Murder One
Jury Duty - Is she telling the truth?78 total reviews
Comment from Cairn Destop
A most interesting twist on the lady scorned. Though the lady did have to lie during Voir Dier. Makes you wonder about her credibility. But then nobody else knew what the readers learned. A well done twist. No SPAG detected.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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A most interesting twist on the lady scorned. Though the lady did have to lie during Voir Dier. Makes you wonder about her credibility. But then nobody else knew what the readers learned. A well done twist. No SPAG detected.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much! I am honored to receive a review from you - I think you are one of the best writers here! Glad you enjoyed it.
Jan
Comment from Scribbelini
Crafty very crafty, I love this story. It's well though out and has just the right twist. I don't know that I would say Daryl put out a hit. Those guys are good and she would probably be dead. As well as she knows the mob a threat would probably suffice. Think? Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Crafty very crafty, I love this story. It's well though out and has just the right twist. I don't know that I would say Daryl put out a hit. Those guys are good and she would probably be dead. As well as she knows the mob a threat would probably suffice. Think? Well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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I did think of that, but figured seeing as she was secreted into the Witness Protection Program, she was probably okay. So glad you enjoyed it. I really appreciate the review!
Jan
Comment from Nightwind1
Excellent! I am very impressed with the direction that you too this. I wonder just what real precations are taken to make sure that jurors are not someone in the witness protection program?
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Excellent! I am very impressed with the direction that you too this. I wonder just what real precations are taken to make sure that jurors are not someone in the witness protection program?
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much! I have no idea but it would be a good thing to check out! LOL
Jan
Comment from sharon fallis
and pour(ed) myself a cup-----missing
This turned out to be a radical trial. Very very good write. I thoroughly enjoyed it from the first to the last. Especially at the end. The bit about having facial surgery and changing her name. Loved the intrigue in this one. Sharon
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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and pour(ed) myself a cup-----missing
This turned out to be a radical trial. Very very good write. I thoroughly enjoyed it from the first to the last. Especially at the end. The bit about having facial surgery and changing her name. Loved the intrigue in this one. Sharon
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you, Sharon! This is written in present tense, so pour is correct. :-) So glad you enjoyed the story.
Jan
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Hi Jan:
I've always managed to avoid jury duty one way or another.
I loved the humor your descriptions injected into this piece, especially the bulldog. Your use of contractions makes the dialog crisp and much more believable. The pace is excellent.
Note:
[ 'Daddy's sitting up in the balcony.(-" +') ] Needs a single quote.
I really enjoyed this work. Best wishes in the contest. This story should certainly stand a good chance of winning.
Sue-z-Q
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Hi Jan:
I've always managed to avoid jury duty one way or another.
I loved the humor your descriptions injected into this piece, especially the bulldog. Your use of contractions makes the dialog crisp and much more believable. The pace is excellent.
Note:
[ 'Daddy's sitting up in the balcony.(-" +') ] Needs a single quote.
I really enjoyed this work. Best wishes in the contest. This story should certainly stand a good chance of winning.
Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you dear Sue-z-Q! I am so glad you liked it. I fixed the nit! :-)
Jan
Comment from chesli
Woah... didn't see that coming! Absolutely wonderful! You are a clever, clever writer. I enjoyed this very much and best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Woah... didn't see that coming! Absolutely wonderful! You are a clever, clever writer. I enjoyed this very much and best of luck to you.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Jan
Comment from skye
Your story is interesting, well written, filled with details and great insight.
The twist at the end was surprising, making the whole thing that much stronger.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Your story is interesting, well written, filled with details and great insight.
The twist at the end was surprising, making the whole thing that much stronger.
Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) I am thrilled to hear how much you liked it.
Jan
Comment from LegendD
When does voting on this begin again?
Lady, you have won this one. And I just had an amazing time reading this! Love the way the story ends.
I applaud the come-back girl! Now that is what is hottt!!
[PS: I was too into the story to notice any errors. I counsel myself to re-read for review, an excuse for a second round at the enjoyment.tee-hee]
Fantastic read, an even more fantastic plot!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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When does voting on this begin again?
Lady, you have won this one. And I just had an amazing time reading this! Love the way the story ends.
I applaud the come-back girl! Now that is what is hottt!!
[PS: I was too into the story to notice any errors. I counsel myself to re-read for review, an excuse for a second round at the enjoyment.tee-hee]
Fantastic read, an even more fantastic plot!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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LOL Thank you so much! You have officially made my day. Just check the voting booths. :-)
Jan
Comment from empire76
I find it interesting that the two entries I've read show the 'odd one out' as having and unfair advantage. I guess that's a good way of convincing the others. I guess there isn't too much room to manoeuvre with 1500 words
:-)
Good story. I liked the twin brother angle
Empi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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I find it interesting that the two entries I've read show the 'odd one out' as having and unfair advantage. I guess that's a good way of convincing the others. I guess there isn't too much room to manoeuvre with 1500 words
:-)
Good story. I liked the twin brother angle
Empi
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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:-) I did laugh when I read the other entry after I posted this. You are so correct - 1500 words does put a limit on creativity! LOL
Thanks for the great review!
Jan
Comment from Korton
This is an excellent story, well written and well thought out. Although it worked out well in this case, it does give one pause to wonder about the criminal justice system. Very well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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This is an excellent story, well written and well thought out. Although it worked out well in this case, it does give one pause to wonder about the criminal justice system. Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) I've had the same "pause" more than once.
Jan
