The Race
Is winnng always the point?101 total reviews
Comment from electroswiftword
Wouldn't it be great Brooke if the whole world would pursue laughter like a child on a merry go round. When one falls and makes a blunder, just get up and say, "Ah shit and pick themselves up a go merrily on their way, and all those involved would do likewise. This is a fantastic poem. Now I can see why your on top of the hill, head of the pack. Don't have to run a race with talent like this.
Will
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Wouldn't it be great Brooke if the whole world would pursue laughter like a child on a merry go round. When one falls and makes a blunder, just get up and say, "Ah shit and pick themselves up a go merrily on their way, and all those involved would do likewise. This is a fantastic poem. Now I can see why your on top of the hill, head of the pack. Don't have to run a race with talent like this.
Will
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Will, how sweet that you read something old from my portfolio! Thank you ever so much for doing that and for your generous comments. Peace, Brooke
Comment from Dogz
Well I should win darnit. Ineed to, I need to. Anything less than first is not good enough. Just playing. Cool descriptive poem here. Dogz
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Well I should win darnit. Ineed to, I need to. Anything less than first is not good enough. Just playing. Cool descriptive poem here. Dogz
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Dogz, I can count on you to brighten my day with your wit - do you know Donovan and/or Fish? Their reviews always make me laugh too - the ladies are never this funny! LOL Thank you :-)
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I can only try:)
Comment from yachtworknz
Nice. Read well. Form a continual progressing vision in my mind. I like the ending also. About thee quarters of the way through I was saying to myself "Ok, do we get a zinger at the end?" and sure enough, circle back to child's laughter.
Thanks for posting
Scott
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Nice. Read well. Form a continual progressing vision in my mind. I like the ending also. About thee quarters of the way through I was saying to myself "Ok, do we get a zinger at the end?" and sure enough, circle back to child's laughter.
Thanks for posting
Scott
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Glad I was able to deliver the pay off! Thank you, Scott.
Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from Earthwriter
excellen piece of whimsical verse my friend it is refreshing to see something of this nature written in these troubled times
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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excellen piece of whimsical verse my friend it is refreshing to see something of this nature written in these troubled times
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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hey, if we all start writing misery pieces one after another, we'll all commit mass suicide!!! thanks for your lovely comment. Peace, Brooke
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
And that's the best kind of race. Oh to be a child, again! You, like me, recall the joy of being a child. I didn't get to be one most of the time but when I did, I recall and relish how I loved it.
Great post, again, Brooke.
Penny
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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And that's the best kind of race. Oh to be a child, again! You, like me, recall the joy of being a child. I didn't get to be one most of the time but when I did, I recall and relish how I loved it.
Great post, again, Brooke.
Penny
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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Penny, I'm glad this helped you recall a joy or two :-) Peace, Brooke :-)
Comment from RaymondJohn
I remember a great merry-go-round scene in an Alfred Hitchcock movie. I liked to ride them when I was a kid. Of course we would get off of them while they were moving and try to get back on. Usually the man in charge made us sit in the boats. Great story. Ray.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I remember a great merry-go-round scene in an Alfred Hitchcock movie. I liked to ride them when I was a kid. Of course we would get off of them while they were moving and try to get back on. Usually the man in charge made us sit in the boats. Great story. Ray.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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oh, I remember that movie and the smashed glasses and the fun house - I love Hitchcock - this is not exactly the mood I was going for. LOL :-) Thank you! Brooke
Comment from RazberryBullet
This brought back many happy memories:) Loved the beautiful picture! I haven't seen many merry-go-rounds the past few years. Maybe its because our children have grown up and I'm not in the right company ;p
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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This brought back many happy memories:) Loved the beautiful picture! I haven't seen many merry-go-rounds the past few years. Maybe its because our children have grown up and I'm not in the right company ;p
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I think that is it - they're still out there, and you're still allowed on, kid or not! Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I can relate to this poem it takes me back quiet a few years to my childhood at the fairs it descriptions are spot on adding that extra zing to the poem very enjoyable read regards Fuller
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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I can relate to this poem it takes me back quiet a few years to my childhood at the fairs it descriptions are spot on adding that extra zing to the poem very enjoyable read regards Fuller
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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thanks so much - I'm glad my poem caused you to recall happy memories :-)
Comment from Solrac
You must love animals very much because even animals manequins are the center of your poems. I love to read then and every day I look to see if adewpearl posted one. Have you contacted any publisher's yet. Would love to have your book with your signature on the first page.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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You must love animals very much because even animals manequins are the center of your poems. I love to read then and every day I look to see if adewpearl posted one. Have you contacted any publisher's yet. Would love to have your book with your signature on the first page.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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You're right - now I've moved on to wooden animals! LOL
No publishers yet - that's the next step :-) Thank you for always being so encouraging Peace, Brooke
Comment from carolm5415
A beauiful ride which brings a smile to the reader's face. Children love the merry go round at the park and even the littlest ones have fun on the gaily painted horses. No SPAG and perfect rhythm and rhyme.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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A beauiful ride which brings a smile to the reader's face. Children love the merry go round at the park and even the littlest ones have fun on the gaily painted horses. No SPAG and perfect rhythm and rhyme.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2008
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you are most thoughtful - thank you! Brooke
