Comment from Shane Marquardt

Excellent

Great job, Skye. I could take a lesson from you in how to provide a message in few words. I tend to ramble, so I appreciate your ability here.
Enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing

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Comment from HalfHoff

Excellent

certainly, not another word was needed for any reader to completely feel this one. If 'we' and/or 'they' are indeed ALL "God's Children" ... then someone who obviously feels 'mightier' has some explaining to do ... superb entry! XO Lea Ann

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Comment from jonouk

Excellent

Very much to the point, and very true as well. A situation happening all over the western world I think, more so in some countries than others. Good choice of words to communicate the sentiment.

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Comment from Mike K2

Excellent

It took a while for me to understand this, but your notes made this quicker. That's why it is important for God to be in the home. I remember the production that sexual activity in my step-daughter became. I felt that the poem made a good point, is well written and also had a great supporting illustration.

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Comment from Jendowoz

Excellent

What an interesting approach, in so few words, there is definitively a huge story and the picture helps secure the meaning of the poem. Well done and good luck in the competition.

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Comment from dkneale

Excellent

Very solid contest entry. Nice choice of words used in this piece. I do agree with your authors notes, but might I suggest that you change "God expelled." to "God's expelled." I think it could better clarify your point. Very nicely done. Debra

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Comment from clairdel

Good

Skye- Graduation is a appropriate title for this piece. In lieu of high school,life becomes the classroom, and God the Headmaster. On graduation day your gown is backless. You still get a certificate, but this one starts with the word "Birth". And your the one presenting the graduation gift. It isn't a new car or Bahama vacation, but it makes grandma smile all the same.

Regards- Claire Marie

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Comment from MercyWrites

Excellent

I'm glad you added the authors' notes I agree moral
are leaving the schools, and every place else. I saw something on television, a few years back that the Russian government is allowing churches to flourish because so many young men were committing suicide.

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Thanks for taking your time to read and review. It made my day. I did not know that... it makes me sad, for the young men, happy for their society now.

Comment from MissCellanea

Excellent

I must admit, when I first read this, I saw Got expelled. This, of course, made sense. Then my eyes refocused, and I read the line correctly!

Powerful statement, indeed. 1962, wasn't it? And each year, the environment in our schools gets worse. Thought-provoking piece you have here. Thanks for sharing. Sue

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Thanks for taking your time to read and review. It made my day. Yes, it does get worse and worse.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thanks for your note; I missed the point at first reading, thinking that God expelled the student. Then, I wondered if you meant that despite the bankrupt moral values, there is hope for the next generation??

So, since good poetry should cause the reader to think and question, you met the challenge, especially when limited with only 6 words for the message.

Thanks again for sharing.

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Thanks for reading, reviewing, and the great comments. You got it just right.