Silent Screams
A Poem of Love for One who hears the screams.101 total reviews
Comment from eveeator
Could I but write the verse that would release
the words that could be heard to bring them peace.---> wouldnt this just be a miracle, lovely way to finsih your poem - this is a gorgeous thought and poem to write for your sister, how true your words but then you have lived with this for years, why can some cope and others be tortured by life and what it holds. I wish your sister well I hope someday you find the words or touch that chord that may help and that you yourself find strength to be there and cope , good luck in the contest keep strong, regards yvonne
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Could I but write the verse that would release
the words that could be heard to bring them peace.---> wouldnt this just be a miracle, lovely way to finsih your poem - this is a gorgeous thought and poem to write for your sister, how true your words but then you have lived with this for years, why can some cope and others be tortured by life and what it holds. I wish your sister well I hope someday you find the words or touch that chord that may help and that you yourself find strength to be there and cope , good luck in the contest keep strong, regards yvonne
Comment Written 27-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Yvonne, thank you for taking the time to read poems in the contest no longer being promoted - not many people actually do that. You are most kind, Brooke
Comment from Twomoon
adewpearl, this was just wonderfully written full of great words and an indepth image of the insanity. Very deep and well written. good luck, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2008
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adewpearl, this was just wonderfully written full of great words and an indepth image of the insanity. Very deep and well written. good luck, much love twomoon
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2008
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Thank you - It's good to see people voting in the contests, which I know is happening if someone is reviewing this long-ago posted poem! Peace, Brooke
Comment from bard owl
Feelings of anguish of all kinds is something the mortal spirit must endure alone. Other can help ease the pain, but the tortured soul is in a self-made prison. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Feelings of anguish of all kinds is something the mortal spirit must endure alone. Other can help ease the pain, but the tortured soul is in a self-made prison. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 24-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
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Linda, thank you - I saw the old title come up and wondered why anyone was reviewing it and then remembered the contest -boy did it have a long deadline date!! B rooke
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Nice work adew. Madness is always a curse, and never is there adequate cure. You say your Dee does not present as a hero to the world, but I agree that she definitely IS one, considering what she battles with every day of her life. Sometimes going to the mailbox is a trip into terror for a sufferer. Boundless dmiration goes to you for your support of her; also for writing a fine poem describing the suffering of a loved one. Blessings to you both and good luck xoxoxoxoxxoo
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2008
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Nice work adew. Madness is always a curse, and never is there adequate cure. You say your Dee does not present as a hero to the world, but I agree that she definitely IS one, considering what she battles with every day of her life. Sometimes going to the mailbox is a trip into terror for a sufferer. Boundless dmiration goes to you for your support of her; also for writing a fine poem describing the suffering of a loved one. Blessings to you both and good luck xoxoxoxoxxoo
Comment Written 06-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2008
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you are most understanding and gracious, thank you! Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
What an amazingly beautiful tribute or "love song" as you call it for your sister, Brooke. I can't imagine her suffering and the fear she faces each and every morning. Best of luck in the contest.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2008
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What an amazingly beautiful tribute or "love song" as you call it for your sister, Brooke. I can't imagine her suffering and the fear she faces each and every morning. Best of luck in the contest.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2008
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Indy, I thank you so much for your warm review. Peace, Brooke
Comment from Bananafish308
This poem is incredible. With rare insight and poignant eloquence, you have touched on one of the sad truths of life. Every line is perfect. My favorite:
"so what for us is intermittent grief
screams through their thoughts every day of their lives"
Your author notes were touching and very compassionate. I hope for the best, for your sister. Bill.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2008
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This poem is incredible. With rare insight and poignant eloquence, you have touched on one of the sad truths of life. Every line is perfect. My favorite:
"so what for us is intermittent grief
screams through their thoughts every day of their lives"
Your author notes were touching and very compassionate. I hope for the best, for your sister. Bill.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2008
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Bill, thank you for your compassionate wishes and your most kind review, Brooke :-)
Comment from ~Dovey
This is a courageous offering you write for your sister. She must have much inner strength to fight her demons every day. I would find that exhausting. Much easier to fight those foes that you can actually see. This is a very thoughtful entry to the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2008
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This is a courageous offering you write for your sister. She must have much inner strength to fight her demons every day. I would find that exhausting. Much easier to fight those foes that you can actually see. This is a very thoughtful entry to the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2008
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Thanks so very much for your compassion and your review. Peace, Brooke
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
good choice of artwork and presentation; touching tribute to your sister; I don't think a secret has been passed down as it just isn't everyone's challenge/lesson to face the same thing :-)
Good title; I wish your sister all the best.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2008
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good choice of artwork and presentation; touching tribute to your sister; I don't think a secret has been passed down as it just isn't everyone's challenge/lesson to face the same thing :-)
Good title; I wish your sister all the best.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2008
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It may be everyone's challenge, but I'm sure you've met those people whose mental illnesses do not equip them to meet the challenge - my sister is one of them. That is what I mean by not having been given the secret - some of us were not fitted out with life's coping mechanisms. Thank you so much for your review, Brooke :-)
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It's heartbreaking Brooke and certainly painful for those who suffer from it in more lucid moments. The pain the family experiences is ongoing; as someone who has been involved in healing since childhood, mental illness is something I ponder quite often as it is a challenge for so many; I have a theory i'm working on and will be writing about it (actually I have it in preview mode) but it's no where near being ready and some will look at it as too "new age" to be of much good; but I'm testing it out now :-) I never recommend something I haven't put to the test :-) what is your sister's first name? how old is she now? I would be happy to pray for her. Blessings on your day, Tricia
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Elaine is her proper name but I've never called her that even once - she is Dee.
I'm 57 and she's 15 years older so that makes her 72, I guess. :-) That is most lovely of you to pray for her. I will be eager to read your new concept - make sure you let me know when you post it :-) Brooke
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I will for sure pray for Dee! Another for sure is I will either remember to let you know or will try to pump it up enough to make it attractive to reviewers lol. I have two other things going that have to be dealt with first; I bit on the contest "contentment" and have two weeks to get that in a coherent and orderly fashion; rami devi, my friend organized it, and uh,, she's going to do something spectacular (I'm sure) so it's a real challenge to me lol. C'mon & join the fun (grin) blessings, tricia
Comment from LadyMary
A magnificient, deeply loving tribute. You have shared your heart with everyone who will be privileged to read this. Words fail to express how you have touched mine. Exceptional doesn't say enough. LadyMary
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2008
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A magnificient, deeply loving tribute. You have shared your heart with everyone who will be privileged to read this. Words fail to express how you have touched mine. Exceptional doesn't say enough. LadyMary
Comment Written 31-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2008
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Lady Mary, thank you so very much for this most generous and thoughtful review. I am heartened that you took so much from this poem, Brooke
Comment from dtimes3
Touching and heartfelt. Logical and flows smoothly. I did not have any problem with "We most of us" although it may be considered non-standard speech and maybe a bit colloquial I believe it works effectively to get the readers attention. You could obviously leave off the "We" but I actually prefer the strangeness of it.
++ "unobtrusively reside" yes they do!
++ "shrieks are stifled"
The ending couplet sats it all and should be the goal of all good poets.
Nicely done Pearl!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2008
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Touching and heartfelt. Logical and flows smoothly. I did not have any problem with "We most of us" although it may be considered non-standard speech and maybe a bit colloquial I believe it works effectively to get the readers attention. You could obviously leave off the "We" but I actually prefer the strangeness of it.
++ "unobtrusively reside" yes they do!
++ "shrieks are stifled"
The ending couplet sats it all and should be the goal of all good poets.
Nicely done Pearl!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2008
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thank you so much for this most most thoughtful review - I am in your debt, Brooke :-)
