Last Wish
What would you do if given one final wish?113 total reviews
Comment from kassey
I think you have a wonderful thing to look forward to as your last wish, I really don`t know what I would go for, I will have to thin about it. Your poem is, as usual, very well written with good rhythm, rhyme and presentation.
Excellent Kay
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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I think you have a wonderful thing to look forward to as your last wish, I really don`t know what I would go for, I will have to thin about it. Your poem is, as usual, very well written with good rhythm, rhyme and presentation.
Excellent Kay
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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thanks for a thoughtful and positive response :-)
Comment from skye
Whimsical, fun, and cute... even because of the subject, maybe moreso because of the subject.
The balloon is terrific. Your words are well chosen, paint the picture of desire of freedom, of one last glimpse of this life left behind.
I loved it.
Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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Whimsical, fun, and cute... even because of the subject, maybe moreso because of the subject.
The balloon is terrific. Your words are well chosen, paint the picture of desire of freedom, of one last glimpse of this life left behind.
I loved it.
Well done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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you are most gracious - thanks so much for your kind and positive review!
Comment from Poetic Friend
Interesting question, wrapped in perfect rhyme and meter. Many have pondered on this question countless times.
If only ....
You are such a busy writing bee.
Excellent and thought-provoiking write.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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Interesting question, wrapped in perfect rhyme and meter. Many have pondered on this question countless times.
If only ....
You are such a busy writing bee.
Excellent and thought-provoiking write.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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thank you so much for this thoughtful response :-)
Comment from A.Storey
Very well written. Interesting question: "What one last decision with dying breath will take me into eternity?" I had never thought about it before. Your poem seems to bring peace to death. No matter how one reaches heaven (hot air balloon, linger awhile in star-speckled skies, float round the moon) one will enjoy the ride. :)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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Very well written. Interesting question: "What one last decision with dying breath will take me into eternity?" I had never thought about it before. Your poem seems to bring peace to death. No matter how one reaches heaven (hot air balloon, linger awhile in star-speckled skies, float round the moon) one will enjoy the ride. :)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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thank you so much for this most reflective review :-)
Comment from unidian
As a dying wish, this is an ephemeral farewell which I would also enjoy. Skillful piece! (I wonder, do you want to go up in the balloon in case they don't give you Angel wings, Brooke:) Where I'm going, all I need is a fire extinguisher.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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As a dying wish, this is an ephemeral farewell which I would also enjoy. Skillful piece! (I wonder, do you want to go up in the balloon in case they don't give you Angel wings, Brooke:) Where I'm going, all I need is a fire extinguisher.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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You have made me laugh - not only do I not believe you would be singled out for hell, but I don't believe in hell, so from my viewpoint, you'd better be taking flying lessons :-) thank you!
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If there's no Hell ... does that mean we're all going to heaven? Hitler, Stalin, Barbie ... they're all gonna be there?!
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I know it is not a popular view but not one particular to only me either - yes, I do think everyone will be there - I rather imagine a moment of awareness God gives each of us upon dying, when we realize all the harm we've caused, intended or otherwise, as well as realizing all the good. Hitler is going to have much more of a shock in that awareness than you or I, but I believe he will receive this awareness and then rejoin his maker. God creates innocent babes, not killers. Life creates killers. I believe God sends us into the world perfect ( whether we have all our fingers and toes) and calls us home in that same form. There are those in my own congregation who think I'm crazy for this. Can't help it.
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Don't worry about those who think you're crazy ... take comfort from the fact that us agnostics think you're ALL crazy :-) lol Tom.
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my children think I'm a kook, and yet their little atheistic hearts love me so much. :-)
Comment from Jendowoz
This poem has a lovely message adew. What do you choose if death is eminent and how do you deal with it. The poem's words flowed well together and I thought the choice of colour added to the meaning in this piece of writing.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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This poem has a lovely message adew. What do you choose if death is eminent and how do you deal with it. The poem's words flowed well together and I thought the choice of colour added to the meaning in this piece of writing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem and its presentation :-) thank you!
Comment from EllieKaye
I think I'd have to say that I would stick around my family. : ) It would be fun to visit the great pyramids, but I'd want to go with my daughter! It's a fun idea to wonder about, and I truly enjoyed yoru poem!
Ellie
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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I think I'd have to say that I would stick around my family. : ) It would be fun to visit the great pyramids, but I'd want to go with my daughter! It's a fun idea to wonder about, and I truly enjoyed yoru poem!
Ellie
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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thank you very much for your thoughtful response :-)
Comment from HalfHoff
I think we all think about delaying the inevitable on a daily basis ... or try to find the answer to the big 'when will it happen' question. Certainly, none of us know or can change what awaits, and yet ... superb write again ... boy, have you ever caused my lil ol barain to work tonight! Lea Ann
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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I think we all think about delaying the inevitable on a daily basis ... or try to find the answer to the big 'when will it happen' question. Certainly, none of us know or can change what awaits, and yet ... superb write again ... boy, have you ever caused my lil ol barain to work tonight! Lea Ann
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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yours is a most insightful review - thank you. :-)
Comment from Janelle
A great poem and very well written and it got me thinking, what would I do. I guess you'd have to be in the position to choose and that choice would probably be the right one because it would be the one thought uppermost in your mind. I'd like to think that I'd have the people I love most in the world to come and share a meal with me and love, laugh and talk like we have often done over the years. That would be the best memory to take with me from this life to the next, I think. Regards J.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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A great poem and very well written and it got me thinking, what would I do. I guess you'd have to be in the position to choose and that choice would probably be the right one because it would be the one thought uppermost in your mind. I'd like to think that I'd have the people I love most in the world to come and share a meal with me and love, laugh and talk like we have often done over the years. That would be the best memory to take with me from this life to the next, I think. Regards J.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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You sound like a loving person - thank you for sharing. :-) Peace,Brooke
Comment from Lawrence Burne
I wish I knew more about the specifics of poetry to expound on this piece. Well crafted, I felt the reining peace of the moment, and to express it in this dificult format (the "skipping" rhyme aspect), I'm impressed.
Please keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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I wish I knew more about the specifics of poetry to expound on this piece. Well crafted, I felt the reining peace of the moment, and to express it in this dificult format (the "skipping" rhyme aspect), I'm impressed.
Please keep up the good work.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2008
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sounds like you know plenty enough! thank you :-)
