Zephyr
Is God always announced with a fanfare?119 total reviews
Comment from JeJo
hello Brooke,
just browsing through your portfolio :)
What a perfect title!
Excellent modern sonnet, in perfect form, with use of near rhyme, alliteration, consonance, repetition, enjambment, and an interesting account of Bible stories. The different tone fits the topic well.
It is true: in the miracles in the 'spectacle' is one of the most common places we find God, because it is obvious. But that doesn't happen all the time.. the quiet, everyday moments do. Do we need an exceptional act to grab our attention? or are we devoted enough to search for Him in the 'small' things?
My favorite part is the couplet
"God's breath may be at times a gust of wind,
but sometimes it's a soft breeze felt within." - that is beautiful.. it shows how God can be felt in strong ways as well as gentle ways. Both show His power.
All the best, Jen
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2011
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hello Brooke,
just browsing through your portfolio :)
What a perfect title!
Excellent modern sonnet, in perfect form, with use of near rhyme, alliteration, consonance, repetition, enjambment, and an interesting account of Bible stories. The different tone fits the topic well.
It is true: in the miracles in the 'spectacle' is one of the most common places we find God, because it is obvious. But that doesn't happen all the time.. the quiet, everyday moments do. Do we need an exceptional act to grab our attention? or are we devoted enough to search for Him in the 'small' things?
My favorite part is the couplet
"God's breath may be at times a gust of wind,
but sometimes it's a soft breeze felt within." - that is beautiful.. it shows how God can be felt in strong ways as well as gentle ways. Both show His power.
All the best, Jen
Comment Written 22-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2011
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Jen, thanks so much for reading and reviewing this ancient poem. LOL Your analysis is always spot on, young lady :-) Brooke
Comment from phild
I love what you have written here and couldn't agree with you more. I'm not sure why we seem to require something so fantastic to believe. I think blind faith is what it is all about. Well written, with a nice flow, and thought provoking. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I love what you have written here and couldn't agree with you more. I'm not sure why we seem to require something so fantastic to believe. I think blind faith is what it is all about. Well written, with a nice flow, and thought provoking. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I am in debt for your most gracious comment, Brooke
Comment from Gramma Kathy
Amen! Beautiful written, your poem is a message of great truth.
I have seen some spectacles, and I have felt that "soft breeze felt within." The spectacles are awe-inspiring, but the soft breeze gives strength, comfort and hope.
Thank you for this wonderful encouragement.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Amen! Beautiful written, your poem is a message of great truth.
I have seen some spectacles, and I have felt that "soft breeze felt within." The spectacles are awe-inspiring, but the soft breeze gives strength, comfort and hope.
Thank you for this wonderful encouragement.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Gramma Kelly, you are so very thoughtful in your comments and so very generous in your review - I am in your debt. Thank you ever so much, Brooke
Comment from justmade
I think they some of those things we have heard or read describing God and he's Angels and everything about him. I like how you brought it down to earth in the final part of the poem.
Much love,
Justmade.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I think they some of those things we have heard or read describing God and he's Angels and everything about him. I like how you brought it down to earth in the final part of the poem.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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thank you - I am not much into the drum banging aspects of religion, so I am happy you like the down to earth part of this poem, Brooke
Comment from LegendaryAngel
Above all, I must say that the last two sentences of God's breath being either a gust of wind or a soft breeze is an excellent comparison. Found the whole poem powerful and enjoyable to read. I also liked the questions in the poem, as it made it feel inviting to put your own thoughts in there.
Wonderful,
LA
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Above all, I must say that the last two sentences of God's breath being either a gust of wind or a soft breeze is an excellent comparison. Found the whole poem powerful and enjoyable to read. I also liked the questions in the poem, as it made it feel inviting to put your own thoughts in there.
Wonderful,
LA
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Thank you for commenting on the use of questions as that is a device I try to use as much as possible for just the reason you mentioned. Brooke
Comment from Popcorn69
A soft breeze within, I enjoyed that line very much. This entire poem is well written and it reminds us of God's wonderful blessings and about the gospel "good news" of his holy word. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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A soft breeze within, I enjoyed that line very much. This entire poem is well written and it reminds us of God's wonderful blessings and about the gospel "good news" of his holy word. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Thank you ever so much. Good morning, Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
God speaks the loudest when it is a whisper telling us of the dangers of our actions. We call it Conscience. He is always there to guide us, even when we don't want to listen.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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God speaks the loudest when it is a whisper telling us of the dangers of our actions. We call it Conscience. He is always there to guide us, even when we don't want to listen.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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You are ever so right, Charlie. Thank you, Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Nedrajean
Well written with good rhyme and rhythm. I liked the thoughts you expressed - too often we fail to see God's presence and majesty in everyday things. Thanks for reminding of us his continuous presence in all things.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Well written with good rhyme and rhythm. I liked the thoughts you expressed - too often we fail to see God's presence and majesty in everyday things. Thanks for reminding of us his continuous presence in all things.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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thank you so much, Brooke
Comment from Jarlsbane
Great flow, great structure and presence... and a message that is all too true. Something to be said for that still small voice within... jarls
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Great flow, great structure and presence... and a message that is all too true. Something to be said for that still small voice within... jarls
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Michael, thank you yet again. I hope you read my review of your most moving and absolutely breathtakingly beautiful poem in honor of your friend. Having someone of that talent appreciate my work is humbling. Brooke
Comment from Tramore
If I had a six star I would definitely award it here! I loved the message I got from reading this piece and I think the illustration you chose is beautiful.
The last two lines are so true
"God's breath may be at times a gust of wind
But sometimes it's a soft breeze felt within."
These words spoke to my heart.
Blessings from Tramore
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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If I had a six star I would definitely award it here! I loved the message I got from reading this piece and I think the illustration you chose is beautiful.
The last two lines are so true
"God's breath may be at times a gust of wind
But sometimes it's a soft breeze felt within."
These words spoke to my heart.
Blessings from Tramore
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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What a lovely thing to say, and in saying it, render the six unnecessary. Thank you, Brooke
