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Free Verse: When Silence Says Everything36 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a lovely piece of
freeverse, with a smooth
flow to the words throughout,
complemented with a beautiful
picture - how the water sparkles.
Regards,
Margaret.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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This is a lovely piece of
freeverse, with a smooth
flow to the words throughout,
complemented with a beautiful
picture - how the water sparkles.
Regards,
Margaret.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Hello Margaret! So pleased you enjoyed my offering! Thank you! diane
Comment from dtimes3
Nice images. I think the short lines make it seem a little choppy but maybe that's a separate image like ripples in the water-everything has not been smooth in her life. In particular, it sounds as if she is at a family gathering and confronting her feelings and overcoming a situation of sexual abuse suffered years ago and perpetrated by a family member or perhaps she is speaking of an affair. Thank you for sharing.
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Nice images. I think the short lines make it seem a little choppy but maybe that's a separate image like ripples in the water-everything has not been smooth in her life. In particular, it sounds as if she is at a family gathering and confronting her feelings and overcoming a situation of sexual abuse suffered years ago and perpetrated by a family member or perhaps she is speaking of an affair. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2008
Comment from honeytree
I enjoyed reading these words and I felt the ending was sad
but also confusing as to what happened to her. I feel this lady died and could not be identified.
"from one
who stands
before her
now and evermore
beyond recognition
beyond familiarity
beyond possibilities
beyond strangers."
This is my interpretation when reading these words.
The writers words were written very well.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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I enjoyed reading these words and I felt the ending was sad
but also confusing as to what happened to her. I feel this lady died and could not be identified.
"from one
who stands
before her
now and evermore
beyond recognition
beyond familiarity
beyond possibilities
beyond strangers."
This is my interpretation when reading these words.
The writers words were written very well.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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Hello! Thank you for stopping by and for enjoying my offering. diane
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I enjoyed reading your words very much indeed. Honeytree.
Comment from allborn66
This is a great poem. I like how you did the two different stanza types. It gave the poem a great flow. I loved the story. The photo is fabulous.
Barbara
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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This is a great poem. I like how you did the two different stanza types. It gave the poem a great flow. I loved the story. The photo is fabulous.
Barbara
Comment Written 16-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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Hello Barbara! I love experimenting with length and positioning of words and phrases to create an image. Thank you so much for your kind review..diane
Comment from TKField
A very subjective personal piece. I liked the introspection and dreamy nostalgia in this poem. The spare style is just right and i think you strike a good balance between the whimsy and profundity. Very well written.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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A very subjective personal piece. I liked the introspection and dreamy nostalgia in this poem. The spare style is just right and i think you strike a good balance between the whimsy and profundity. Very well written.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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Hello T.K. Field! Yes, this piece is very subjective. Much appreciation for your kind review...diane
Comment from rama devi
Hi KT! Missed you. Seems you have not posted in quite a while back.
An excellent poem. Allusions to the past, to the 'stranger' who is familiar or the familiar who seems strange...enigmatic in a way that makes the reader think outside of the box.
Wonderfully phrased and timed. (read aloud) and also well presented with photo and color choices.
No spag issues. Except I have a doubt about the comma after always in this line stanza. I think maybe the comma should appear at the end of line two, preceding the word always.
she turns her attention
to the shimmering water
always, her oasis of comfort,
as rowers dip and glide
carrying her gently away
NICE:
echoes of recognition
resonate along the
well-worn route
met by quirky grins
and unbridled whoops
of genuine laughter
and long held camaraderie
Warm regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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Hi KT! Missed you. Seems you have not posted in quite a while back.
An excellent poem. Allusions to the past, to the 'stranger' who is familiar or the familiar who seems strange...enigmatic in a way that makes the reader think outside of the box.
Wonderfully phrased and timed. (read aloud) and also well presented with photo and color choices.
No spag issues. Except I have a doubt about the comma after always in this line stanza. I think maybe the comma should appear at the end of line two, preceding the word always.
she turns her attention
to the shimmering water
always, her oasis of comfort,
as rowers dip and glide
carrying her gently away
NICE:
echoes of recognition
resonate along the
well-worn route
met by quirky grins
and unbridled whoops
of genuine laughter
and long held camaraderie
Warm regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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Hello Friend! Yes, it feels wonderful to be back...Thank you for your kind review...I am enjoying reading the different interpretations this offering has elicited. Take Care...diane
Comment from skye
Everyone has that special place where the heart can heal.
Your poem describes one of mine...
The pain and turmoil in this poem is soothed somewhat by the location.
Very well written. Great artwork.
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Everyone has that special place where the heart can heal.
Your poem describes one of mine...
The pain and turmoil in this poem is soothed somewhat by the location.
Very well written. Great artwork.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
great choice of artworks makes this an excellent presentation; creative and dramatic; good imagery; no corrections to be found! well done
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great choice of artworks makes this an excellent presentation; creative and dramatic; good imagery; no corrections to be found! well done
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
Comment from Summer Falls
The peaceful flow of your words is tangible. The melancholy felt by the person in the poem peek through from time to time, but the essence was peace and acceptance. I enjoyed your poem and read it several times out loud. It could very well be a song.
summergirl
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The peaceful flow of your words is tangible. The melancholy felt by the person in the poem peek through from time to time, but the essence was peace and acceptance. I enjoyed your poem and read it several times out loud. It could very well be a song.
summergirl
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
Comment from mmichelle97219
What I really love about the poem is that as a reader I feel like I am standing next to the speaker, and have a special inside their their way of thinking. It is a solidly good poem.
Michelle
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What I really love about the poem is that as a reader I feel like I am standing next to the speaker, and have a special inside their their way of thinking. It is a solidly good poem.
Michelle
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
