from you in years.
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Two years + to be more exact.
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Well, I took a three year sabbatical, and only returned to FS a few months ago.
