Comment from mmichelle97219

Excellent

You could have described a good many of my foster children who we work so hard to rapair and rebuild. I thought this was very expressive. Good luck in the contest.
Michelle

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008

Hello Michelle, Exactly ... I was speaking of the the net result of what happens when a child is not loved. Thanks for your great review. Regards, Margaret

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

latebloomer,

A very nice writing, great word choices and your usage of the words is outstanding. Very well written and you should do well in this contest. Good luck

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2008

Hello rmdelta, thank you for your great review. regards, LateBloomer

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hello writer.
This is very well done to meet the criteria. It is excellent. I also enjoyed the Hemmingway quote. I'll be looking for you again. rebecca

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hello ulster3, Thank you for the great review. Regards, LateBloomer

Comment from sueseagull

Exceptional

Very powerful in so few words. The picture is perfect. I have a hard enough time with Haiku! I see no corrections needed. The best of luck in the contest!
Sue

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hello sueseagull, Thank you for the great review. Regards, LateBloomer

Comment from amada

Excellent

This is a very powerful story in only six words. It tells of someone who needs love, or a kind word, or a sunny smile. The black and white colors adds drama to it.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hello amada, Thank you for the great review. Regards, LateBloomer

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

Hi LB. This is such a sad piece of writing. With just six words you have created such an air of sadness and loneliness. Good luck

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Thank you, Wendyanne. I say to the mothers of the world: Love Your Children. Regards, LateBloomer

Comment from Jonesy

Excellent

Never thought these six-worders should be in the story section because there is no story-review criteria that can be applied -- at least for me. More than anything, they read like a haiku so should go in the poem section (again, to me).

But them's the rules and would be unfair for me to mark down just because they're followed. Unfortunately, there's nothing else for me to review, though.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hello Jonesy, I agree with your comments. Personally, I just love the thought of saying a mouthful in only six words. Haiku's have strict syllable count and other requirements. In this contest, the word can be as long or short as the writer chooses. However, at the end, those six-word stories have a lot in common with the Haiku.

Also, there's not always a lot to say about some six-word stories, which makes it difficult on the reviewer.

Thanks for stopping by and leaving your comments. See what a lively exchange that little poem started. Maybe that's what they're really all about.

Thanks and smiles, LateBloomer

Comment from babylonia

Excellent

never loved is a pretty bold statement. everyone needs to feel love sometime. even if it isn't romantic love. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. the pic goes very well. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
good luck~
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hello babylonia,

Yes, I do know a few people who do not and never have felt loved, mostly because it was not shown to them in their childhood from their own parents, e.g. Mother abandons a whole family including infant. Yes, that person did not feel loved and went through life and continuesto go through life feeling unloved, even though one is married and has a family--somehow this person (and a few others that I know of for similar reasons) has never felt worthy. For those who come from the "Leave it to Beaver World" this is hard to understand, but those who come from "the street" know and understand it well.

Thank you for your insightful review and generous rating.

Regards, LateBloomer

p.s. Let not forget the group of people who have been loved, but just could not "feel" it or "accept" it for one reason or another. Those people also have and continue to go through life feeling unloved ... be it right or be it wrong - we can't always explain a person's psyche. Thx again!

reply by babylonia on 11-Oct-2008

there are a lot of who don't feel love no matter how much someone tries to love them. it is unfortunate. the amount of people abandoned as a child is probably a lot higher than most of us know. there are so many unhealthy people walking around. it is sad.
love,
barbara

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Excellent! It sums up the story of too many hearts in this world. It is almost as good as the example in your comments -but EH used a strong image, and "always broken" is informative, but this would be even better if you could produce a strong image as well - one that speaks volumes! Then it would be exceptional!

This Should fare well in voting booth.
Good luck!

Warm regards,
rama devi

Eexcellent.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hey, I've been having a difficult time processing the photos through FanArtReview. So, I had to (sorta) take the first photo that I came across. I was kinda looking for a photo of a doll with a broken neck or something like that. Do you think that would be a stronger image. This computer is impossible. If you come across a photo that you think would make a better image, e-mail me and I'll look it up. Thank you for your great review. I'm glad you understood this one. Regards, LateBloomer

reply by rama devi on 11-Oct-2008

I did not mean a photo, actually, I meant an image in the poem - like "baby shoes" - and image that speaks volumes in context of the 'story". BUt good artwork or photo would also enhance the work. i think the one you chose works just fine.

warm regards,
rama devi

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Ohhhhhhhh, thank you. I thought you felt the photo could be improved. Again, I stopped looking through the photos because of comptuer issues .. Thanks again, Bye ... LateBloomer

Comment from Nightwind1

Excellent

This is a very powerful six word story. The artwork fit very well. You painted a vivid picture of someone in great need. Very well written.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2008

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2008

Hello Nightwind1, Thank you for your great review. Regards, LateBloomer