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Viewing comments for Chapter 155 "W h y ?"Life stories in only six words!
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Comment from Lois Delaney
Wow! You amaze me, LateBloomer. These six word stories are wonderful. This one really speaks to me. Please read my latest post if you get a chance. You'll know what I mean. I love this one. It was written for me. There comes the tears. Hugs!xxxx
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Wow! You amaze me, LateBloomer. These six word stories are wonderful. This one really speaks to me. Please read my latest post if you get a chance. You'll know what I mean. I love this one. It was written for me. There comes the tears. Hugs!xxxx
Comment Written 26-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2008
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Thank you, and I am humbled and honored by your review. I did read you post. Please ask me anytime. I usually only read poetry, but I make exceptions for "exceptional" people. You are "exceptional", actually spectacular, a shining star. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from Janilou
This is beautiful and tragic all in one. It brought tears to my eyes, which I mentioned somewhere else, too. ;-)
This story spoke to me in six words more than others do in hundreds.
Excellent work.
Jan
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2008
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This is beautiful and tragic all in one. It brought tears to my eyes, which I mentioned somewhere else, too. ;-)
This story spoke to me in six words more than others do in hundreds.
Excellent work.
Jan
Comment Written 19-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2008
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Hello Jan,
Thank you for your most heartfelt review.
Your review brings tears to my eyes.
Regards, LateBloomer
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I see you won. Congratulations! It was an incredible entry and deserved to win.
Jan
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I've been on FS for two years - this is the first time that I won first place in anything ... I won third place one time in another contest earlier in the year, but that's it ... this is why I'm a LateBloomer and a turtle as well, but like they say about turtles ... slow and steady wins the race.
Thank you. Regards, LateBloomer/Margaret
Comment from Ginny
A story from and of the heart. Great entry. Good luck! I almost reviwed with the same number of words and realized that I had to say more! I enjoy the six-word story for everything that it does not say and allows the imagination to focus on and invent.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2008
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A story from and of the heart. Great entry. Good luck! I almost reviwed with the same number of words and realized that I had to say more! I enjoy the six-word story for everything that it does not say and allows the imagination to focus on and invent.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2008
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Hello Ginny, Thank you for your in-depth review.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from Jo52800
A lot of communication in 6 words. It does tell a story, not just a statement. Good job!! just one punctuation suggestion. End each line with a period. I think it might add to the impact. Or not. It was good as it is too.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2008
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A lot of communication in 6 words. It does tell a story, not just a statement. Good job!! just one punctuation suggestion. End each line with a period. I think it might add to the impact. Or not. It was good as it is too.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2008
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Hello Jo,
Thank you for your great review. I'm soooo glad you said something about the punctuation. I was torn which way to go. I thought that some would take points off if I used periods as they are not full sentences, although I know that we have poetic lic. here. I'm glad you made the suggestion. Now I'll wait to see if I get any "cons" regarding the punctuation - LOL. Sometimes the smallest changes can make the biggest difference.
Thanks again. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo LateBloomer ......
Your six words are certainly thought-provoking ......
"Never loved - always broken - needs repair!" You certainly have set my thinking off on various tangents ...
because, whatever it is that you refer to has to be
singular - using the word 'needs' as you have done.
An Artist could be challenged to illustrate this and produce a masterpiece.
As it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
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Hullo LateBloomer ......
Your six words are certainly thought-provoking ......
"Never loved - always broken - needs repair!" You certainly have set my thinking off on various tangents ...
because, whatever it is that you refer to has to be
singular - using the word 'needs' as you have done.
An Artist could be challenged to illustrate this and produce a masterpiece.
As it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
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Thank you, Nanette. All I can say is ... mothers, please love your children - I know I'm preaching to the choir. Regards,LateBloomer
Comment from Terror2s
Sad, but powerful. I like the way you wrote your poem in phrases and have it formatted almost like steps. The reader naturally folows the words to see what happens next. Terror
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Sad, but powerful. I like the way you wrote your poem in phrases and have it formatted almost like steps. The reader naturally folows the words to see what happens next. Terror
Comment Written 16-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Hello Terro2s, Thank you for your generous review. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from shelley kaye
aww sad and heartbreaking
yet profound and thought provoking
excellent entry!
thank you for sharing it
and good luck in the contest! :-)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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aww sad and heartbreaking
yet profound and thought provoking
excellent entry!
thank you for sharing it
and good luck in the contest! :-)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Hello shelley, I'm always honored to hear from you. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from LadyMary
One can sense the desolation in these six words. Choice of vocabulary is clean and clear. Even the layout strikes at the reader. Excellent. LadyMary
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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One can sense the desolation in these six words. Choice of vocabulary is clean and clear. Even the layout strikes at the reader. Excellent. LadyMary
Comment Written 16-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
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Thank you, LadyMary. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very good and very powerful. As a first grade teacher, I see many children that could have written those very words. It's scary. You did a great job.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Very good and very powerful. As a first grade teacher, I see many children that could have written those very words. It's scary. You did a great job.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Hello barbara,
Yes, it was the children that I was thinking of ... in an unloved environment, they suffer their whole life, even when they do find someone who loves them ... they are always in doubt - insecure. Thanks for the great review.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from Judian James
Oh, how sad are these words? They go perfectly with the artwork. It's amazing how much damage an abusive childhood can do ... physically, emotionally, mentally, spiritually ... it doesn't matter, abuse is abuse and then we're never feeling loved, but always feeling broken. Very well done.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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Oh, how sad are these words? They go perfectly with the artwork. It's amazing how much damage an abusive childhood can do ... physically, emotionally, mentally, spiritually ... it doesn't matter, abuse is abuse and then we're never feeling loved, but always feeling broken. Very well done.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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It's is soooooooo true. I know of, I'm sad to say, a few
people who were literally abandoned by their mother and they have never felt secured or truly loved ... though one or two of them, put on a good show.
Take care, Judian. Bye ... LateBloomer
