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Viewing comments for Chapter 153 "Graduation"Life stories in only six words!
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Comment from Twomoon
skye, a very nice concept in a short verse, enjoyed this read. Ah, grandchildren...the light.. I appreciate you thoughts here, much love twomoon
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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skye, a very nice concept in a short verse, enjoyed this read. Ah, grandchildren...the light.. I appreciate you thoughts here, much love twomoon
Comment Written 16-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Thanks so much. Grandchildren... the best.
Comment from fayesh
I think you may have an error in the second two words. Don't you mean "Got expelled." I think with the change, the story would make more sense.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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I think you may have an error in the second two words. Don't you mean "Got expelled." I think with the change, the story would make more sense.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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No, it is God expelled. You might want to read the author notes. Thanks for taking the time to review and comment. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from starkat
You said a lot in only six words, getting your point across very succintly. You draw the relationship between church and state/schools, and the moral fabric of society. We need to consider the type of world that our future children will be born into. So, your story is thought-provoking.
Good luck with your entry in this contest! This is a story that I think will resonate with many.
Well done. Thanks for the notes. I might of thought it was biographical.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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You said a lot in only six words, getting your point across very succintly. You draw the relationship between church and state/schools, and the moral fabric of society. We need to consider the type of world that our future children will be born into. So, your story is thought-provoking.
Good luck with your entry in this contest! This is a story that I think will resonate with many.
Well done. Thanks for the notes. I might of thought it was biographical.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Thanks for the great review, comments, and stars. Many of us could fit here... it is universal.
Comment from Mischief's Momma
I like where you are going with this, and the metaphor of God being expelled from our schools is a good one.
With such a format the words really have to pack a punch and I really don't feel that you are quite there with your last two words. You are trying to take too big a leap, and I base this on your notes too. Concentrate on the morals issue. Beautiful grandchildren can be here from all kinds of circumstances - many very moral in nature.
Good luck in the contest!
MM
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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I like where you are going with this, and the metaphor of God being expelled from our schools is a good one.
With such a format the words really have to pack a punch and I really don't feel that you are quite there with your last two words. You are trying to take too big a leap, and I base this on your notes too. Concentrate on the morals issue. Beautiful grandchildren can be here from all kinds of circumstances - many very moral in nature.
Good luck in the contest!
MM
Comment Written 13-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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You are correct, but for this one, I wanted a non-judgemental aspect to the event.
Thanks for your review and thoughts.
Comment from MizteryWriter
Skye,
I think you did an excellent job writing your six word story. You chose words that hold a depth of meaning for many readers. You were able to get across the ambiguity feelings about a pregnant high schooler and new grandchild.
Thanks!
MizteryWriter
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Skye,
I think you did an excellent job writing your six word story. You chose words that hold a depth of meaning for many readers. You were able to get across the ambiguity feelings about a pregnant high schooler and new grandchild.
Thanks!
MizteryWriter
Comment Written 12-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this very supportive and kind review. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
This is cool Skye and says so much in those few words. I'm not a church-goer, but do believe in God and feel that we need to keep a balance, not go one way or the other too far. Expelling God from schools is the beginning of the fabric of society crumbling - most foundations start there along with the family home. What hope is there left?
Well said and good luck xoxoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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This is cool Skye and says so much in those few words. I'm not a church-goer, but do believe in God and feel that we need to keep a balance, not go one way or the other too far. Expelling God from schools is the beginning of the fabric of society crumbling - most foundations start there along with the family home. What hope is there left?
Well said and good luck xoxoxoxoxo
Comment Written 12-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this very supportive and kind review. I appreciate it very much. Home is indeed where it all must begin.
Comment from nora arjuna
hello skye. this is a great six-word that tells a story. It's now up to us to keep God's presence in the minds of younger generation. All the best to you.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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hello skye. this is a great six-word that tells a story. It's now up to us to keep God's presence in the minds of younger generation. All the best to you.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this very supportive and kind review. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from EllenV
Kathy, I am indeed absolutely amazed that you could say so much with just six words. It is sad that our children are exposed to so much filth at school, but are not allowed to hear the word God except in expletives (taking the Lord's name in vain.)
I taught second grade, and although I couldn't talk about religion, I tried to set a good example and teach the children good values. I couldn't talk to my students about the Source of all that is light and good, but I could try to live it.
Love,
ellen
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Kathy, I am indeed absolutely amazed that you could say so much with just six words. It is sad that our children are exposed to so much filth at school, but are not allowed to hear the word God except in expletives (taking the Lord's name in vain.)
I taught second grade, and although I couldn't talk about religion, I tried to set a good example and teach the children good values. I couldn't talk to my students about the Source of all that is light and good, but I could try to live it.
Love,
ellen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Your example is definately tremendous. You have a terrific way of showing, and I think your students benefitted from your kindness and sweet spirit. Thanks once again.
Comment from Dogz
There is a very fine line with this subject. They teach sex ed, but not relgion. IT's okay for same sex to marry? Where is it right? Or wrong? We need to teach sex ed I agree with. To keep the spread of disease down. But do we need to teach religion when there is so many? Can we theach the children that we each have a faith to turn to? I think we can. but I don't think one teachers views should be pressed upon an impressionable child. Plant the seed and let the children ask the parents. Is it good enough from a religious apect? Maybe not. From a non religious view, maybe? Avery fine line indeed. A very fine poem. Dogz
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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There is a very fine line with this subject. They teach sex ed, but not relgion. IT's okay for same sex to marry? Where is it right? Or wrong? We need to teach sex ed I agree with. To keep the spread of disease down. But do we need to teach religion when there is so many? Can we theach the children that we each have a faith to turn to? I think we can. but I don't think one teachers views should be pressed upon an impressionable child. Plant the seed and let the children ask the parents. Is it good enough from a religious apect? Maybe not. From a non religious view, maybe? Avery fine line indeed. A very fine poem. Dogz
Comment Written 12-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this very thoughtful and kind review. I appreciate it very much. Your ideas are strong, and make sense.
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Your very welcome. It is a sticky subject.
Comment from Phill-Phonics
Nicely stated and covered the whole story of religion being booted from schools where it is needed. At least you said beautiful grandchild and not unwanted. Nicely done-Phill.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2008
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Nicely stated and covered the whole story of religion being booted from schools where it is needed. At least you said beautiful grandchild and not unwanted. Nicely done-Phill.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2008
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your kind comments.
