Comment from mtngalofnc

Excellent

Hi Mike,
How I wish I had a six for this. The art and color scheme are great. Your poem is so well crafted and the mood is set by your sincere honesty and open heart. Loved the whole write. Thank you for sharing and God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2008

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2008

There are times that I regret that, but I know of no other way to be. If I try, I just feel that I am ridiculious. I thank you very much for your loving compliments and this review. Mike K2

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

a lovely read mike...very tender and true and honest and that is one of my favorite things about your writing so pure...yours, diana

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2008

Well, sometimes the honesty brings out E. Eddy here. lol Thank you so much for this very nice review and the compliments. With love, Mike

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Hey Mike, You have a sweet, sentimental heart and you always have great ideas. I find when you stick with brevity, you really nail it. With the longer pieces, such as this one, you tend to get a little off kilter with your meter which then throws the reader off. I don't mean to hurt your feelings but I do think this is worth considering taking a look at Mike.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008

Maybe I will better consider the meter in the future. This is exactly how my heart wanted it to come out and I am absolutely exhausted and I got to keep pushing to eliminate the other projects. My heart loves being out there, but I tell you what, being all heart has really been a sacrifice that has cost and wears on me. I know no other way and in a way, honesty is attached to that. Making a critism doesn't really bother me, it is an honor to be able to consider it.

Thank you for your compliments and this review.

reply by Judian James on 10-Oct-2008

Thank you for an excellent reply!

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

Wow, Mike. This was such a beautiful and haunting read. I feel that you've expressed a lot through your posts here, yet you still manage to make each one sound fresh. Nothing to pick at here.

PS - you didn't use 'then' lol.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2008

[Then] it's a bare bones poem, ey. Mrs. Louis asked about who this was written for and I said that the list would be so long, I would be charge a top post. It does have a haunting feel about it,I have too many people in my life that decide(d) to be very ghost like.

I don't know the in's and out's of your religion as the Muslims in the area are afraid to voice them to me. Unless I wish to convert, which I am not interested in doing. The American Indains have a practice of spirit keeping. This is usually with the departed, for a period of time to hold them in your heart, so that God knows that they were cherished with in you life. I have also chosen to do this with the living people who have touched me, even if the motives aren't necessarily upfront or pure.

Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Mike

Comment from Dr_Sardonicus

Exceptional

A lovely writing. I think you've got it made, should you need to be in a contest.

I really don't know what to say, really. Your piece is one of the best I've seen all day.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

Wow! I thank you very much for your generous rating, the compliments and this review. I've had my poems that took tremendious thought and a long time to write. This one can from a thought and wrote itself very quickly, as if I had someone whispering it in my ear. . Again thanks, Mike

Comment from justmade

Excellent

It's always great to have someone that makes you feel this way. This is awesome Mike. I think you did great the way you expressed how you feel about this person.
Much love,
Justmade.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

While indeed, someone that can inspire this can bring out the full breadth of passion, it can be extremely wearing on the nerves as well. Also one's faith at times. lol Thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike

Comment from Twomoon

Excellent

Mike, hello, well wish that I had six for this one, it is so divine, so creative and I loved your touch that creeped into my soul on this lovely poem... no notes? Well, this was open thoughts and the art was perfect for it, like you were riding out in the open west..hummm a clue? smile..you are a mystery, my dearest friend, one day we may meet and I will smile at the mystery in you! So for now, I just smile at the poet, ever so endearing, in you! have a gorgeous day, filled with colors painted upon your world with only the most glorious touch! much love twomoon

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

Well I put wrote in the names of every person that I could have written this for, the notes would have been very burdomsom. Mrs. Louis made the rare appearance and revied this, so I did reply to her about my beliefs on the veil. But yes, the west was on my mind, as a memeber that never feels well. I feel my hearts pointed in the right direction, but I can't figure out whether its the lid or the pan handle. lol

I regret that I am bogged down on my photo project. I didn't realize that I had a hundred and twenty to adjust and photoshop spot. I love the rubber stamp tool. I'm about two thirds through. The problem is I only snap the shutter if it's a good shot. The city scapes with the boats look great, but had to take a bit of time to spot out the trash. In all honesty, it wasn't bad because the skimmer boat they have. got most of it. I also have to type out my hand written poetic story, I not happy about this because I won't pubically release it until I have that photograph. I should be back by the weekend. I have about four poems to write. This on had to be put out.

I thank you for this lovely review and those compliments. I am glad that someone as special like you was touched. I love the colors but only want to walk aournd the edge of the sunset. Much love, as well...

reply by Twomoon on 09-Oct-2008

ok, you walk around, and I will play in it!! lol..have a great day, hugs twomoon

reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

You as well! Hugs.

Comment from J.E. Brown

Excellent

A great poem that deserves 5 stars. I admit that poetry isn't my strong point, but sometimes you can tell where the inspiration comes from. And this one comes from the authors heart.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

I enjoyed this review and got a kick about. I had a poem published in a vanity poetry book and they also put it on a sound recording. Most of my poetry comes from my heart, even my humorous works. In the recording, they intro it with, "This poem exposes the poet's soul." I got a flattered kick out of it and also thought, "Yea, it exposed my paycheck into being cut by a third, as well."

Thank you verymuch for your compliments and this review. I was a good one, too. Mike

Comment from Lady & Louis

Excellent

You've spoken well of the impact someone living in Spirit can have here, Mike. It sounds as if this person hardly knows you know about them - am I reading that right? Rather a sad situation, for all tbe blessing they bring. Good piece.

Cheers,
Louise

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

I don't think this is the case. If I rattle name that could have inspired this one, you would think I was Rambo with his M-60 machine gun. One is my high school sweetheart as our emotions and a dream was much bigger then we could accept. I had God's patience with her, but her life here was more limited then the reconcilliation of the emotions required. I paid in droves for that. I had dinner with the most beautiful lady that I ever met, spirit wise as well. The next event, it broke my heart as she was terrified of me. Adding to that frustration, I know there is a relationship, but not the trust for the honesty required to put things in a perspective. It can also be several members here and neighbors as well....

See what I mean. I don't know why, but I tend to spirit keep. Long before my understanding of it as explained by the American Indian, Fools Crow. It is also about the veil, I believe that the spiritual part of us, also exists there and it is a very open and honest place. Relationships parallel themselves and are unincumbered with the trivalitiews that we place on ourselves and friends. I do have some evidience for this. That sweetheart exists in my mind, but when my grandmother was ill and dieing; at the park I was having conversations with her. Even arguements. What she said didn't make any sense, my grandmother was afraid and wanted me around, but didn't want me there. The Jean would come back hugs and kisses, with that gentle hand rubbing soft, just wait, you'll ujnderstand what I have said. What happened was I walked in had my last say with my grandmother and encouraged her to pass on, that somehow everything will be fine here. I walked out and she passed. My grandmother was a very selfish person and always had to have it her way, or there would be plenty of hell to pay. I caught plenty of that. Things transpired exactly as they were said that they would.

I guess the gist of this poem is that for everybody that touched me, even if things change, I appreciate their role in my life and I will be there for them as best that I can. I have no reason to believe that it will be the same from the opposite.

I thank you for the rare occurance of this review and the compliments. I have to catch a nap as I have photoshop spotted and adjusted about 80 photographs. So what happens at work? I end up checking sheets for spots and approving them for printing. I am seeing about three screens. Have a great day ahead! With love, Mike

Comment from Donovan

Excellent

I certainly think that you have expressed a deep love, one that is not fleeting but eternal. Your words flow and though it was not possible for me to know the object of the love, it was certainly there.

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 Comment Written 08-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2008

Thank yu very much for the compliments and this review. I enjoyed this, as the object of my love tends to have many faces. Mike