Wondrous Days
Perfect days are few and far between!95 total reviews
Comment from gucci
Hi there,
You know there are so many poems on this site that deserve accolades . . . But none as much as your beautiful work. This poem caresses the heart with a feather and makes one tingle all over. It is just perfect! Please don't change anything it's brilliant the way it is! Thank you for sharing - gucci
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Hi there,
You know there are so many poems on this site that deserve accolades . . . But none as much as your beautiful work. This poem caresses the heart with a feather and makes one tingle all over. It is just perfect! Please don't change anything it's brilliant the way it is! Thank you for sharing - gucci
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I am most flattered and heartened by your praise - thank you so much :-)
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Brooke this is another beautiful write and I love the lighthearted feel of it. You are so right my friend.
I forget you are from PA. My stepdad is from Pittsurgh and my step sibs hail from Somerset. I've been to Valley Forge and went to a hillclimb (motorcycles) in York back in the late seventies. I've travelled many times to Philly for one reason or another and as recently as last year I travelled to Pacinogal's house for a week and drove through a piece of your commonwealth (KY is one, too, as is Massachusettes, though I'm sure you know all this) on the way to Holden. It was a long way! The people were great. :)
Penny
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Brooke this is another beautiful write and I love the lighthearted feel of it. You are so right my friend.
I forget you are from PA. My stepdad is from Pittsurgh and my step sibs hail from Somerset. I've been to Valley Forge and went to a hillclimb (motorcycles) in York back in the late seventies. I've travelled many times to Philly for one reason or another and as recently as last year I travelled to Pacinogal's house for a week and drove through a piece of your commonwealth (KY is one, too, as is Massachusettes, though I'm sure you know all this) on the way to Holden. It was a long way! The people were great. :)
Penny
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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I'm glad you've had a chance to experience PA. I have visited KY and love it. I am so glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for yet another lovely review :-)
Comment from Hitcher
What a beautifully crafted ode it is friend and I seen you stamped your now famous poetic mark on it with your wonderful word selection. We are just heading into spring here in New Zealand but I can relate 100% to what you are saying having 4 and 6 year old girls.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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What a beautifully crafted ode it is friend and I seen you stamped your now famous poetic mark on it with your wonderful word selection. We are just heading into spring here in New Zealand but I can relate 100% to what you are saying having 4 and 6 year old girls.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2008
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Oh, your girls are just the perfect age for a day in the park - and New Zealand is sooooooo beautiful, at least from what I've seen on film :-) Thank you for this most warm and generous review!
Comment from starman
A beautiful poem. The best I've read tonight. You really evoked memories of a time where life was truly simple and wondrous to our minds. Very nostalgic, and a perfect verse for a perfect day.
:)s
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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A beautiful poem. The best I've read tonight. You really evoked memories of a time where life was truly simple and wondrous to our minds. Very nostalgic, and a perfect verse for a perfect day.
:)s
Comment Written 19-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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thank you so much for this most generous rating and your encouraging comments :-)
Comment from LegendD
A very joyful read, friend. The second stanza could use some minor revision at: "swing sets, a seesaw, a merry-go-round.' Granted there are more than a seesaw and a merry go round at the park.
Also @:
"on ponderous problems too deep to ponder,"
Try substituting the 'ponderous' with say 'myriad'??
Thanks for sharing. Your works,I deem, will take you some place very far.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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A very joyful read, friend. The second stanza could use some minor revision at: "swing sets, a seesaw, a merry-go-round.' Granted there are more than a seesaw and a merry go round at the park.
Also @:
"on ponderous problems too deep to ponder,"
Try substituting the 'ponderous' with say 'myriad'??
Thanks for sharing. Your works,I deem, will take you some place very far.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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I'm not sure what you mean by the swing set stanza comment - granted there are more than a seesaw... what is it that is off? thanks for reviewing
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Oh the "swingsets" followed by 'a see-saw,' and 'a merry-go-round'. I was thinking usually there are more seesaws at the park, and possibly more than one merry-go-round. The piece is good, but if one or two components fall short it might weaken it a bit.
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
This poem is well written with rhyme and meter and has a great sense of frolick both in its tonal quality and delivery. It invoked extremely pleasant, if not on the verge of giddy, childhood memories for me. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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This poem is well written with rhyme and meter and has a great sense of frolick both in its tonal quality and delivery. It invoked extremely pleasant, if not on the verge of giddy, childhood memories for me. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Giddy it was :-) Thanks so much for a most gracious review!!
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thank you
Comment from TerraDawn
Ah. *sigh* We had a day like that today and it made me so happy. I hope we have a day like your poem tomorrow as well. I don't know if it was intentional, I am sure it was by this point, but I really like the way you put grandglorious as one word. I may just start saying that one maself!! It was a very fun poem to read!!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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Ah. *sigh* We had a day like that today and it made me so happy. I hope we have a day like your poem tomorrow as well. I don't know if it was intentional, I am sure it was by this point, but I really like the way you put grandglorious as one word. I may just start saying that one maself!! It was a very fun poem to read!!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2008
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TerraDawn - I don't want to sound too forward and personal, but I LOVE YOU!!!!! Most people say nothing about grandglorious, and the several who have, have all mentioned it to point out kindly to me that the words should be separated, or hyphenated LOL One told me she had looked it up in the dictionary before pointing out to me it really isn't a word. And then came you, the one I now love at first sight, or not sight. LOL You've made my day. Thank you for liking the rest of the poem, too ;-)
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HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! ok....this made my morning. You make me laugh. I, personally, thought it added a very fun touch!!! They just don't know a great new word when they read one.
*Looks outside* I think today will be a grandglorious day!!! (I get to go wine tasting with some friends.....I it really will be!!)
Comment from jmyron
A wondorous day deserves a perfict score. Great form, great rythm,and a wondorous content. (Have you ever noticed that the better the poem is, the harder it is to satisfy the Review Nazi's)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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A wondorous day deserves a perfict score. Great form, great rythm,and a wondorous content. (Have you ever noticed that the better the poem is, the harder it is to satisfy the Review Nazi's)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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Oh, yeah - I have come up with a couple of ways to draw the review out, based on what I've seen others do. You should have told me how nice my illustration is and how well it goes with the theme of the poem! Some people even compliment the choice of font color and background. That alone can get you two lines !! Thanks for a long enough review! Oh, and for all those stars :-)
Comment from TKField
This charming poem harks back to a more innocent time of carefree childhood. I liked your imagery and rhymes. very well written and uplifting. A good positive read. I really liked it.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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This charming poem harks back to a more innocent time of carefree childhood. I liked your imagery and rhymes. very well written and uplifting. A good positive read. I really liked it.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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I'm so glad you like it. Thank you for a gracious review :-)
Comment from Juleeann
Do you know why I enjoyed this poem a great deal? Because I was right there with you enjoying the day as you described it. Simply beautiful.
Carry on
Juleeann
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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Do you know why I enjoyed this poem a great deal? Because I was right there with you enjoying the day as you described it. Simply beautiful.
Carry on
Juleeann
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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That is a totally cool thing to say to me!!! Thank you :-)
