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A modern sonnet on life's twists and turns.74 total reviews
Comment from electroswiftword
When we are conceived dear Brooke the chart pretty much has been written by the genetic gene pool of our ancestry.
Modern science now has unlocked the gene and can through test pretty much predict who will get cancer, heart conditions, liver etc. But theres no warranty or guarantee. I like you had rather not know and just live a day one moment at a time. One of my favorite thoughts that formulated in my mind is about time. It goes, I need no time, I need no clock, all I need is for them to stop,
Let's put them on the block, release the guilotine, chop, chop chop. No more ticking, no more tocking, a whole new world we may be unlocking. I enjoyed reading this brilliant poem immensely. Will
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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When we are conceived dear Brooke the chart pretty much has been written by the genetic gene pool of our ancestry.
Modern science now has unlocked the gene and can through test pretty much predict who will get cancer, heart conditions, liver etc. But theres no warranty or guarantee. I like you had rather not know and just live a day one moment at a time. One of my favorite thoughts that formulated in my mind is about time. It goes, I need no time, I need no clock, all I need is for them to stop,
Let's put them on the block, release the guilotine, chop, chop chop. No more ticking, no more tocking, a whole new world we may be unlocking. I enjoyed reading this brilliant poem immensely. Will
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Will, you are making my day by reviewing favorites from my portfolio. Not all that many people review unpromoted work, especially when the author didn't even ask them to. I am in your debt for being such a lovely person. Peace, Brooke
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Hey Brooke, it is I who is indebted to you. I enjoy reading good poetry.
There are only a hand full on here that I truly feel are not forcing words just to create something to earn points in this game. I am not on here for that, but just to read and share thoughts. I also find few on here who really get into the poem, digest the the thoughts, ideas , feelings the poet is trying to convey. They seem to be going to and fro in haste, what for? I have read a lot of yours and commented on just a few. I hope you don't mind. I going to read your book on reviewing. Thanks for the compliment, it's just further reflects a good hearted person.
With highest regards, Will.
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It think at any site like this you'll only find a small number of serious writers and then many who have their own reasons. You are most kind for reading my poems, and I do not mind in the very least. I write to communicate with other people, and I'm honored to communicate with somebody who truly wants to read my work and not earn $1.06 for sending two lines of happy thoughts. :-) Thank you again for your kind attention to my words. Peace, Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Brooke,
I thought I had read all of your postings, but in the midst of my messages, I had some that were waiting for me on page 2. This one is beautiful. I am so glad to have been able to read it.
L.E.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2008
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Hi Brooke,
I thought I had read all of your postings, but in the midst of my messages, I had some that were waiting for me on page 2. This one is beautiful. I am so glad to have been able to read it.
L.E.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2008
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I am so glad you like this, a bit more thoughtful than my latest worm poem LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Prince of Life
Interesting thoughts. I think things are in control, but may seems sometimes out of control. Sometimes the end justifies the means. Nice job...
V.K.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Interesting thoughts. I think things are in control, but may seems sometimes out of control. Sometimes the end justifies the means. Nice job...
V.K.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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thanks so much for your positive review :-) Brooke
Comment from davidray
At times, I've b een tempted to see a fortune teller, but do I really want to know what I'm in store for? No thanks. I can wait.
Great work, as usual. Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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At times, I've b een tempted to see a fortune teller, but do I really want to know what I'm in store for? No thanks. I can wait.
Great work, as usual. Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Oh, yeah, no on the fortune tellers for me :-) Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
This is a beautifully written poem. It has a nice even flow of words. It has an even rythm which makes for an easy read. Good job.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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This is a beautifully written poem. It has a nice even flow of words. It has an even rythm which makes for an easy read. Good job.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Thank you for your most positive review. Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from grassroots08
This is an honest look at life, I agree with the message here. Well penned and well to the point. thanks for posting . I enjoyed the flavor of this one. Don
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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This is an honest look at life, I agree with the message here. Well penned and well to the point. thanks for posting . I enjoyed the flavor of this one. Don
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Don, thanks so much for your usually gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
Truly a thought-provoking
writing that is artistic as
well as being well crafted,
taking the reader down all
the thought processes with
the final line,"Life as I
want it is not guaranteed."
How true, in life there are
no guarantees.
Well done
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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Truly a thought-provoking
writing that is artistic as
well as being well crafted,
taking the reader down all
the thought processes with
the final line,"Life as I
want it is not guaranteed."
How true, in life there are
no guarantees.
Well done
Comment Written 25-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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thank you for this perceptive analysis! Brooke :-)
Comment from Gefodda
it would be lovely if we knew what life held for us second by second so we could adapt to suit, but then i wonder if we really want to know what lays ahead. Geoff
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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it would be lovely if we knew what life held for us second by second so we could adapt to suit, but then i wonder if we really want to know what lays ahead. Geoff
Comment Written 25-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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I could not agree more! thanks for your supportive review, Brooke :-)
Comment from Kingsland
a chart would make life rather boring
but the poem is anything but that
it is very well written with a good subject
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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a chart would make life rather boring
but the poem is anything but that
it is very well written with a good subject
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 25-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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thank you for such a lovely review, John :-) Brooke
Comment from Stephy Jemmisparks
if Life has any guarantee in a physical sense, maybe it does guarantee something: it guarantees we will face failure, pain, betrayal, challenges, fights, and ...duh,duh,dhuh....
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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if Life has any guarantee in a physical sense, maybe it does guarantee something: it guarantees we will face failure, pain, betrayal, challenges, fights, and ...duh,duh,dhuh....
Comment Written 25-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2008
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you are most right!!! thank you for your spot on insights, Brooke :-)
