The Ibis
Philosphical ponderings in the land of A-Z.103 total reviews
Comment from Stephy Jemmisparks
If you meant zen Buddhism, It never had any significance in Singapore setting. The cows were more revered, I was "bred" a Buddhist, accepted the lord at 15, baptized at 18, and followed the Lord Jesus ever since .
This poem has a mysterious feel to it...it excites me...I ma always on my feet to jump up for news of myths and mythology,even fantasy.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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If you meant zen Buddhism, It never had any significance in Singapore setting. The cows were more revered, I was "bred" a Buddhist, accepted the lord at 15, baptized at 18, and followed the Lord Jesus ever since .
This poem has a mysterious feel to it...it excites me...I ma always on my feet to jump up for news of myths and mythology,even fantasy.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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glad you enjoyed this poem and took some meaning from it :-) Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is a factual piece with again very strong descriptions and usage of words great presentation I read your notes underneath the poem very factual well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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This is a factual piece with again very strong descriptions and usage of words great presentation I read your notes underneath the poem very factual well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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thanks so much for your positive review! Peace, Brooke
Comment from EKPoet
Interesting construction, I like this alphabetical order, makes a great framework for poetry, as Denise Levertov proved in her masterpiece, Relearning The Alphabet. here you create a sense of mystery, of mystical power underlying the image of the ibis, in some tight, tense lines, almost like looking at a statue of an Ibis, and swearing that you saw it move out of the corner of your eye. EKPoet
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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Interesting construction, I like this alphabetical order, makes a great framework for poetry, as Denise Levertov proved in her masterpiece, Relearning The Alphabet. here you create a sense of mystery, of mystical power underlying the image of the ibis, in some tight, tense lines, almost like looking at a statue of an Ibis, and swearing that you saw it move out of the corner of your eye. EKPoet
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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thanks so much for your kind comments - peace, Brooke :-)
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Check out that book by Levertov, I think you will enjoy it. One of the great women poets of the latter twentieth century, and one of my favorites, all time i also like Candles in Babylon and Oblique Prayers. EK
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I will, thank you! :-)
Comment from raveeshvarma
A more subtle use of words starting with consequetive letter of the alphabet. However, the effort is a little more obvious this time around. Why should the "willowy wisebird" alone be "x-orted" to yield its yen? Especially given that Orpheus' journey to the Underworld ends in disappointment, and eventually he is butchered and his head comes to rest by the island of Lesbos, still singing. Just some thoughts...
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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A more subtle use of words starting with consequetive letter of the alphabet. However, the effort is a little more obvious this time around. Why should the "willowy wisebird" alone be "x-orted" to yield its yen? Especially given that Orpheus' journey to the Underworld ends in disappointment, and eventually he is butchered and his head comes to rest by the island of Lesbos, still singing. Just some thoughts...
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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well, if Orpheus is also exhorted, I lose the alphabetical thing :-D thanks for your kind input. Peace, Brooke
Comment from bkrighter
The Ibis is more terse than some of your other A-Z poems, appropriately one might argue, for a figure that might be seen as zen-like--long on thought, short on words.
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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The Ibis is more terse than some of your other A-Z poems, appropriately one might argue, for a figure that might be seen as zen-like--long on thought, short on words.
Steve
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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thanks so much for your perceptive analysis :-) Brooke
Comment from llaliberte
Thank you for your notes I like this and found it very thoughtful you did a great job explaining the bird and the whole thing comes together nice job keep it going
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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Thank you for your notes I like this and found it very thoughtful you did a great job explaining the bird and the whole thing comes together nice job keep it going
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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thanks so very much for this thoughtful response :-) Brooke
Comment from carolm5415
Another great A to Z poem and this one is very educational as well. The ibis looks to me like the modern pelican we have here in the summer. A really enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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Another great A to Z poem and this one is very educational as well. The ibis looks to me like the modern pelican we have here in the summer. A really enjoyable read.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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thanks so much for your thoughtful review, Brooke :-)
Comment from ledford
Great job:-)
Love these lines:
Orpheus plays quietly,
reverently,
sacredly.
Timeless tunes.
Good luck in the contest:-)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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Great job:-)
Love these lines:
Orpheus plays quietly,
reverently,
sacredly.
Timeless tunes.
Good luck in the contest:-)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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It's not a contest, but thank you anyway!!! :-) Brooke
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Another free-spirited, lovely poem, Pearly One. The zest with which you write is truly catching. I think it must travel through the air much like electricity does! I've been doing a movie script for a children's animated movie and am now into rewrites for final drafts and have been in the doldrums with it... but your zest... well, I've caught it! The rewrites shall proceed!!! ;-) Many thanks!
Whizpurr ^-^
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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Another free-spirited, lovely poem, Pearly One. The zest with which you write is truly catching. I think it must travel through the air much like electricity does! I've been doing a movie script for a children's animated movie and am now into rewrites for final drafts and have been in the doldrums with it... but your zest... well, I've caught it! The rewrites shall proceed!!! ;-) Many thanks!
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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I am thrilled you are inspired! Thank you. :-) Brooke
Comment from GerryMacNeil
Imagine imperial immortality.
Just know life.
These lines are powerful, the repeated "i" words standing in glorious contrast to teh immediacy of the three that follow. Superb! GerryMacNeil
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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Imagine imperial immortality.
Just know life.
These lines are powerful, the repeated "i" words standing in glorious contrast to teh immediacy of the three that follow. Superb! GerryMacNeil
Comment Written 22-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2008
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thank you - I am so glad you enjoyed! :-) Brooke
