The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Red Rose"a poetic collage of my sonnets
175 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
Your strongly metaphorical poem appears to speak of lost love, whether by death or boredom. The volta verse gives clues to the affair, but never spells out the details, leaving the mystery wrapped up in the symbolism of the rose. Your opening verses give botanical imagery full sway as you speak of beauty matched by the sting of thorn and a life short but gracious. As mentioned, in the third verse, the beauty is lost and so is love. Your final couplet wraps up the mystery with almost funereal imagery of the rose lying in:wrapped in passion, clover, sage and rhyme. A fine sonnet, Y., which utilises wonderful archaic vocabulary to share this romance tragedy.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2015
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Your strongly metaphorical poem appears to speak of lost love, whether by death or boredom. The volta verse gives clues to the affair, but never spells out the details, leaving the mystery wrapped up in the symbolism of the rose. Your opening verses give botanical imagery full sway as you speak of beauty matched by the sting of thorn and a life short but gracious. As mentioned, in the third verse, the beauty is lost and so is love. Your final couplet wraps up the mystery with almost funereal imagery of the rose lying in:wrapped in passion, clover, sage and rhyme. A fine sonnet, Y., which utilises wonderful archaic vocabulary to share this romance tragedy.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the superb review, Mark. I am honored and flattered indeed.
Comment from flamingstar
Gosh, what lovely combinations of words. I love "earthly spree," "virgin velvet," and "incandescent glamour." And the couplet is intriguing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Gosh, what lovely combinations of words. I love "earthly spree," "virgin velvet," and "incandescent glamour." And the couplet is intriguing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
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Thanks!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Excellent presentation. I enjoyed your poem. Congratulations on the Seal of Quality.
Your flow, rhyme, meter, and alliteration all add up to a great poem.
Who am I to suggest a change? ha! ha!
Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Excellent presentation. I enjoyed your poem. Congratulations on the Seal of Quality.
Your flow, rhyme, meter, and alliteration all add up to a great poem.
Who am I to suggest a change? ha! ha!
Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the exceptional review and the honor of a six. So glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from Alan K Pease
A friend of mine has the passion to keep roses fresh for weeks at a time. Fortunately she has the same attitude for relationships for years on end. It would worry me if it weren't that way for us both. I think your poem has this eloquence, the poetics great with a little sorrow mixed in.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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A friend of mine has the passion to keep roses fresh for weeks at a time. Fortunately she has the same attitude for relationships for years on end. It would worry me if it weren't that way for us both. I think your poem has this eloquence, the poetics great with a little sorrow mixed in.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Yeltel...
I'm not at all versed on writing sonnets, but his one just rolled off the tongue, which is what one hopes for in any form of poetry.
Beautifully composed and presented with beautiful artwork.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Hi, Yeltel...
I'm not at all versed on writing sonnets, but his one just rolled off the tongue, which is what one hopes for in any form of poetry.
Beautifully composed and presented with beautiful artwork.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*;*)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from Pantygynt
Good to see you back again. A lovely sonnet this with an unusual Volta - an Alas! Instead of a But. The development is very neat moving almost imperceptibly from the descriptive is S1. through the metaphor in S2. then on to the Volta where a result forms that is not entirely what was originally desired. The stanza ends fith a foretelling of death alluded to by the falling petals. For me the poem draws heavily on that traditional language of flowers and herbs symbolism. And this becomes quite overt in the final couplet where the rose (passion) isaid to be wrapped in clover (protection & fidelity) and sage (also protection and interestingly here immortality.)
Beautifully done. Sorry fresh out of 'sixes'!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Good to see you back again. A lovely sonnet this with an unusual Volta - an Alas! Instead of a But. The development is very neat moving almost imperceptibly from the descriptive is S1. through the metaphor in S2. then on to the Volta where a result forms that is not entirely what was originally desired. The stanza ends fith a foretelling of death alluded to by the falling petals. For me the poem draws heavily on that traditional language of flowers and herbs symbolism. And this becomes quite overt in the final couplet where the rose (passion) isaid to be wrapped in clover (protection & fidelity) and sage (also protection and interestingly here immortality.)
Beautifully done. Sorry fresh out of 'sixes'!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the stellar review. This is one of my better sonnets, even in my humble opinion (lol). I enjoy a red rose and glad I could capture its beauty in verse. A red rose is such a glorious creature!
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It is indeed.
Comment from patcelaw
yeltel, sonnets are not my favorite poetry format, but this one is lovely , the rhyming is spot on. You have a good writing style and I appreciate your work. I cannot comment on meter as I am still figuring that out in my head. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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yeltel, sonnets are not my favorite poetry format, but this one is lovely , the rhyming is spot on. You have a good writing style and I appreciate your work. I cannot comment on meter as I am still figuring that out in my head. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the glorious review. I am so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Chris Tee
This poem is of wondrous caliber and it rolled of the tongue like sweet drops of honey. Your iambic meter is spot on and this deserves the highest accolade.
What a gem of a poem, great stuff!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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This poem is of wondrous caliber and it rolled of the tongue like sweet drops of honey. Your iambic meter is spot on and this deserves the highest accolade.
What a gem of a poem, great stuff!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the exceptional review and the six. I am honored indeed. Love, Y.
Comment from lalajovanoski
What a beautiful sonnet. This truly was a well composed, nicely written poem. Your message is very clear. A delight to read. I very much enjoyed reading this. Thank you very much for sharing this.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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What a beautiful sonnet. This truly was a well composed, nicely written poem. Your message is very clear. A delight to read. I very much enjoyed reading this. Thank you very much for sharing this.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the glorious review. So glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello yeltel, Your sonnet is beautifully penned - soft and subtle. The opening two lines are my favorite:
Red rose divine, with your forever thorns,
on bed of green, in timeless reverie;
A wonderful poem to add to your collection. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Hello yeltel, Your sonnet is beautifully penned - soft and subtle. The opening two lines are my favorite:
Red rose divine, with your forever thorns,
on bed of green, in timeless reverie;
A wonderful poem to add to your collection. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the great review. So glad you enjoyed it.
