Comment from Schizoid Poet

Excellent

Very nice. All of those silly words in there had a very certain effect throughout the whole thing. they kept a balance between a limmerick and a barfight. have a good one.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

I am enjoying your categorization of this poem. LOL Thanks!

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Hi, Pearl this is simply hilarious. You have beautifully added spice to this in poetry. Some of these words aren't new to me, I heard them mentioned around by the boys. "he skedaddled out the door" I've heard mentioned a lot.
Love to read more of your stuff.
Sylvia

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Glad you know some of these words - some of the younguns on the site still think I'm making them up! LOL Thanks for this kind review :-)

Comment from davidray

Excellent

Yes, pearl.
They always say laughter is good for the soul, and you're certainly giving us this opportunity, aren't ya? Haven't heard the word 'schnook' (I think it was always aimed at Foghorn Leghorn) since I made a habit of watching Looney Tunes when I was younger. Oh, wait ... still do with my kids. Enjoyable all the way through.
Thanks.
David

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

I'm so glad you had fun as that was my one and only goal! Thank you. :-)

Comment from starkat

Excellent

Hi adewpearl...Another delightful fun romp..from Jake's shenanigans to where he finally skedaddled, this story poem was a hoot. Again, I love all the fun, wacky and weird words you incorporate in your poems.

I'll have to look up the word, "bumptious"..but I was thinking ...I had a cat once named Bunky...short for rambunktious (not sure if that's the correct spelling)..I think that word might also fit...

You've never seen such a brouhaha
or heard such an awful rumpus,
all because of a jokester
who acted a bit rambunktious

Keep up the fun creative writing. Your words set my mind on a verbal and imaginative whirleygig.
Again, excellent job with the alliteration, assonance, and turn of phrase..

Enjoyed the ride..
Cheers,
starkat

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

bumptious means pushy thank you for a most thoughtful review - glad you're enjoying

reply by starkat on 15-Sep-2008

"bumptious" is the perfect word. Thanks for the definition.

Comment from Fish

Excellent

I like this a lot. It seems so casually written,
spontaneous. Funny and fluffy. Though, I have
to say, I will enjoy your posts more when
you write something with a bit more substance. Yours,
Fish

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2008

Ah, substance - you must try Courage, Two Memories of Childhood Innocence, My Father's Voice,
Summer Skies, Silence and Snapshot. I hope they meet up to your expectations :-) In the meantime, I'm glad you enjoyed this. :-) Please let me know what you think of the more substantive posts.

Comment from GregoryC

Excellent

Great tongue-in-cheek humor made me giggle right from the beginning to the end with a wise and witty formula for laughter. Sort of reminds me of everyone's favorite children's author - Theodor Seuss Geisel and his Seuss-isms...

"Today you are You, that is truer than true. There is no one alive who is Youer than You." or
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Yourlines does justice to this prescription for laughter:

Both punches and accusations flew
as people ran higgledy-piggledy.
To think this hoopla all was caused
by bumbling, brash tomfoolery.

Loved it.

Gregory

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2008

To be compared in any way to Dr. Seuss is an honor and I thank you deeply!

Comment from jmyron

Excellent

Ahhhhh. . . Tis the queen of the nonsense rhymes. I must now add the title the duches of humor. Don't we all know [explicitive deleted] holes like that?

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2008

Duchess of humor - ah, you are going to give me a swelled head! :-) Thank you and thank you again
!

Comment from Moira's Amethyst

Excellent

I am glad to hear of your new found friends here on this site. How long have you been around these parts anyway? Ah, no matter, you definitly fit in. Excellent portrayal. Please, take care.

Poetry's Protege

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2008

I have been on the site for two whole weeks now :-) Thanks for your review!

Comment from judybonin

Excellent

i really enjoyed reading. the humor was there. i loved the choice of words all throughout. the only thing that made me stumble was that schnook was used twice. only my opinion. i think that this poem is origional and clever and i am glad that i stopped to read.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2008

yeah, I'm working on replacing one of the schnooks - you and a few others are absolutely right about that! :-) Thank you.

Comment from Trena One Who Cares

Excellent

Hi Pearl this trick on words poetry is very lively and quick. Good rhythm and rhyme is used throughout this poem. The flow is smooth and easy. Nicely done. Trena

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2008

I'm so glad you enjoyed, and thank you yet again!